Sitting Vigil
In those hours at their bedside, you remember...13 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
Hi dear Yvette,
So achingly and tremulously conveyed is the suddenly too unbearable
quiet when at bedside of loved one lying so ominously still and weak.
True it is, it is in such sudden solitude and stillness, a cache of memories helplessly and inextricably, and mercifully too,
flood in to quell the heartache, as the noise and hassle and bustle
of their lives and worlds were so immersed in and filling their hours
ever so busily, yet still gratifyingly. An awesome poem dear,
that relatable to many of us who have been at such a bedside vigil
of a loved one!
Thanks for sharing dear!!!
Blessings always, Ronni
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Hi dear Yvette,
So achingly and tremulously conveyed is the suddenly too unbearable
quiet when at bedside of loved one lying so ominously still and weak.
True it is, it is in such sudden solitude and stillness, a cache of memories helplessly and inextricably, and mercifully too,
flood in to quell the heartache, as the noise and hassle and bustle
of their lives and worlds were so immersed in and filling their hours
ever so busily, yet still gratifyingly. An awesome poem dear,
that relatable to many of us who have been at such a bedside vigil
of a loved one!
Thanks for sharing dear!!!
Blessings always, Ronni
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Oh, Ronni -- THANK YOU for your awesome words here, my lady!! Poems like this are as hard as they are easy because the feelings are so very strong that the choice is simply how to phrase things because emotions are so very strong... I kinda feel like a channel rather than an author for ones such as these (if that makes any sense)... I do hope you have some smiles for the rest of the week over there - I'm fakin' my grin through the gray again here! ;) :) LOL! Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very good. I've gone through those vigils which are draining of our emotions and very hard. Your poem contrasts the vibrancy of life with the tense emotional moments of waiting. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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This is very good. I've gone through those vigils which are draining of our emotions and very hard. Your poem contrasts the vibrancy of life with the tense emotional moments of waiting. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Mariliyn -- always great to hear from you, ma'am!! ;)
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh my - a truly moving poem and it covers all the bases. Watching, the vigil. A hard hard time of waiting. You've summed it up very well and I can feel the pain through the poem.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Oh my - a truly moving poem and it covers all the bases. Watching, the vigil. A hard hard time of waiting. You've summed it up very well and I can feel the pain through the poem.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you.
Comment from Aaron Milavec
Poets have their own settled instincts, and I hesitate to say anything to you. Yet, for what it is worth, I risk sharing my perception (which may not be yours):
You offer vivid images of various epochs together. It is the final vigil that arrives with the unexpected: "I'm tired of cryin'." Your humanity pours forth, for me, most strongly here. The other epochs are weakly set forth due to the emotional distance, no doubt. Works well.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Poets have their own settled instincts, and I hesitate to say anything to you. Yet, for what it is worth, I risk sharing my perception (which may not be yours):
You offer vivid images of various epochs together. It is the final vigil that arrives with the unexpected: "I'm tired of cryin'." Your humanity pours forth, for me, most strongly here. The other epochs are weakly set forth due to the emotional distance, no doubt. Works well.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Your heartfelt free verse poem is very well written. You gave me a lot to think and I related to some things in your life. The presentation is very pretty. Thank you for sharing.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Your heartfelt free verse poem is very well written. You gave me a lot to think and I related to some things in your life. The presentation is very pretty. Thank you for sharing.
Gypsy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Thanx for the review on this one, Gypsy, but it's definitely not a 'free verse'... :) :) It's all good, though, ma'am -- you take good care over there across the big pond!! ;) Yvette ;)
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Oh, am sorry. I read on my cellphone and it's hard to tell when it's rhyme.
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Like I said, Gypsy, no biggee!! I so appreciate you!! Take good care over there, my lady!!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The poem's wisdom seeps throughout. Those are the times when reverie takes hold and you don't want to let go of all those memories that tied you together. The thought of loss permeates and desperation creeps into the room. And deep in the night, it is so quiet. You found an apt line to end your beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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The poem's wisdom seeps throughout. Those are the times when reverie takes hold and you don't want to let go of all those memories that tied you together. The thought of loss permeates and desperation creeps into the room. And deep in the night, it is so quiet. You found an apt line to end your beautiful poem.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you.
Comment from pome lover
woo! That's powerful.
If it's a true account, I hope things work out well for you.
Remembering the years together and happy times show the reader the longevity of your relationship and and its meaningfulness.
A good entry for this contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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woo! That's powerful.
If it's a true account, I hope things work out well for you.
Remembering the years together and happy times show the reader the longevity of your relationship and and its meaningfulness.
A good entry for this contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from Gideon300
Such a heart tugging poem, over a love one. It was very engaging, how you put together the memories of their years together. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Such a heart tugging poem, over a love one. It was very engaging, how you put together the memories of their years together. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Quiet writing prompt.
This well written verse tells of missing a partner's noise.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Quiet writing prompt.
This well written verse tells of missing a partner's noise.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although this seems a light hearted verse here, there is a serious undertone as illness brings the silence and when life has been this busy, the quiet days are hard to take, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Although this seems a light hearted verse here, there is a serious undertone as illness brings the silence and when life has been this busy, the quiet days are hard to take, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your review is much appreciated. Thank you.
