Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

This sounds to be like a promising continuance to a very interesting story. By the sounds of it, there's going to be a lot of twists and turns throughout. I look forward to your next post.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020

Thanks, MD

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ha, I always love your crisp writing style and terrific sense of humour, Bill. The last line of this update of what happened before in that no one can be trusted has all the earmarks of an excellent tale to continue.

Looking forward to more.

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020

Thank you, Gloria, for the encouraging words. Bill

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Let's go! I am all strapped in and ready to take that ride. I am somewhat of an action junkie so you know I am ready to go. I read the previous stories and was totally jacked by the time I finished them. I am more than ready to pick where you left off.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thanks, nomi, for the shot in the arm. Bill

Comment from samandlancelot

Excellent

Bill,

Excellent preparation for your story. Although I haven't read your previous story of "Baker's Dozen," I had no trouble getting the gist of your current story and characters. It's a good setup. Good writing style.

Patricia

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Thank you, Patricia, for giving it a look. Bill

Comment from Gypsymooncat

Excellent

This sounds like an interesting story, and I'm glad to have stumbled across your "Review" as a prep for its continuation. I enjoyed what I read, but did find a couple of things that need fixing:

"Manuel Kontroz or Manny, is a hi(g)hly..." highly is misspelled here.

The two para's that start "It begins..." - need a line break between them,
and here: "Now in the next story..."

I was going to rate a four, but decided NAH. I think I'll be looking forward to the next chapter in this story!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

Sorry about the spacing, I was trying to be brief. It is more an advertisement than a chapter in a story. Thank you, though, for your close reading.

reply by Gypsymooncat on 06-Mar-2020

No apology needed. I didn't know whether or not to point that out, but decided to. Glad you're okay with it!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Thanks for the much needed re-cap, Bill. What about the physical connection? Wasn't Sam and Manny related? Who were the twins that were lab-created?

" is a hihly spiritual" (highly?)

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020

I need my eyes fixed. Yes hihly is highly except, gee, I forgot a G. To answer your question, C.C. Connor and Millie are twins. Thank you for responding to this update. You are probably the only one who will. Sniff.

reply by lyenochka on 06-Mar-2020

I think it has promise like for a TV series.