Broken
Old, worn out, broken.66 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem conveys both excellent writing and great sadness. The words you use are very powerful. Due to some pretty bad occurrences over the last ten years, I remember telling my sister that I was broken. I am now mostly healed. Your poem really resonated with me. Thank you.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This poem conveys both excellent writing and great sadness. The words you use are very powerful. Due to some pretty bad occurrences over the last ten years, I remember telling my sister that I was broken. I am now mostly healed. Your poem really resonated with me. Thank you.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Therese: thank you so much for reading, commenting and for the bright six stars. I am sorry to hear that you had difficult times. Linda
Comment from nancyjam
A very sad but we'll written poem. It conveys the suffering and sadness
of the speaker - seemingly without hope - She claims a brokenness of spirit - Hopefully this person will come to realize there is hope and happiness available. Trust in God will bring that about.
Nice use of metaphor to convey feelings.
Nancy
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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A very sad but we'll written poem. It conveys the suffering and sadness
of the speaker - seemingly without hope - She claims a brokenness of spirit - Hopefully this person will come to realize there is hope and happiness available. Trust in God will bring that about.
Nice use of metaphor to convey feelings.
Nancy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you, Nancy. Linda
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
You have conveyed a message of a shattered heart and soul, in a lilting poem. The words are succinct. If you are speaking of yourself, stop and think of everything good that you have experienced and pull yourself back to a hopeful place. If it is someone else's experience, you have been successful with your writing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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You have conveyed a message of a shattered heart and soul, in a lilting poem. The words are succinct. If you are speaking of yourself, stop and think of everything good that you have experienced and pull yourself back to a hopeful place. If it is someone else's experience, you have been successful with your writing.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Raffaelina, Linda
Comment from Janet Foor
This is such a sad, somber and emotional poem Linda. Wonderful metaphors and profound imagery in your words. I have days when I can identify with the sentiment. Old, worn out, broken. Thank God for His loving care that gets me through it all. He truly is enough.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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This is such a sad, somber and emotional poem Linda. Wonderful metaphors and profound imagery in your words. I have days when I can identify with the sentiment. Old, worn out, broken. Thank God for His loving care that gets me through it all. He truly is enough.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Yes, Janet, He puts the smile back on my face along with the kind words of a few friends. Thanks for reading, commenting and for all those bright stars! Linda
Comment from Alchera
The reading key of this poem is the second Line of the fifth stanza where the poetess's mind still at her life's dolorous, useless daily waiting which did not come and she is still hoping of notwithstanding that her life little by little going by. Happiness is life's ephemeral hope which rarely prevail over unhappiness. Life has always been a thorns path for every one in a way or in another.May God bless You! I did like all the thematic subject.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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The reading key of this poem is the second Line of the fifth stanza where the poetess's mind still at her life's dolorous, useless daily waiting which did not come and she is still hoping of notwithstanding that her life little by little going by. Happiness is life's ephemeral hope which rarely prevail over unhappiness. Life has always been a thorns path for every one in a way or in another.May God bless You! I did like all the thematic subject.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Alchera, oh, please throw in a few more 15 letter words, and then rhyme them all. Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from Raul1
Sometimes it feels like you're broken, but you aren't. I think that you did well in this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Sometimes it feels like you're broken, but you aren't. I think that you did well in this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Raul1. Linda
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You're welcome
Comment from drjoba
This is a nice poem. The picture is apt, the lines are clear, the flow is good, and I love the rhyme.
the message is obvious, nothing more to say. Broken
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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This is a nice poem. The picture is apt, the lines are clear, the flow is good, and I love the rhyme.
the message is obvious, nothing more to say. Broken
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you, dr joba. Linda
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You're welcome
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You used great imagery, Linda, with your poem. The words are well-chosen. Readers can feel your emotion. The art is a good choice to pair with your words. Old cars and antique clocks were made better years ago. They are valuable as is the wisdom of people of your generation. Please don't feel as if you have nothing to share. You do and hopefully you will continue writing. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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You used great imagery, Linda, with your poem. The words are well-chosen. Readers can feel your emotion. The art is a good choice to pair with your words. Old cars and antique clocks were made better years ago. They are valuable as is the wisdom of people of your generation. Please don't feel as if you have nothing to share. You do and hopefully you will continue writing. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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As always, thank you for your words of wisdom. Linda
Comment from Janetsue
You've presented strong imagery in this excellent poem about continuing grief. It is something I think everyone can relate to who has suffered a major loss in their lives and feel the weight of passing years.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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You've presented strong imagery in this excellent poem about continuing grief. It is something I think everyone can relate to who has suffered a major loss in their lives and feel the weight of passing years.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you, Spangle. Linda
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, livelylinda,
. ....Broken.....is a beautiful poem and it was a pleasure to read. I love the presentation too. After my husband divorced me, I felt broken for. Years. Good job my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Hello, livelylinda,
. ....Broken.....is a beautiful poem and it was a pleasure to read. I love the presentation too. After my husband divorced me, I felt broken for. Years. Good job my friend.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Gypsy, it is a very bad feeling but we are still here. Linda
