Morning Dew
Kyrielle Sonnet27 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem is lovely, as is the whole presentation. I can see why you wish this picture were yours. The poem flows beautifully, and I love the third stanza. I am still not brave enough to try a sonnet! One of these days...
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This poem is lovely, as is the whole presentation. I can see why you wish this picture were yours. The poem flows beautifully, and I love the third stanza. I am still not brave enough to try a sonnet! One of these days...
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hi Terry... Oh, come now, you can do it. Test the waters... Sonnets are a challenge, but they can convey meanings that are hard to accurately relate any other way. Thank you for your lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Mark Valentine
Wish I had a six - this is sublime. It just washes over you. I had to reread it to more fully appreciate all the nuances that make it read so effortlessly. The imagery (pink "staining" the sky), the focus on the little parts that make up the whole (dew drops, blades of grass, bees, butterflies), the soft "S" sounds - in fact, the sound in general - it's one of the most beautiful sounding poems I've read. Makes me anxious to plant the garden (garden weather is still several months away in Chicago)
I hope this is a Poem of the Month nominee - it's awesome. One note - I think the word you're looking for in the first line of the third stanza is "envelops"
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Wish I had a six - this is sublime. It just washes over you. I had to reread it to more fully appreciate all the nuances that make it read so effortlessly. The imagery (pink "staining" the sky), the focus on the little parts that make up the whole (dew drops, blades of grass, bees, butterflies), the soft "S" sounds - in fact, the sound in general - it's one of the most beautiful sounding poems I've read. Makes me anxious to plant the garden (garden weather is still several months away in Chicago)
I hope this is a Poem of the Month nominee - it's awesome. One note - I think the word you're looking for in the first line of the third stanza is "envelops"
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hello Mark. I am so happy you liked this Kyrielle sonnet. You have made my day with this lovely review and regard. I will edit the envelop.... :). I truly appreciate your thoughts on it. :). Happy day to you!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very lovely, creatively-composed, vividly descriptive kyrielle; it paints an appealing scene. I can't a definition of "sonnet" that mentions iambic tetrameter; all say iambic pentameter. Not trying to be difficult--but is this a sonnet?
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This is a very lovely, creatively-composed, vividly descriptive kyrielle; it paints an appealing scene. I can't a definition of "sonnet" that mentions iambic tetrameter; all say iambic pentameter. Not trying to be difficult--but is this a sonnet?
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hi Janice. I am delighted that you liked this verse. I use Shadowpoetry.com for definitions and examples. Here is the link for the Kyrielle Sonnet... yes, it is in tetrameter... http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/kyriellesonnet.html. Hope it helps. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
This gave me a lovely feeling and reminded me of the Irish euphemism, 'mountain dew' meaning a drop of the whiskey. Shadow Poetry, admittedly not the most definitive of sites states that the final couplet should not rhyme in a kyrielle sonnet and common practice is for it to contain both first and repeated lines.
This would give you possibly:
Pink lightly stains the eastern sky,
while sipping cups of morning dew.
Given that you have established a pattern of almost repeating the last line. Perhaps the turtledoves and butterflies might prefer a drop of morning dew rather than a cup of thestuff.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This gave me a lovely feeling and reminded me of the Irish euphemism, 'mountain dew' meaning a drop of the whiskey. Shadow Poetry, admittedly not the most definitive of sites states that the final couplet should not rhyme in a kyrielle sonnet and common practice is for it to contain both first and repeated lines.
This would give you possibly:
Pink lightly stains the eastern sky,
while sipping cups of morning dew.
Given that you have established a pattern of almost repeating the last line. Perhaps the turtledoves and butterflies might prefer a drop of morning dew rather than a cup of thestuff.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you Jim... I had forgotten some of the finer points of this type of sonnet. I have edited it and appreciate the reminders.... it is funny how a poem unfolds when you are in the middle of it. My first repetitive line was... with dampened feet from morning dew... it was about walking in the garden early on a summer morning. Well.... it evolved LOL. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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Good edit.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A gorgeous sonnet encompassing all the garden delights here and I know that your garden is very close to your heart, this is such a special slice of poetry Melissa and I have just one six star left for you, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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A gorgeous sonnet encompassing all the garden delights here and I know that your garden is very close to your heart, this is such a special slice of poetry Melissa and I have just one six star left for you, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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What a lovely gift today!!! I am delighted you liked the sonnet and appreciate your lovely rating. Thank you Dolly!!! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
This is a nicely sculpted Kyrielle sonnet, the language is perfect Melissa. These lyrical words are very articulate, and probably belong in a song my friend, the narrative is smooth, the repeating line(s) perfect, on doesn't see the big sister of the Kyrielle, you and I are guilty of that, well done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This is a nicely sculpted Kyrielle sonnet, the language is perfect Melissa. These lyrical words are very articulate, and probably belong in a song my friend, the narrative is smooth, the repeating line(s) perfect, on doesn't see the big sister of the Kyrielle, you and I are guilty of that, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Good morning, Roy... at least it is morning here. :). I thank you very much for your comments. I agree that we do not see the K S here very often, but as I was looking up the Kyrielles from my European Forms class that Jim taught us, I saw it and decided to try it again. I really appreciate your review!!
Melissa
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Most welcome
Comment from June Sargent
I love this format and you've done a great job with it. Thanks for inviting me on this morning stroll and sharing with me a cup of morning dew. Wish I had a six left for you!
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I love this format and you've done a great job with it. Thanks for inviting me on this morning stroll and sharing with me a cup of morning dew. Wish I had a six left for you!
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Good Morning June!! Thank you for those encouraging words and virtual six!! I have been so distracted lately that I have not been writing... sure hope this Kyrielle gives me a spark again!! Hugs!
Melissa
