A Quiet Place
Free Verse Using words with A29 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This is an excellent poem, even before we take into consideration the imperative use of the letter A. It is difficult at times to live in the present, but well worth it when achieved. Great poem, perfect image.
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This is an excellent poem, even before we take into consideration the imperative use of the letter A. It is difficult at times to live in the present, but well worth it when achieved. Great poem, perfect image.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned using five words that start with the letter A. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned using five words that start with the letter A. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Teri, I am pleased that you enjoyed this free verse poem.
Comment from susand3022
I don't know if one can ever avoid the angst of failing... at least I can't, JLR. I'm not too sure I work that way, which is most likely why I write here and not for any other place. I don't try to publish, anymore. I don't think I would really know where to start anymore. The world has changed so much.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I don't know if one can ever avoid the angst of failing... at least I can't, JLR. I'm not too sure I work that way, which is most likely why I write here and not for any other place. I don't try to publish, anymore. I don't think I would really know where to start anymore. The world has changed so much.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Ah Susan, perfectionism? I used to be trapped into only doing that which I knew I was going to hit a home run at with every attempt. Then I realized, I was was getting to old and not enjoying life to tits fullest reaches, so now I try, try and try again withe goal if I fail, try to fail forward every time. Perhaps, then perfection will occur.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this writing with the variety of words starting with a.. It is very true that it takes effort to learn to be more in the moment and not dominated by angst in the midst of this crazy world. Bill
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thanks for sharing this writing with the variety of words starting with a.. It is very true that it takes effort to learn to be more in the moment and not dominated by angst in the midst of this crazy world. Bill
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Bill, we all get caught in the vice of living at the pace around us, a failure of our human condition to just be human not a human doing all the time.
Comment from Bichon
This was a very interesting and enjoyable poem to read. I loved the free verse style in combination with your clever use of A's.
" avoid the clatter of noise" I also liked the onomatopoeic use here.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This was a very interesting and enjoyable poem to read. I loved the free verse style in combination with your clever use of A's.
" avoid the clatter of noise" I also liked the onomatopoeic use here.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Bichin, thank you, have a great day!
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, A Quiet Place, exercises some choice words which seem to work together in a self-examining piece designed to explore what one knows about him or herself.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This free verse, A Quiet Place, exercises some choice words which seem to work together in a self-examining piece designed to explore what one knows about him or herself.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Bill, thanks for your review and thoughtful insight.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Very good entry for the free verse club, using the five "a". Extra interesting for me was: I finally understood what "being in the present moment" really means. Awareness and quiet contemplation, it was an "aha"-moment for me.
Your summarizing the a-words in the last stanza is a good idea, and the use of cursives for the key words in this poem I liked a lot.
One small remark:
In the line: "when too much stuff begins to annoy us" I thought that the "to" interrupted the flow. Could you consider to write
"when too much stuff begins annoying us"? To me, it sounds better.
I loved reading this beautiful free verse.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Very good entry for the free verse club, using the five "a". Extra interesting for me was: I finally understood what "being in the present moment" really means. Awareness and quiet contemplation, it was an "aha"-moment for me.
Your summarizing the a-words in the last stanza is a good idea, and the use of cursives for the key words in this poem I liked a lot.
One small remark:
In the line: "when too much stuff begins to annoy us" I thought that the "to" interrupted the flow. Could you consider to write
"when too much stuff begins annoying us"? To me, it sounds better.
I loved reading this beautiful free verse.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Marjon, I appreciate your thoughts. I spent a moment and change it to "so much stuff"
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Perfect solution!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem and using words star ft with the letter 'a' we are mostly aware of the things that make us uncomfortable and we will instinctively avoid to be trapped in those situations.
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A very well-written free verse poem and using words star ft with the letter 'a' we are mostly aware of the things that make us uncomfortable and we will instinctively avoid to be trapped in those situations.
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Sandra, thank you for your comments, JLR
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem uses the chosen words well to show that the quiet place is given to you by baring your soul in poetry.
The poem is a good entry in the potlatch.
Keep writing
Joan
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This poem uses the chosen words well to show that the quiet place is given to you by baring your soul in poetry.
The poem is a good entry in the potlatch.
Keep writing
Joan
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Joan, than you, as always, Jim
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You are most kindly welcome, Jim
Joan
