Obsessive Tendencies
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Lay of the Land"An Unlikely Journey Toward Reconstruction
18 total reviews
Comment from May 1
I love the descriptions, they are so vivid and clear. It's sad to hear that their relationship is deteriorating so much. Something seems to be deeply wrong with the clan policies. It's sad that other people would have such control over someone's life that one is not allowed to choose for themselves. P.s. my membership for FanStory is expiring in a day or two so I just wanted to say that I really admire your work and how productive you are. It was a pleasure reading your works and I hope to have the chance to do that again one day. In the meantime, I wish you all the best in your future endeavors.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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I love the descriptions, they are so vivid and clear. It's sad to hear that their relationship is deteriorating so much. Something seems to be deeply wrong with the clan policies. It's sad that other people would have such control over someone's life that one is not allowed to choose for themselves. P.s. my membership for FanStory is expiring in a day or two so I just wanted to say that I really admire your work and how productive you are. It was a pleasure reading your works and I hope to have the chance to do that again one day. In the meantime, I wish you all the best in your future endeavors.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Oh my goodness, May -- I'm so glad to see you really are enjoying Celeste and Gregor. There's is promising to be quite the challenging tale - LOL!! ;) :)Thanx so much for those wonderful stars and for your wonderful support always! ;) Take care of you out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this story/chapter is well done.
The story is clear and well told. The characters clear. The interaction between the two men/wolves is easy to follow and understand.
Well done. I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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I think this story/chapter is well done.
The story is clear and well told. The characters clear. The interaction between the two men/wolves is easy to follow and understand.
Well done. I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for taking the time to read and review this one, Sharon -- would love to have you on-board in the future!! :) Take care and have a Fabulous Friday! ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Your story kept me reading, Yvette. I love the thrill of the chase, having the plants slap the body, the smell of the forest, fresh flowers for the picking, blood dripping of a kill. Yep, been there, done that. :)
I had a dream one time were I was a werewolf, running in the forest, smelling all the trees, killing dogs. (I hated dogs, but loved their blood.) I woke up the next day and could still feel as well as smell the magic coursing through my veins. I wrote it down somewhere maybe I'll post it. :) Keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Your story kept me reading, Yvette. I love the thrill of the chase, having the plants slap the body, the smell of the forest, fresh flowers for the picking, blood dripping of a kill. Yep, been there, done that. :)
I had a dream one time were I was a werewolf, running in the forest, smelling all the trees, killing dogs. (I hated dogs, but loved their blood.) I woke up the next day and could still feel as well as smell the magic coursing through my veins. I wrote it down somewhere maybe I'll post it. :) Keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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You need to stop with the crazy dreams ... or the late-night hot toddies - one or the other (or both) - LOL!! ;) Thanx so much for your review on this one, Jose, and good to here from you over there in the Lone Star State, sir!! ;) You take care and stay dry!! ;) Yvette
Comment from lyenochka
Well, maybe you needed a violence warning, too because of the poor bunny. (lol). Well, it seems Gregor is a complex character and I liked that he "escaped" from the "Big House." But I wished to learn more about him through dialogue instead. I understand that he doesn't like to talk so maybe the other characters could whisper and let the reader know his internal turmoil.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Well, maybe you needed a violence warning, too because of the poor bunny. (lol). Well, it seems Gregor is a complex character and I liked that he "escaped" from the "Big House." But I wished to learn more about him through dialogue instead. I understand that he doesn't like to talk so maybe the other characters could whisper and let the reader know his internal turmoil.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Oh, you know, I guess so --- I'll go in there and do that... :) :) I'll think about the dialogue, my lady, and how it fits with what's in my head for Gregor (you know the crazy blonde over here - lol!) -- thanx for the suggestion! :) Take care and have a great upcoming weekend! ;) Yvette
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Just a suggestion - entirely up to you and your writing style, Miss Yvette!
Comment from aryr
A great chapter Yvette and an amazing description of the hunt. They both felt the challenge to capture the rabbit even with Gregor's dislike for them and squirrels. Gregor finally confesses to Andre his love for Celeste, his mate. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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A great chapter Yvette and an amazing description of the hunt. They both felt the challenge to capture the rabbit even with Gregor's dislike for them and squirrels. Gregor finally confesses to Andre his love for Celeste, his mate. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much, Alie -- and thank you for your wonderful support always!! ;) :) Yvette
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You are so welcome Yvette
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Wow! The feelings they have for each other are so primal and so raw! I love that! That is the un-human part in both of them! Gregor and Celeste huh! Like where the story is headed and liked how Gregor let off steam in this one!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Wow! The feelings they have for each other are so primal and so raw! I love that! That is the un-human part in both of them! Gregor and Celeste huh! Like where the story is headed and liked how Gregor let off steam in this one!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Glad you got that from this one, Aaquib, that's exactly what I was trying to get across: they aren't human! ;) Yvette
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Indeed...this chapter was a fun read...largely based around their primal nature!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've missed this story, it's so good, Yvette, and you've left us at a crucial part. I want to know what that glow was. It's something even Gregor didn't know was happening to himself. I wonder if it was because he was thinking of Celeste. That fight they had, it was so realistic, the type of thing that happens to close brothers or friends, yet doesn't spoil their relationship. A really wonderful chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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I've missed this story, it's so good, Yvette, and you've left us at a crucial part. I want to know what that glow was. It's something even Gregor didn't know was happening to himself. I wonder if it was because he was thinking of Celeste. That fight they had, it was so realistic, the type of thing that happens to close brothers or friends, yet doesn't spoil their relationship. A really wonderful chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Just gotta remember back to Celeste and Gregor's parting... ;) :) Thanx so much for your review and your awesome support, Sandra -- always very appreciated! :) Yvette
Comment from ciliverde
When Andre feels the waves coming off Gregor at the end, what is happening there? Is it just that he realizes Gregor is in love, or does he somehow sense that it's not with another wolf? I'm sorry that I've come to the last chapter and now have to wait for next month!! I want to keep reading :))
Carol
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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When Andre feels the waves coming off Gregor at the end, what is happening there? Is it just that he realizes Gregor is in love, or does he somehow sense that it's not with another wolf? I'm sorry that I've come to the last chapter and now have to wait for next month!! I want to keep reading :))
Carol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Aaaah... yes, about that. Just remember a little incident before Celeste left him to run home.... :) :) :) Glad I have your interest piqued! ;) Will try to be on time next month.. ;) :) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
I missed Celeste in this chapter. All that growling and tearing apart of rabbits is not my thing, but that is not a criticism. The anger and fighting are just part of Gregor's decision not to go through with the planned marriage. I get that. This chapter is well written. Your sentence structure is long and complicated. Still it's easy to understand.
I look forward to the fairies in the next chapters.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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I missed Celeste in this chapter. All that growling and tearing apart of rabbits is not my thing, but that is not a criticism. The anger and fighting are just part of Gregor's decision not to go through with the planned marriage. I get that. This chapter is well written. Your sentence structure is long and complicated. Still it's easy to understand.
I look forward to the fairies in the next chapters.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Don't worry, she'll be back next chapter, I promise... it's a bit easier on the crazy blonde teacher to do 'one' at the time since I'm limited on my time.... maybe during Spring break I can tackle a 'split' chapter as my books usually are. ;) :) I'm not sure if I've mentioned it lately, but your following my stories means more than you know... not a whole lot of 'fantasy fans' around these parts (at least none that are outside 'THE group'...lol!!) so, I'm thrilled to know that you're interested enough to follow!! ;) Thanks much for those awesome stars, too... making me smile even through the gray over here! :) Hope you guys find some sun a bit further south -- not supposed to be around today (again!)... :) :) Take care of you and start looking at that Spring calendar.... you owe me a lunch date, yeah?! ;) Yvette
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Hey, girl. I am headed to Austin to visit Taylor. Then I have minor eye surgery scheduled. Otherwise, I am pretty much available in March. I can't wait to meet you.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent writing, and a great chapter. The descriptions were vivid and I felt I was right there in the setting as they ran through the fields and then chased and tore up the rabbit. The fight scene between the two werewolves was amazing. Those two really went at it. It's a good thing they are such close friends and care so much for each other or that rage may have gotten out of hand. The emotions are raw and deep. And you got in some important background story as well.
I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Excellent writing, and a great chapter. The descriptions were vivid and I felt I was right there in the setting as they ran through the fields and then chased and tore up the rabbit. The fight scene between the two werewolves was amazing. Those two really went at it. It's a good thing they are such close friends and care so much for each other or that rage may have gotten out of hand. The emotions are raw and deep. And you got in some important background story as well.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for these awesome comments, my lady!! I'm so very glad you've jumped on board to follow this unlikely pair -- not a whole lot of 'fantasy fans' around these parts so, I'm thrilled to know that Piper's avatar (lol!) is interested enough to follow!! ;) Thanks much for those awesome stars... making me smile even through the gray over here! :) Take care of you and welcome to my imagination... lol! ;) Yvette
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You are welcome. This wonderful fantasy so keep it coming
