Night Terrors
Scary things in the dark12 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
I love your artwork. It's so cute. It takes me back to my childhood days. Your poem is well-written, interesting, very scary. your great word choice paints a vivid picture of the undead in the reader's mind. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I love your artwork. It's so cute. It takes me back to my childhood days. Your poem is well-written, interesting, very scary. your great word choice paints a vivid picture of the undead in the reader's mind. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you dear. Rox
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Haha! Very cool! You sound quite a fearful warning for all! Ugh! To wake up and not realize a Vampire took your life the night before! I wish they'd give us a choice once in a while! LoL! Love your Snoopy and Woodstock pic! xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Haha! Very cool! You sound quite a fearful warning for all! Ugh! To wake up and not realize a Vampire took your life the night before! I wish they'd give us a choice once in a while! LoL! Love your Snoopy and Woodstock pic! xoxo
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I don't think it would be fun to wake up as a vampire. They're so pale. =] Thank you dear.
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Haha! Yeh, I?d have to throw all my make-up away! (Not that I wear much, but I like a touch of blush and mascara-LoL)
Comment from w.j.debi
I hope Woodstock and Snoopy trade off so poor Woodstock gets some rest. What a thing for these characters to be afraid of in Peanuts land.
This is a fun little satire with cute rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I hope Woodstock and Snoopy trade off so poor Woodstock gets some rest. What a thing for these characters to be afraid of in Peanuts land.
This is a fun little satire with cute rhymes.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I hope they trade off too or Woodstock my end up a zombie which is much worse than a vampire. =] Thank you.
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Love it!
Comment from royowen
Well done Rox, it's so good to see you again. A beautifully composed, put together with a lovely way, I have to alert the dog to vampires on the rampage I think. Well done beautifully written rhyming couplets, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Well done Rox, it's so good to see you again. A beautifully composed, put together with a lovely way, I have to alert the dog to vampires on the rampage I think. Well done beautifully written rhyming couplets, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I do hope you dogs keep you safe from all vampire attacks. =] It is just no fun being a vampire. Thank you.
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That?s true, I like my steak well done
Comment from Sally Law
Surprising and very unique, dear Rox. I am glad for this fun poem. The Woodstock cartoon is so adorable and sets the mood. I know a few people who really believe this stuff though and it's alarming. How do they really sleep? I'd wear a turtleneck every night.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Surprising and very unique, dear Rox. I am glad for this fun poem. The Woodstock cartoon is so adorable and sets the mood. I know a few people who really believe this stuff though and it's alarming. How do they really sleep? I'd wear a turtleneck every night.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Yes there are people who think they are vampires out there. People seem to think they can be anything these days, even the opposite sex or both!! A sad a fallen world. It needs lots of prayer. =[ Thank you my dear and keep wearing those turtlenecks. =]
Comment from robyn corum
Rox,
What a fun post! I loved the story but the ending MADE IT. hahaha This was just so cool.
Isn't it also fun to see where we get inspiration?
Enjoyable post. Thank you!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Rox,
What a fun post! I loved the story but the ending MADE IT. hahaha This was just so cool.
Isn't it also fun to see where we get inspiration?
Enjoyable post. Thank you!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I do get inspiration from the weirdest places. =] But I love Snoopy, I have a ton of tee shirts, even a purse and tennies. I'm a fan. Thanks dear.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I actually really liked these two lines:
Pick your coffin, sturdy with elbow room.
Satin lining, and dim lamp for gloom. I almost think, and this is my opinion, that they would be good opening lines on their own. This reads kind of like a 'how-to' for new vampires. Because, you know, vampires don't start out all-knowing and all-powerful. They need some instructions and reinforcement and praise just like the rest of us. Cute graphic.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I actually really liked these two lines:
Pick your coffin, sturdy with elbow room.
Satin lining, and dim lamp for gloom. I almost think, and this is my opinion, that they would be good opening lines on their own. This reads kind of like a 'how-to' for new vampires. Because, you know, vampires don't start out all-knowing and all-powerful. They need some instructions and reinforcement and praise just like the rest of us. Cute graphic.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Maybe I should write a book on how to be a vampire.=] It would be very short as I'm not very good at it. Though I do prefer being up all night and sleeping during the day. =] Thank you my dear.
Comment from Michele Harber
You've definitely been venturing into scary territory lately, Rox. This is very well written, detailed and, while not quite frightening, since you write it with such a light touch, certainly anxiety-inducing.
Your rhymes work well, as always. I've periodically challenged you on meter and flow and, while they're still not perfect overall, I notice that a number of individual couplets are written in perfect meter, with matching word count and syllable stress. In other words, you seem to be working on that issue, and the improvement is noticeable.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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You've definitely been venturing into scary territory lately, Rox. This is very well written, detailed and, while not quite frightening, since you write it with such a light touch, certainly anxiety-inducing.
Your rhymes work well, as always. I've periodically challenged you on meter and flow and, while they're still not perfect overall, I notice that a number of individual couplets are written in perfect meter, with matching word count and syllable stress. In other words, you seem to be working on that issue, and the improvement is noticeable.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Yes my meter is off at times, but so are most things about me. =] My next poem is scary too. I think I have a dark side. Thank you dear. Rox
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Join the crowd, Rox. At my house, "normal" is considered a dirty word. Incidentally, I should be the last person to complain about a dark side. I won a contest with a poem in which the narrator admitted to committing murder. Can't get much darker than that.
Comment from Teri7
Rox, This is a very cute and well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about scary things in the dark. You used very cute and very good descriptive words and loved the Woodstock imagery. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Rox, This is a very cute and well written rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about scary things in the dark. You used very cute and very good descriptive words and loved the Woodstock imagery. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I love Snoopy. =] Thank you my dear. Rox
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. The poem does rhyme, and I see you found the presentation tools: having an illustration and having changed the background and text color. I would recommend trying to smooth out the meter now. Good luck with your contest entry!
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Thank you for sharing this poem. The poem does rhyme, and I see you found the presentation tools: having an illustration and having changed the background and text color. I would recommend trying to smooth out the meter now. Good luck with your contest entry!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I did work on the meter some more. My meter is always off, but most things about me are off. =] Thanks so much.
