Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

Time does pass us by and we miss the beauty of each phase if were are not looking for or watching for them.

Passage of Time reminds me of II Peter 3:8. "But forget not this one thing, beloved, that one day is with the Lord as a thousand years, and a thousand years as one day."

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Thaities. I appreciate the analogy to the Bible.
Joan

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 03-Mar-2020

Mother used to say this verse whenever she thought I needed to get my priories straighter, or when I was not looking at the big picture close enough.

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

Your poem is pretty. The thoughts of predawn as the world is waking up.
It seems not long again until evening is on its way. Again we are shadowed in darkness. The picture enhanced your poem nicely.
God bless!
Patty

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020

Patty,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you liked it. Have a great week.
Joan

Comment from Therese Caron

Excellent

Beautiful Haiku poetry! The last one is outstanding. It is funny how we don't really appreciate how each day unfolds and then winds down. We sometimes notice the beauty but often take it for granted. Lovely image also!

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2020

Thanks for the kind words and high rating. Glad you liked it.
dragonpoet

Comment from Susan Larson

Excellent

I love your words about the gentle and colorful passage of time, but I question the middle line of your middle haiku: changes sunny, azure....I count only six syllables. Maybe there is something about this form of which I am not aware.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks for the review. I appreciate the constructive criticism. I made changes.
Joan

Comment from RShipp

Excellent

"Bare branches brush sky" and "as the canvas turns to black" are my favorite lines.

I enjoyed the read.

Best of luck in the Two Stanza Poem contest.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you liked
it.
dragonpoet

Comment from Diana L Crawford

Excellent

Very cool way to structure this haiku series. The joy of dawn, the changing light of day and then the closing in of nighttime is perfectly expressed! Great job!

Thank you for sharing! xoxo

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks for your kind and encouraging review, Diane.
Joan

Comment from Bichon

Exceptional

This poem was an awesome and created detailed picturesque images. I like the stages you discussed in the third verses. Great job with this one, it is a very beautiful piece of poetry.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Bichon,
I am honored by the six-star review. Thanks for nice review.
Joan

Comment from Natalie Goodwin

Excellent

I love how you describe the changing colors throughout the day by giving each change its own haiku. The images are vivid. I especially liked "the dusty mauve of breaking dawn" and "sunny azure bringing light to day." Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks for the review and the good luck wishes. Both are much appreciated.
dragonpoet

Comment from Wynter Lee

Excellent

I like the poem talking about dusk and how it moves to darkness. I really like how it talks about sending us to sleep. I think it's well written good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

I am glad you liked the personification in the last verse. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
dragonpoet

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I really enjoyed the first two of these haikus, but then the darkness came back too fast and brutally, before the day really had time to form. For me there was a third one, full day or slow dusk, missing.

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2020

Thanks for reading and for the constructive criticism.
dragonpoet