Perspective
a 3 Line poem28 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This reminds me of the alarm clocks I saw when I was very little. I think
these might become retro soon. We still have a standard hand clock on our kitchen wall.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Melissa,
This reminds me of the alarm clocks I saw when I was very little. I think
these might become retro soon. We still have a standard hand clock on our kitchen wall.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thanks so much Joan for your thoughts. I love old clocks and wanted to use them in a verse. :)
Melissa
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Don't mention it< Melissa.
Joan
Comment from tempeste
Time is man made ..our ancestors used the moon, later water clocks were used by the Romans and Greeks... devices using the sun followed ..Galileo built one of the first pendulum clocks.
I have an old pendulum and I love to hear it tick-tock..it's been in our family for 45 odd years ..once my papa' had to take it in for a minor repair and the watch worker tried to buy it from him but pa said "No way"
....when my father passed away I " inherited " his favourite old wrist watch which still needs to be wound .. it's a lovely feeling to have it .
I also have my own with a transparent case back .its fascinating to see the mechanisms move.
I like your smart use of the word ...pass ..
a....time that passes
b...troublesome times that pass
c...the use of winding clocks will pass
a clever well thought out poem ..
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Time is man made ..our ancestors used the moon, later water clocks were used by the Romans and Greeks... devices using the sun followed ..Galileo built one of the first pendulum clocks.
I have an old pendulum and I love to hear it tick-tock..it's been in our family for 45 odd years ..once my papa' had to take it in for a minor repair and the watch worker tried to buy it from him but pa said "No way"
....when my father passed away I " inherited " his favourite old wrist watch which still needs to be wound .. it's a lovely feeling to have it .
I also have my own with a transparent case back .its fascinating to see the mechanisms move.
I like your smart use of the word ...pass ..
a....time that passes
b...troublesome times that pass
c...the use of winding clocks will pass
a clever well thought out poem ..
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Hello Franca. I loved reading your comments and the stories behind your special clocks and watch. So cool!!! Thank you for your lovely thoughts you sent my way :)
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
I appreciate your "clocks" metaphor and your optimism about the "troublesome times" passing. Thank you for adding the intriguing, parallel picture and the inviting title. Best wishes in the 3-Line Poetry Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I appreciate your "clocks" metaphor and your optimism about the "troublesome times" passing. Thank you for adding the intriguing, parallel picture and the inviting title. Best wishes in the 3-Line Poetry Contest- Joan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hello Joan. Thank you. I am so glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
One can only hope, yeah?! ;) Love the simplicity and the introspection in this one, Melissa -- as almost always, your writing's beyond the words on the page: love it! ;) And I'm guessing you're gearing up to be busy with Spring on the horizon - just don't forget to grace us with your pen every now and again! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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One can only hope, yeah?! ;) Love the simplicity and the introspection in this one, Melissa -- as almost always, your writing's beyond the words on the page: love it! ;) And I'm guessing you're gearing up to be busy with Spring on the horizon - just don't forget to grace us with your pen every now and again! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Yvette. You are perceptive to see that I have been away, but it is because I have been hosting parties left and right it seems. Next Tuesday is the last one here and hopefully I will become active again on FS. I have signed up for the April FS Rhyming class. I always love to learn from Jim. Thanks so much for your lovely review!! Hugs
Melissa
Comment from Drew Delaney
I used to love to hear the ticking of the clock but with the new digitals, there is no more ticking.
Good thinking with the antique clocks. It is troublesome times. Good personification here.
Drew
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I used to love to hear the ticking of the clock but with the new digitals, there is no more ticking.
Good thinking with the antique clocks. It is troublesome times. Good personification here.
Drew
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hello Drew. Thanks for the reminder of the comfort of ticking clocks ~ and those soft chimes too. Glad you liked it and I appreciate your comments. :)
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Melissa,
I have been thinking of you
since I haven't seen you on
FS recently.
-The syllable count is good,
and the topic and imagery
are effective.
-Good use of alliteration, too.
-I like the idea of the clocks
observing "troublesome times,"
and I agree with your conclusion;
at some point I think they do have to pass.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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-Nice image, Melissa,
I have been thinking of you
since I haven't seen you on
FS recently.
-The syllable count is good,
and the topic and imagery
are effective.
-Good use of alliteration, too.
-I like the idea of the clocks
observing "troublesome times,"
and I agree with your conclusion;
at some point I think they do have to pass.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Pam. Thanks so much for the kind thoughts my way. I have been absent quite a bit ~ so very busy elsewhere. I truly thank you for your lovely comments.
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. Hope things get less hectic for you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written three-line poem about time that goes by usually also change our circumstances from bad to good. We can always look forward to change especially when we go through a tough time, it will not last forever.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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A very well-written three-line poem about time that goes by usually also change our circumstances from bad to good. We can always look forward to change especially when we go through a tough time, it will not last forever.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Sandra. Thanks so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done, Melissa. Antique clocks are fun and every person should have at least one in my opinion, because they remain cool in the face of troubled times.
This is a fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the CC.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Very well done, Melissa. Antique clocks are fun and every person should have at least one in my opinion, because they remain cool in the face of troubled times.
This is a fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the CC.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Gloria. I chose antique clocks because they have seen so much time pass and they still remain observant and wise. Thank you for the lovely comments!!
Melissa
Comment from Sanku
I loved this. Antique clocks watching the life continuing and and doing their jobs correctly. The third line was fantastic. This too shall pass -how often we had to say these words to ourselves!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I loved this. Antique clocks watching the life continuing and and doing their jobs correctly. The third line was fantastic. This too shall pass -how often we had to say these words to ourselves!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hello Sanku... thank you so very much for the lovely thoughts on my verse Perspective. I am delighted you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
This one is so clever, Melissa. Whatever made you think of that last line? I think you have the winner here. It's original, and I do love a good play on words. I never have any suggestions for your beautiful poems, but I think that I would take away the comma after "sure." It's unnecessary and distracting.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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This one is so clever, Melissa. Whatever made you think of that last line? I think you have the winner here. It's original, and I do love a good play on words. I never have any suggestions for your beautiful poems, but I think that I would take away the comma after "sure." It's unnecessary and distracting.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hi Debbie. Thanks for your input and suggestion... I will look at it again and see how it fits without that comma. I am so glad you liked it!!
Melissa
