Prelude to Spring
Spring...Lovely Spring Contest entry3 total reviews
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
A lovely song to celebrate the arrival of Spring. Rhyming where ever rhyming words were available, which makes it a bit forced, but it is a good entry for this contest
I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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A lovely song to celebrate the arrival of Spring. Rhyming where ever rhyming words were available, which makes it a bit forced, but it is a good entry for this contest
I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Dear Marjon, Thank you for your compliments, review, and comment about forced rhyme. I was not aware that I was "force-rhyming' but I will go in and look at it again. Another reviewer also mentioned "force-rhyming" to me regarding this poem.
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Still: a lovely poem!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I like the image of March winds that feel like bee's sting. Rhyme and rhythm seem somewhat forced--perhaps you can tweak. Some of the phrases are common and/or redundant (e.g. joy and bliss; heart sing; gentle kiss)--perhaps freshen them up. Creative juxtaposition: re winds hot and cold--never thought of it that way--also: invisible treasure.
Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I like the image of March winds that feel like bee's sting. Rhyme and rhythm seem somewhat forced--perhaps you can tweak. Some of the phrases are common and/or redundant (e.g. joy and bliss; heart sing; gentle kiss)--perhaps freshen them up. Creative juxtaposition: re winds hot and cold--never thought of it that way--also: invisible treasure.
Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Dear LIZ, Thank you for your review and suggestions.
Comment from moongirlwriter
I do so love all the seasons but possibly I love spring best. It's when everything in life awakens and has the feel of starting anew on a clean slate. The poem describes it perfectly and the artwork works well too.
Best of luck to you with this piece.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I do so love all the seasons but possibly I love spring best. It's when everything in life awakens and has the feel of starting anew on a clean slate. The poem describes it perfectly and the artwork works well too.
Best of luck to you with this piece.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Dear moongirlwriter, Thank you for your comments, compliments and review.
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:)
