This Morning
A 3-6-9 contest poem...25 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Were you REALLY on a beach, or were you on the couch with the Travel Channel on...? :) :) LOL! A wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- you've painted a beautiful vision for your reader... take me there, please!! ;) Thanx for sharing and good luck ! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Were you REALLY on a beach, or were you on the couch with the Travel Channel on...? :) :) LOL! A wonderful offering for the contest, my lady -- you've painted a beautiful vision for your reader... take me there, please!! ;) Thanx for sharing and good luck ! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Haha! More like the travel channel in my head! Or maybe it was an out of body experience-astral traveling! Anyway, when I opened my eyes, I was still in the couch, darn it!! LoL! But...Road trip anyone? xoxo
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Sure! Sign me up! ;)
Comment from Bichon
This really was such a beautiful poem to read and admire. You got the imagery spot on and created the scene inside the readers mind, which is often hard to do. Best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This really was such a beautiful poem to read and admire. You got the imagery spot on and created the scene inside the readers mind, which is often hard to do. Best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much! I love free verse, but these give the chance to think a little differently. I enjoy the challenge. So happy you liked!! xoxo
Comment from Gail Denham
The first thing that comes to mind is going to the beach at dawn. BRRR - we live in the Northwest- and our beaches are not exactly nice to lie about in the early hours, and we do not have "quiet" breezes. Far from it. When I was young, our family used to dress warm and go fishing off the rocks in the early hours. I would not do that today. too cold.
Nice progression of stanzas - sounds like a good place to visit.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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The first thing that comes to mind is going to the beach at dawn. BRRR - we live in the Northwest- and our beaches are not exactly nice to lie about in the early hours, and we do not have "quiet" breezes. Far from it. When I was young, our family used to dress warm and go fishing off the rocks in the early hours. I would not do that today. too cold.
Nice progression of stanzas - sounds like a good place to visit.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Yeah! I?m sure it is a little chilly up there! We can?t go to beaches (I was born, an hour from where I live now, on Lake Michigan) until about May for swimming! But the beauty of the beaches and dunes is incredible and no sharks! Haha! Thanks for stopping and your precious stars! xoxo
Comment from Janet Foor
I love mornings and the artwork you chose is divine.
I like the repeating line in each stanza. It gives one a sense of being there with you.
Very nicely done Diane.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I love mornings and the artwork you chose is divine.
I like the repeating line in each stanza. It gives one a sense of being there with you.
Very nicely done Diane.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much! Appreciate your kind words and precious stars. xoxo
Comment from Ricky1024
"This Morning"
Is a 3-6-9 Poem Contest Entry.
I like the way you emphasized the objective content with the many different colors that God offers us into our beautiful world.
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This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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"This Morning"
Is a 3-6-9 Poem Contest Entry.
I like the way you emphasized the objective content with the many different colors that God offers us into our beautiful world.
...
This was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I wish I was there right now! So cold here, just getting a bit of relief today at 40 degrees. Here, we put on shorts and get the grill out! Haha! Thanks for you kind feedback!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, Diana.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like how you begin with
a repeating line and also
use one continuous thought
in each verse.
-The imagery paints a vivid
word picture of this quiet
and beautiful scene.
-You make us want to be there, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Diana.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like how you begin with
a repeating line and also
use one continuous thought
in each verse.
-The imagery paints a vivid
word picture of this quiet
and beautiful scene.
-You make us want to be there, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Ah! Thank you, I?ll make that correction! I think I?m getting winter bored and I can?t keep my mind from wandering to the beach! Haha! Thank you for your help and precious stars. xoxo
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You are welcome, Diana.
Comment from judiverse
This is a very attractive presentation, and best of success in the contest. Even without rhyme, the musical quality comes through. Your word choices are excellent and you convey an excellent sense of the surroundings. Surrounded by the beautiful sunrise, the coral beach and the ocean waves, one couldn't help but feel relaxed. jufi
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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This is a very attractive presentation, and best of success in the contest. Even without rhyme, the musical quality comes through. Your word choices are excellent and you convey an excellent sense of the surroundings. Surrounded by the beautiful sunrise, the coral beach and the ocean waves, one couldn't help but feel relaxed. jufi
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Thanks Judi! appreciate you enjoyed the relaxing view!! :) xoxo
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You're very welcome. Enjoy the view! judi
Comment from Sally Law
This is the next best thing to being there. I love the scenic view over the toes. Take me away....
As a,ways, a wonderful offering and start to my day. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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This is the next best thing to being there. I love the scenic view over the toes. Take me away....
As a,ways, a wonderful offering and start to my day. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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I guess the cold is getting to me! LOL! I can think of anything but the beach! appreciate you enjoyed the relaxing view!! xoxoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
such great storylines. Loved the poem, it proves that a women can sit back and have fun. It looks like wherever she is, it's definitely a warmth of sunshine and blue skies.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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such great storylines. Loved the poem, it proves that a women can sit back and have fun. It looks like wherever she is, it's definitely a warmth of sunshine and blue skies.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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thank you! I guess i'm feeling the winter and can't stop thinking about the summer! I wish I would be going though to a place that looked like this! haha! appreciate you enjoyed the relaxing view! xoxo
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Diana a TGIFriday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the poem well, your syllable count is spot on. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Hello Diana a TGIFriday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the poem well, your syllable count is spot on. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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thanks so much! I love these oddball poem challenges, they keep the gray matter working properly! haha! appreciate you enjoyed the "view"! xoxo
