Punchinello
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Punchinello Chapter Thirteen"Terror strikes the Texas town of Astatula. Can She
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
This will draw the reader in to know, we are about business: ""The end of that fence is what we're looking for." Nice examples of allusion. You've found a good way to review the backstory.
Is this a foreshadowing? "You believe every rumor you hear?" The reader was sure he's go crashing to the ground: "Losing his balance," Phew. But we'll be back to hear Cody's secret.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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This will draw the reader in to know, we are about business: ""The end of that fence is what we're looking for." Nice examples of allusion. You've found a good way to review the backstory.
Is this a foreshadowing? "You believe every rumor you hear?" The reader was sure he's go crashing to the ground: "Losing his balance," Phew. But we'll be back to hear Cody's secret.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
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I'm on a mission to read all of Cody's themes.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I want to hear his story too! What a spot to stop in. ha ha. This is a very engaging story that definitely deserves the five stars offered. Great post.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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I want to hear his story too! What a spot to stop in. ha ha. This is a very engaging story that definitely deserves the five stars offered. Great post.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Shirley McLain
A nice chapter with the explorers hiding and secrets being told. Of course, you left me hanging on the proverbial limb. I didn't see any problems to make comments. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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A nice chapter with the explorers hiding and secrets being told. Of course, you left me hanging on the proverbial limb. I didn't see any problems to make comments. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful chapter of some great reflections of our Cody and great mischievous times of two little boys.... yummmm, fresh peaches!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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A wonderful chapter of some great reflections of our Cody and great mischievous times of two little boys.... yummmm, fresh peaches!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much more on the way. Appreciate your review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, yes, I liked this chapter. It has great description, and it certainly held my interest throughout. I'm maybe somewhat influenced as I've already read the whole story prior to this. Ulla:)).
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Hi Brett, yes, I liked this chapter. It has great description, and it certainly held my interest throughout. I'm maybe somewhat influenced as I've already read the whole story prior to this. Ulla:)).
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Sankey
This is certainly headed in the right direction. I do still wonder how much of this "fiction" might be connected to your real life sometimes? The wayward wind is Cody I presume? Should it be "The Wayward Wind" in inverted comma's? This is a good story I do sense the emotion from Cody and the pride in his wolf blanket. I like this chapter. One possible miss?
Bet (if)we go in there we'll never come out again."
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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This is certainly headed in the right direction. I do still wonder how much of this "fiction" might be connected to your real life sometimes? The wayward wind is Cody I presume? Should it be "The Wayward Wind" in inverted comma's? This is a good story I do sense the emotion from Cody and the pride in his wolf blanket. I like this chapter. One possible miss?
Bet (if)we go in there we'll never come out again."
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Been on a short hiatus because of others things going on away FanStory. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Cindy Decker
I really liked the sharp, realistic dialogue between characters. It's a story I would like to read in its entirety. I'm reviewing as a reader, not a writer, because I have not written that much prose lately. I like similes and metaphors in a story. I like the dramatic devices you employ in your story.
Good luck with all your writing
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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I really liked the sharp, realistic dialogue between characters. It's a story I would like to read in its entirety. I'm reviewing as a reader, not a writer, because I have not written that much prose lately. I like similes and metaphors in a story. I like the dramatic devices you employ in your story.
Good luck with all your writing
Comment Written 26-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much appreciate the review.
