His Destiny
100 Word Story contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
DS,
Hmmm... confused now. *smile* From the way the story is told, I got the idea the boy was bucked off and he fell into the nothingness of the mountainside. He could STILL be falling right now.
But then your image shows the man standing atop the mountain - happy and proud. Confusing messages. To this poor brain, anyway. ha
A very nice tale. Interesting and creative. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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DS,
Hmmm... confused now. *smile* From the way the story is told, I got the idea the boy was bucked off and he fell into the nothingness of the mountainside. He could STILL be falling right now.
But then your image shows the man standing atop the mountain - happy and proud. Confusing messages. To this poor brain, anyway. ha
A very nice tale. Interesting and creative. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hey, Robyn, hello. Thank you for the great review. No, the horse just bucked him off at the top of the mountain. He stands up and watches the Pegasus fly away. He definitely wasn't very happy or proud. Lol. Hopefully that cleared it up a little. Thank you again, Robyn. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from amada
Wow, this was an abrupt ending. Quite unexpected. like happy endings, my friend. I object. But, I am a dreamer...I read that you created the image. It shows a great talent. Best ideas to you.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Wow, this was an abrupt ending. Quite unexpected. like happy endings, my friend. I object. But, I am a dreamer...I read that you created the image. It shows a great talent. Best ideas to you.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Amada. I really appreciate the generous stars and I'm sorry it didn't come out with such a happy ending. Lol. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from susand3022
Hello, Ron, that was definitely good for a laugh... still giggling... that good for nothing son of yours! LOL Too funny. If I'd had a 6, I'd have given it to you. I hate Friday for reviews! I try all week to keep a star or two for the end of the week... but it never happens. :)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Hello, Ron, that was definitely good for a laugh... still giggling... that good for nothing son of yours! LOL Too funny. If I'd had a 6, I'd have given it to you. I hate Friday for reviews! I try all week to keep a star or two for the end of the week... but it never happens. :)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant six offer, Susan. Yeah, we spend those sixers pretty quickly before the end of the week. I dearly appreciate it though, S. I'm glad you liked my silly little tale. Have yourself a wonderful rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent story with a humorous flash fiction ending. You also created the perfect picture to match your creative writing. Good luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Excellent story with a humorous flash fiction ending. You also created the perfect picture to match your creative writing. Good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Hey, Bill, hi. Thank you for the great review, friend. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked my little offering. Have a great weekend, Bill.
Ron
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Gotta love that 'disappearing' magic, yeah?! :) :) Great offering for the contest, Ron - thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
father's Wizard. --> father's wizard.
clearing. The Wizard --> clearing. [new paragraph here] The wizard
He climbed onto the back of the horse and it leapt --> Michael climbed onto the back of the horse, and it leapt
castle, the Wizard --> castle, the wizard
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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LOL!! Gotta love that 'disappearing' magic, yeah?! :) :) Great offering for the contest, Ron - thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
father's Wizard. --> father's wizard.
clearing. The Wizard --> clearing. [new paragraph here] The wizard
He climbed onto the back of the horse and it leapt --> Michael climbed onto the back of the horse, and it leapt
castle, the Wizard --> castle, the wizard
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and help, Yvette. Yeah, I wasn't sure about the capitol Wizard or not. I fixed all the goofs. Thank you for steering me in the right direction, Y. Have a wonderful weekend.
;)
Ron
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You too, sir -- take care out there! :)
Comment from Pantygynt
The immediate thought that came to mind was: Typical! You can't trust that airborne lot. (Pegasus is the motif of the British Airborne forces and, as an ex Royal Marine, you can see how appropriate was my reaction.
Unless you cheat you are simply not ready for the twist in this tale's tail.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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The immediate thought that came to mind was: Typical! You can't trust that airborne lot. (Pegasus is the motif of the British Airborne forces and, as an ex Royal Marine, you can see how appropriate was my reaction.
Unless you cheat you are simply not ready for the twist in this tale's tail.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Haha. Yeah, I can see where that might come to mind then. Lol. Thank you for the great review, Pantygynt. Have an excellent weekend, friend.
Ron
Comment from JP Writer
Cute story. One thing that might improve it is to give a teeny hint that the prince is a dead rat. I know, I know, there's that 100-word limit, but you seem to have what it takes to do this.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Cute story. One thing that might improve it is to give a teeny hint that the prince is a dead rat. I know, I know, there's that 100-word limit, but you seem to have what it takes to do this.
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the great review, JP W. I'll give that some thought and see what I can do. Dead rat...Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly little piece.
Ron
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That was a typo!! I meant dead beat!
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Lol. Okay. Just about the same thing though.
Comment from Pirate Sam
Awesome fictional story loved the twist at the end very imaginative and creative hoping to read more from you soon DragonSkulls great pseudonym too my friend
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Awesome fictional story loved the twist at the end very imaginative and creative hoping to read more from you soon DragonSkulls great pseudonym too my friend
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review, Sam. I'm glad you liked this silliness, friend. Have a great weekend.
Ron