Comment from robyn corum

Exceptional

Dear Mystery Poet,

After reading the other poem, I decided to come check out more of your work.

I am so glad I did. This poem had me ROLLING. The only thing I didn't like about it is that I didn't write it! hahahaha

I think I may tiptoe a bit more through your portfolio... but I'm kinda scared, because I don't have many sixes.....

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020

Thank you for the excellent review and the giant sixer, Robyn. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. It was actually quite a task to pull it off, purposely making screwed up like this and still keep it in meter.

Yes, please do. I'm sure you'll find some gems in there. No need to review them, just have a chuckle or two. I write a lot of dumb stuff. Haha.

I dearly appreciate the six, Robyn. Thank you again.

;)

Ron

Comment from Helena Frances

Excellent

This is fun and clever -- brought a big smile -- thank you:)
Muddled through all the entries and was rewarded by your amusing piece.
You got my vote:)
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2020

Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Helena. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and support. I'm glad you liked this silliness. I hope you have a wonderful night and upcoming weekend. Thank you again.

;)

Ron

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

this is a cute poem! You ran your sentences over perfectly to make the point. Zeroing in on the flaw you were trying to achieve. I love how you ended it by not having room to finish your sentence!{
Good job!
Patty

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020

Thank you for the great review, Patty. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.

Comment from Marjon van Bruggen

Excellent

Because I am an awful sonnet-writer myself, I do not make an excellent judge of this poem, but I'll give it a try.
First: (and perhaps the most sincere answer) I like it! It is witty and entertaining. I just LOVE the not-finished end of sen-
The meter seems fairly right to me as well, here and there a bit made-to-match, but ok. It adds to the fun part.
Over all, well done!

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020

Thank you for the great review, Marjon. It is actually in iambic meter. The trick is to read it in the da DUM da DUM rhythm without paying attention to where the periods are. That way it's in meter. I really appreciate the generous stars, M. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.

reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 19-Feb-2020

I know it had to be read as a da DUM da DUM. And I did that too. So it was a good metered sonnet, but with funny abbreviations and constructions. Which made it a funny poem.

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020

Thank you for the great review and stars, 13.

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

I have never seen a sonnet like that one before and you cleverly told us what it ought to be while demonstrating one that is not. Witty, pithy and intelligent.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020

Thank you for the great review, Sally. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.