Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written heartfelt playful love poem. It describes the playful love between a married couple that never gets bored but show the mutual love still exists.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020

Thank you so much, Sandra! Everything you said is so true. We have the Lord Jesus Christ and God Almighty to thank, for bringing us together and making us One, and keeping us together throughout the ups and downs of life. We are indeed blessed.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Sounds like you both enjoy each other's company. That is so wonderful to read. I enjoyed reading your love poem. I hope you do well in the contest. Have a wonderful week of writing.
Drew xx

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020

Thank you very much, Drew. I appreciate your excellent and sweet review. We really do love being together. Enjoy your week, too! Mary Kay xoxo

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is sweet and sexy in the best way. Married love is so fun. I'm glad you had fun with this one, Mary Kay. A wonderful offering for the upcoming contest.

One small suggestion, if I may. After "it stops" there is no punctuation. I would add, "It stops...."

Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020

Thank you so much, my friend. I also appreciate your suggestion, and always hope my friends (and anyone else) feels free to make them.
The absence of punctuation is deliberate there. It stops with no demarcation. It is meant to convey the total absence of communication at that point. I hope that doesn't seem pretentious. It felt right, but I hope I'm not wrong.
I am generally obsessive about punctuation etc., but I
wouldn't want it to be misunderstood, and it could be, because I'm not e. e. cummings, lol. For now, I think I'll take a chance, and leave it as it is. Thank you for having my back :-)
Love always.
Mary Kay

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

What a fun free verse without pattern but definitely carrying such a wonderful message!! ;) A unique offering for the contest that stands on a plateau of its own -- well done! And hooray for you and Jorge!! ;)

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020

Thank you very much for your excellent, enthusiastic and very positive review! I appreciate the great comments you shared. God bless you. - Mary Kay

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I don't think you need that warning for this lovely free verse poem. You show us the mundane things of a love life and there is joy and appreciation of your husband that really shines in this poem. I like that you cover all the typical issues of spouses sharing a bed. Best wishes in the contest!

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020

Thank you so much, Helen! Yes, there's nothing overtly sexual here, but you never know how sensitive some folks might be, so I thought I would put the warning on, just in case. I hope no one is disappointed, lol! Thanks for your excellent and thoughtful feedback. God bless you, my friend.

reply by lyenochka on 17-Feb-2020

You're most welcome! It was very artistically done! Who knows? Maybe the warning can draw in the curious?

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020

Very true, and thank you again!