Soldier Down!
A tale to bring a tear to a man's eye.6 total reviews
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Oh my God what was that about!!!! Ouchhh!! Now I am really curious as to what little Charlie did to deserve that treatment! And you were spot on about the part that it usually did the thinking for both us and we had fun times playing as kids haha! That part was hilarious! A really different entry in the contest! Best wishes :-)
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Oh my God what was that about!!!! Ouchhh!! Now I am really curious as to what little Charlie did to deserve that treatment! And you were spot on about the part that it usually did the thinking for both us and we had fun times playing as kids haha! That part was hilarious! A really different entry in the contest! Best wishes :-)
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thanks for your review. I'm pleased you saw the humour in the story. Charlie got out and about far too promiscuously, so his wife took matters into her own hands as punishment.
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Oh alrighty then! Bad little Charlie... hope you win:-)
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The story was not placed - maybe too brutal for some.
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Aw thats too bad! I guess I can disclose now that I voted for it!
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Thank you - I appreciate your support.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Oh my! This is an unthinkable and a situation that no man wants to spend much time thinking about. He should have been more careful with his infidelity. I don't advise or condone it at all. If you're going to cheat, at least try to be good at it. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Oh my! This is an unthinkable and a situation that no man wants to spend much time thinking about. He should have been more careful with his infidelity. I don't advise or condone it at all. If you're going to cheat, at least try to be good at it. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thanks for reviewing, Jeffrey.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Charlie writing prompt.
This short story about Charlie is well told and has a twist at the end.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Charlie writing prompt.
This short story about Charlie is well told and has a twist at the end.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thanks!
Comment from Gideon300
LOL! Better behaved indeed! Well, it looks like there was some lessons learned. Really imaginative story and well written. It keeps you reading all the way through to the surprising end.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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LOL! Better behaved indeed! Well, it looks like there was some lessons learned. Really imaginative story and well written. It keeps you reading all the way through to the surprising end.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thanks!
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I wondered if Charlie was some kind of metaphor, but I never thought about his "pecker." How cleverly you wrote this story. Without giving it away, but reading back through it, the allusion are perfect.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I wondered if Charlie was some kind of metaphor, but I never thought about his "pecker." How cleverly you wrote this story. Without giving it away, but reading back through it, the allusion are perfect.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thanks!
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You're welcome.
Comment from BethShelby
This story had a surprise ending. I never would have guessed where this story was going. Here is though Charlie was a soldier and then I found out he was a part of you. I guess it is meant to be humor but it sounds painful. It is a different kind of story. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This story had a surprise ending. I never would have guessed where this story was going. Here is though Charlie was a soldier and then I found out he was a part of you. I guess it is meant to be humor but it sounds painful. It is a different kind of story. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I'm pleased this story surprised you - I don't like being predictable.
Thanks for your review.
