Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Look at the baby chick. It like wants to say at me, "Pock-pock". Good artwork choice. Illustrative installment that stands well on its own. Nice narration mixed with dialogue. Excellent work. God bless you :)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020

Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter. Yes, the little chick is cute.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Cindy. This is an interesting and well written chapter to your book. Well described. We see the caring of chickens brings out the best in the dragons and Aaron. Dragons eat fish, chicks eat grain. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this chapter.

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

I'm sorry to be so late reviewing this. I didn't get a notice and went hunting for it. I was missing the dragons. I like that, for once, the girl isn't a beauty, but an ordinary looking girl. I think Aaron would be a good king. Dylan is right - he has the people's interest at heart.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks. I'm glad you went hunting for it. I think Aaron would be a good king, and as king he could keep the dragons safe.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think Kings in the beginning were chosen fo there impressive build, looks, or influence, but I like your philosophy, the one's most fit, are those that think of the people's welfare First, I, for one for follow them. I love the inter mingling of dragons, chickens and people, and the unwilling fish. Beautifully written, wisdom interspersed with great dialogue. Enjoyable and so well written, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020

Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. They're fun characters to write.

reply by royowen on 26-Feb-2020

Well done

Comment from Sallyo

Exceptional

Brilliant! The chickens and the fish are high comedy, and I could easily imagine the scene. Not sure what Aaron's interest in Marjorie is though... how old is he?
ere less bugs
ere fewer bugs

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 Comment Written 25-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020

Thanks! Poor Pink doesn't know what to make of those chickens. I think Black knows what they're good for. They're safe, tho. They need them. I'll change 'less' to 'fewer.' I haven't decided what's going to happen with Marjorie. He likes her. At that time, it probably wouldn't have mattered if he was too old for her.

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

"Pink looked at Black, and back to the chicks. Despite her disappointment, she still felt protective." - Excellent showing, Cindy. But Black has come a long way. He won't grab without permission.

"I know. What does that have to do with me." - suggest stopping after "I know." That way Dylan's offer is more of a surprise.

I'm as surprised as Aaron by Dylan's offer. But it does make sense. Aaron has already proved himself to be a provider, a warrior, and a tactician. Dylan respects him. And the people are in awe of the dragons. I had a recollection of David being chosen to replace King Saul.

Well written chapter.

Blessings Julia

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020

Thanks. I'm going to spend the next hour doing some editing. I think you might be right about that line.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with the continuation of your book, Cindy. I enjoyed reading this chapter. What a great idea for Aaron to become king. That way, he could always protect the dragons from evil. The discussion about the little chickens hatching was fun to read. I hope they will be safe and used just for egg laying. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020

Thanks. These chicks will be safe. The farm family will keep them for eggs and future chickens.

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your chapter, especially about the fish falling into the cabin. How did the dragons get big fish into the cabin? You did a great job. Shirley

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020

Thanks. Some of the dragons have the ability to move things. Each has its own personality and talent.

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I guess all this chicken stuff would be hard for the dragons to understand. I'm glad they're willing to help protect them. I think Pink will make a good mother someday. Your story is very well-written, interesting, realistic start to finish. I think he'd make an excellent king.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020

Thanks. I think Aaron will make a good king too.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"The King"
A Chapter in the book
"Aaron's Dragons"
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I enjoyed this chapter feeding massive dragons must be an undertaking!
and then you brought a little human-interest into the story with a hatching of little chicks!
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020

Thanks, Ricky. The dragons didn't really know what chickens were, so they didn't know what to expect. Glad you enjoyed the chapeter.

reply by Ricky1024 on 24-Feb-2020

Kind of interesting a story with dragons and friendly dragon to talk and then you got to feed them and then there's eggs and chickens that's pretty interesting and different like my work!
Ricky