The Last Time
Charlie leaves and disappears.35 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello livelylinda,
What a MARVELOUS piece of Commentary and Philosophy Fiction this is!
It has an impressive as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, meets the required norms, and beautifully depicts its theme 'especially the character of Charlie'.
Smooth, spontaneous, and highly captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
SUPERB!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Hello livelylinda,
What a MARVELOUS piece of Commentary and Philosophy Fiction this is!
It has an impressive as well as perfectly matching the theme wording, meets the required norms, and beautifully depicts its theme 'especially the character of Charlie'.
Smooth, spontaneous, and highly captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
SUPERB!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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This got me an 8th place of 12 contest entrants. Most people didn't like the fact that Charlie was a girl. Interesting. Thanks for your accolades and shiny six stars. Linda
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Livelylinda, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Janet Foor
A powerful story and a cautionary tale for young girls but also their families.
A somber story to be sure. Very well written Linda.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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A powerful story and a cautionary tale for young girls but also their families.
A somber story to be sure. Very well written Linda.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Janet. Linda
Comment from royowen
Although this was a fictional story, unfortunately this probably true of some young girl who became victims. Beautifully written friend Linda, I admired this departure from happy, and although I love happy endings, I also like imaginative stories, and this was one of those. An excellent entry Linda, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Although this was a fictional story, unfortunately this probably true of some young girl who became victims. Beautifully written friend Linda, I admired this departure from happy, and although I love happy endings, I also like imaginative stories, and this was one of those. An excellent entry Linda, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Roy. Linda
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Thanks Linda
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You paint a scary scenario that is all to true for so many naïve young girls (and guys) be it New York or Anytown. Your lines flow well with good descriptions of farm life and living in a small town. Thanks for sharing a great message that sadly will come too late for many. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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You paint a scary scenario that is all to true for so many naïve young girls (and guys) be it New York or Anytown. Your lines flow well with good descriptions of farm life and living in a small town. Thanks for sharing a great message that sadly will come too late for many. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Thank you. Linda
Comment from l.raven
HI Dos, very well written my sweet friend...I have never lived on a farm either...but most of my family had...so I know what it is like...it was good Charlie set her goal...and she reached for it...sometimes people don't stay in touch when they leave a place...I love your story told you...good luck in the contest...love you much...Uno xxoo
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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HI Dos, very well written my sweet friend...I have never lived on a farm either...but most of my family had...so I know what it is like...it was good Charlie set her goal...and she reached for it...sometimes people don't stay in touch when they leave a place...I love your story told you...good luck in the contest...love you much...Uno xxoo
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Hi: I ranked 8th out of 12 contestants. Bad! LOLOL Linda
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you did more than I...I didn't try...so your ahead...have a wonderful day you...we are expecting lots of snow...much love...xxoo
Comment from Tpa
This was beautiful and well-written. Your characterization of Charlie showed that she was a fighter, ready to put the world on fire. I enjoyed the ending and wish you the very best in your writing skills.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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This was beautiful and well-written. Your characterization of Charlie showed that she was a fighter, ready to put the world on fire. I enjoyed the ending and wish you the very best in your writing skills.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Thank you. Linda
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Nicely done. A very trite story that plays out day after day, regarding a small town girl's dreams. Yet the assumption at the end gives it a very scary scenario that everyone dreads.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Nicely done. A very trite story that plays out day after day, regarding a small town girl's dreams. Yet the assumption at the end gives it a very scary scenario that everyone dreads.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Susan Morritt
I enjoyed reading your story inspired by only one line. You succeeded in creating an interesting character in Charlie, then continued by piquing my curiosity to find out where she went, and how her life turned out. In my opinion, the fact that you used the first line woven into the last was the strongest part of this story. Good job.
Susan
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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I enjoyed reading your story inspired by only one line. You succeeded in creating an interesting character in Charlie, then continued by piquing my curiosity to find out where she went, and how her life turned out. In my opinion, the fact that you used the first line woven into the last was the strongest part of this story. Good job.
Susan
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you. Linda
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Livelylinda. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Hello Livelylinda. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Oh! A really sad ending especially considering the hopes and dreams of Charlie! Everything that she had aspired to become and tried to get was perhaps no match for her naivety! Best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Oh! A really sad ending especially considering the hopes and dreams of Charlie! Everything that she had aspired to become and tried to get was perhaps no match for her naivety! Best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
