Chain Around My Heart
Just yesterday...22 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and
presentation, Diana.
-A well written poem
with good questions,
imagery, and rhyme.
-I like how you respond
to each with "Just yesterday..."
-Good use of cause and effect
about a love gone wrong.
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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-Good image and
presentation, Diana.
-A well written poem
with good questions,
imagery, and rhyme.
-I like how you respond
to each with "Just yesterday..."
-Good use of cause and effect
about a love gone wrong.
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Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thank you Pam! So happy you appreciated this one! xoxo
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You are very welcome, Diana.
Comment from papa55mike
What a wonderfully written poem and I love the picture. Love cannot bind us in any way, if it is true love. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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What a wonderfully written poem and I love the picture. Love cannot bind us in any way, if it is true love. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks Mike! I was thinking of doing a sequel about how that key is really inside your own heart! appreciate your stars and feedback! xoxo
Comment from rspoet
Hello Diana,
This is an excellent rhymed poem on the topic of deception.
So often one person is blind-sided by the shallowness
of someone they trusted. If only we could see beyond the surface
and into the heart and soul of another.
Your poem says a great deal in only three stanzas.
Song reminds me of Gershwin's Summertime.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Hello Diana,
This is an excellent rhymed poem on the topic of deception.
So often one person is blind-sided by the shallowness
of someone they trusted. If only we could see beyond the surface
and into the heart and soul of another.
Your poem says a great deal in only three stanzas.
Song reminds me of Gershwin's Summertime.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thanks Robert, so glad you could appreciate! and yes, the song does resemble Summertime! I loved Janis Joplin's version of that beautiful song! xoxoxo
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent a swift and poetic piece bringing a joy of movement and a robustness of idea into a achievable frame of verse the stanzas work well and the concepts are well thought through with good construction and good determination throughout the piece delivers well and has a good direction opening the emotions of it with a well intentioned purpose. It produces a fine and charming flow which brings a harmony to the conclusion and its narrative. It is free and well rounded enhancing the voice through its good word choice and equal meditation.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Excellent a swift and poetic piece bringing a joy of movement and a robustness of idea into a achievable frame of verse the stanzas work well and the concepts are well thought through with good construction and good determination throughout the piece delivers well and has a good direction opening the emotions of it with a well intentioned purpose. It produces a fine and charming flow which brings a harmony to the conclusion and its narrative. It is free and well rounded enhancing the voice through its good word choice and equal meditation.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020
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Thank you for appreciating and your precious stars! xoxo
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anytime ...
Comment from Susan Larson
Geeez, this sounds like my first marriage! He never wanted me out of my sight because he loved me so much, if he saw a male co-workers number in my phone book, he'd accuse me of having an affair. Twenty years after our divorce I was subbing ina middle school health class and showed a video on seven signs of an abusive relationship. He didn't physically abuse me, but he scored six out of seven!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Geeez, this sounds like my first marriage! He never wanted me out of my sight because he loved me so much, if he saw a male co-workers number in my phone book, he'd accuse me of having an affair. Twenty years after our divorce I was subbing ina middle school health class and showed a video on seven signs of an abusive relationship. He didn't physically abuse me, but he scored six out of seven!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Sounds a lot like my ex too! Abuse can take on many forms! Most think it just means physical but it can definitely be mental, emotional as well. Major manipulators too. Since he accused you all the time, maybe he was the one cheating and tried to turn the tables to hide his own faults. Thanks for stopping and leaving your precious stars and feedback! xoxo
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Yes, he was cheating....while working in a Christian
ministry!
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Ah ha! See the guilty always try to take the spotlight off themselves! Glad you found your way out! xoxo
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a stirring poem with a bit of sadness and a bit of joy mixed in. Great artwork and presentation. Nice abcb rhyme and good use of alliterations.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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This is a stirring poem with a bit of sadness and a bit of joy mixed in. Great artwork and presentation. Nice abcb rhyme and good use of alliterations.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Janet! Your stars and feedback are much appreciated! xoxo
Comment from Mr.write_4u
I really enjoyed this poem. Your experience shows. The rhymes are flawless, and the tempo is so smooth. This kinda reminds me of the saying - Don't give the key to your happiness to someone else. Thank you from sharing. Good luck.
Happy writing,
Larry
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I really enjoyed this poem. Your experience shows. The rhymes are flawless, and the tempo is so smooth. This kinda reminds me of the saying - Don't give the key to your happiness to someone else. Thank you from sharing. Good luck.
Happy writing,
Larry
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Absolutely! At least until you can be pretty sure live won?t change once it reaches that familiar stage. That?s when the ?real? person shows up! Thanks for your awesome review! xoxo
Comment from Gideon300
Beautifully written. Yes, where is that key? I'm sure many have asked. Thanks so much for writing such a soulful piece. With some grace I hope that the door will unlock for many.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Beautifully written. Yes, where is that key? I'm sure many have asked. Thanks so much for writing such a soulful piece. With some grace I hope that the door will unlock for many.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thank you for appreciating this piece! I should do a sequel piece that speaks about the key to your heart is within your own heart! :). xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Where is the key to unlock this chain around the heart...I would perhaps want that chain taken away from the body. It would be bad enough if it was placed on a person's ankles. No one wants to be a prisoner of love.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Where is the key to unlock this chain around the heart...I would perhaps want that chain taken away from the body. It would be bad enough if it was placed on a person's ankles. No one wants to be a prisoner of love.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Ah, if she only knew the key is right there in her own heart!! :). xoxo
Comment from Ricky1024
"Chain Around My Heart" This is Well written rich in
Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no grammar issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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"Chain Around My Heart" This is Well written rich in
Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no grammar issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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thanks Doc! xoxoxo
