Morning Crisp Air
Haiku Contest Entry 4/7/521 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
I strive to accomplish this more traditional Japanese Haiku version. I am familiar with your kigo source. For me, the satori line is often my bugaboo. While not member of your society, I do follow the free site: theHaikuFoundation.org. I really enjoy this poetry form(at).
Thanks for posting your Haiku. Surely, the Haiku purists will be inspired by your entry.
Mark
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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I strive to accomplish this more traditional Japanese Haiku version. I am familiar with your kigo source. For me, the satori line is often my bugaboo. While not member of your society, I do follow the free site: theHaikuFoundation.org. I really enjoy this poetry form(at).
Thanks for posting your Haiku. Surely, the Haiku purists will be inspired by your entry.
Mark
Comment Written 02-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review. :) I will have to check your haiku. :)
gypsy
Comment from Therese Caron
Your image is stunning, obviously chosen to illustrate your lovely words in the Haiku. I love the sound of Morning air blankets. This is a lovely and well-written Haiku.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Your image is stunning, obviously chosen to illustrate your lovely words in the Haiku. I love the sound of Morning air blankets. This is a lovely and well-written Haiku.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
Comment from RShipp
What an interesting painting to go with your haiku.
Your well chosen words pulled me into the scenery provided by the painting and I found myself being carried into a story yet untold.
Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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What an interesting painting to go with your haiku.
Your well chosen words pulled me into the scenery provided by the painting and I found myself being carried into a story yet untold.
Enjoyed.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
Comment from Bichon
You really created the scene successfully in this haiku! From the distant barks to the moss, they were all easily visualised and came together beautifully.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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You really created the scene successfully in this haiku! From the distant barks to the moss, they were all easily visualised and came together beautifully.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
Comment from royowen
I love to artwork to this it sets off the haiku perfectly, the overflow effect in the poem. I like the insinuated inference of things being clothed or covered fits well in the theme Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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I love to artwork to this it sets off the haiku perfectly, the overflow effect in the poem. I like the insinuated inference of things being clothed or covered fits well in the theme Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Roy, I always appreciate your kind feedback and review. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy
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You too Gyps.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Autumn is indeed a colorful season with all the leaves falling. I enjoy the smell of autumn more than other seasons in America. In Thailand the monsoon season smells the best. I hope I understood your poem correctly...
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Autumn is indeed a colorful season with all the leaves falling. I enjoy the smell of autumn more than other seasons in America. In Thailand the monsoon season smells the best. I hope I understood your poem correctly...
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Yes, you understood my haiku correctly. :) Thank you for the excellent review.
Gypsy
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Again, you are quite welcome. I am trying to understand poetry.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the morning sir blankets that cover the dark path of moss sprinkled steps until the sun rises and reveals the late autumn morning's secrets.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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A very well-written haiku about the morning sir blankets that cover the dark path of moss sprinkled steps until the sun rises and reveals the late autumn morning's secrets.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Gypsy
Comment from Gail Denham
Really like the image you chose - I can almost smell the sea air - and I like the moss sprinkled steps. So well describe.d One can slip on those steps. the last line might describe the dogs better - such as "dogs bark the morning" or some such.
Well done poem
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Really like the image you chose - I can almost smell the sea air - and I like the moss sprinkled steps. So well describe.d One can slip on those steps. the last line might describe the dogs better - such as "dogs bark the morning" or some such.
Well done poem
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for the review 😊
Comment from Gloria ....
I just love a well-written haiku. Nothing beats that sense of awe I guess is the word. This is terrific and the sound of the dog barking in the distance is what gives this write such depth.
Great job Gypsy and a most enjoyable read this evening.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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I just love a well-written haiku. Nothing beats that sense of awe I guess is the word. This is terrific and the sound of the dog barking in the distance is what gives this write such depth.
Great job Gypsy and a most enjoyable read this evening.
Gloria
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much, Gloria. Coming from you, your review of my haiku means a lot to me.
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
I relished your parallel, Asian-themed artwork selection. I admired your appeal to our senses of sight and sound in this 5-7-5 haiku. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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I relished your parallel, Asian-themed artwork selection. I admired your appeal to our senses of sight and sound in this 5-7-5 haiku. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for the review, Joan. ☺️
