Broken
Old, worn out, broken.66 total reviews
Comment from lance michaels
I know how you feel Linda. I too feel broken. I've put a million miles under these heels, and I'm just worn down. This antique body is on it's last leg. Very powerful piece of poetry!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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I know how you feel Linda. I too feel broken. I've put a million miles under these heels, and I'm just worn down. This antique body is on it's last leg. Very powerful piece of poetry!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Lance, I will be 72 very soon and am angry about how I have slowed down, can no longer do what I once did, etc. I'm with ya, buddy! Thanks for reading and commenting and for the six stars. Keep safe. Linda
Comment from Susan Larson
These words really touched me "crash debris glued back together
but lives remain broken forever ." They describe that forever broken feeling that you have to experience to really know. The picture goes so well with the feeling.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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These words really touched me "crash debris glued back together
but lives remain broken forever ." They describe that forever broken feeling that you have to experience to really know. The picture goes so well with the feeling.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you Susan, for reading and commenting. Linda
Comment from estory
Good use of form here. I liked how you used fragmented language to provide the framework for the theme of broken attitude. Some interesting imagery too; the airplane crash really sticks out, and that antique clock winding down, the life blood seeping out. There's also great tension coming through in the tone. estory
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Good use of form here. I liked how you used fragmented language to provide the framework for the theme of broken attitude. Some interesting imagery too; the airplane crash really sticks out, and that antique clock winding down, the life blood seeping out. There's also great tension coming through in the tone. estory
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, estory, for reading and such a fine review. Linda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That picture is as haunting as your words in this really sad poem. I wonder how many can relate to this on Fanstory. Your descriptive words plainly show the depth of despair the woman is feeling, you couldn't have written it better. Very well done! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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That picture is as haunting as your words in this really sad poem. I wonder how many can relate to this on Fanstory. Your descriptive words plainly show the depth of despair the woman is feeling, you couldn't have written it better. Very well done! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Sandra! Linda
Comment from Cindy Decker
A very sad, compelling poem. I have felt broken many times in my life. The photo you use is very effective. Your ending is very strong, my spirit is waning. Spirit could mean, to me, emotional well-being, or as part of your soul. Very good work.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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A very sad, compelling poem. I have felt broken many times in my life. The photo you use is very effective. Your ending is very strong, my spirit is waning. Spirit could mean, to me, emotional well-being, or as part of your soul. Very good work.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Cindy, for reading and sharing your thoughts. Linda
Comment from royowen
Oh dear, this sounds incredibly sad Linda, I hope it's just a sad poem, and not an actual "event" dear girl. Beautifully written dear friend, sad but articulate, you are a good soul, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Oh dear, this sounds incredibly sad Linda, I hope it's just a sad poem, and not an actual "event" dear girl. Beautifully written dear friend, sad but articulate, you are a good soul, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Hi Roy: actually, it was an 'event' at the time I wrote it. But, like everything else, I have survived. I appreciate your kind words. Linda
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Thank you
Comment from RShipp
'Being Heartbroken' was a prefect picture to illustrate your poem.
The first lines ... " like engine in an old car someone drove it way too far"
are so descriptive for the explanation of just 'getting old'.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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'Being Heartbroken' was a prefect picture to illustrate your poem.
The first lines ... " like engine in an old car someone drove it way too far"
are so descriptive for the explanation of just 'getting old'.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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RShipp: thanks so much for reading and commenting. Linda
Comment from Minglement
This poem is too heartbreakingly real to say I enjoyed it but it is a good write about a subject of more and more concern as we age. You made good comparisons to old cars, clocks and airplanes. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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This poem is too heartbreakingly real to say I enjoyed it but it is a good write about a subject of more and more concern as we age. You made good comparisons to old cars, clocks and airplanes. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Minglement: thanks so much for reading and commenting. Linda
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My pleasure, Marcia. Take care :)
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I always enjoy your writing Linda. A great comparison age to a vehicle especially when they don't run and you're feeling a bit of the tune up needed to keep going. I'd say though my girl you have many years left to engage and support, contribute and teach those of us that need the teaching lol! Loved it. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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I always enjoy your writing Linda. A great comparison age to a vehicle especially when they don't run and you're feeling a bit of the tune up needed to keep going. I'd say though my girl you have many years left to engage and support, contribute and teach those of us that need the teaching lol! Loved it. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Deborah: thanks for reading and for your kind words. About age, I turn 72 this year and should have another ten years to go except for a weak and diseased heart and congestive heart failure. So, when I wake up every morning, I thank God for one more day. Linda
Comment from Gloria ....
This is so good, Linda. The sparse lines comparing oneself to a car with too much mileage or a time clock that doesn't keep time and no amount of super glue will put it back together carries the metaphor of "broken " forward. Your bio is most interesting and I am sure you have some excellent poems and stories in your archives.
Really enjoyed this a lot, so keep writing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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This is so good, Linda. The sparse lines comparing oneself to a car with too much mileage or a time clock that doesn't keep time and no amount of super glue will put it back together carries the metaphor of "broken " forward. Your bio is most interesting and I am sure you have some excellent poems and stories in your archives.
Really enjoyed this a lot, so keep writing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Gloria, for reading and for your kind words. Everything I have ever written is here in my portfolio. I think there may be a couple of good ones . . .LOL Linda
