Blue-hued
A free verse poem in attempt to understand Alzheimer disease26 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Blue-hued, after reading the notes below, has a poignant characterization of the stifling effects of the disease on activity and frightened reactions with temperament.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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This free verse, Blue-hued, after reading the notes below, has a poignant characterization of the stifling effects of the disease on activity and frightened reactions with temperament.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Bill, thank you from the bottom of my heart. This is such a personal poem and it feels so good to see that people understand.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful and mournful offering, Marjon -- know he was still 'there' when you wrote this, but he wasn't 'really' there and that pain and questioning comes through this so well! ;) You really should consider gathering them all up the during and the after and sharing it through a book that others in your situation could 'use' as a springboard for their own release... :) Thanx for sharing this piece of your heart! ;)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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A beautiful and mournful offering, Marjon -- know he was still 'there' when you wrote this, but he wasn't 'really' there and that pain and questioning comes through this so well! ;) You really should consider gathering them all up the during and the after and sharing it through a book that others in your situation could 'use' as a springboard for their own release... :) Thanx for sharing this piece of your heart! ;)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Yvette, Once again: thank you so much. I am busy with what you are suggesting. I have a series of 30 poems under the book name "A Silent Cry. And I am trying to find my way now in Publishing Land hoping to find someone interested in these poems to publish them.
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Hooray!! ;)
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Thanks for the cheering!
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Thanks for the cheering!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great free verse about dealing with the ravages of Alzheimer's. I like the images, alliteration and line breaks that you used very well. Thanks for sharing.
Bill
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Great free verse about dealing with the ravages of Alzheimer's. I like the images, alliteration and line breaks that you used very well. Thanks for sharing.
Bill
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Bill, Thanks. So very, very much, because it means so much to me.
Comment from Therese Caron
I work in a nursing home and your words ring true. The residents are still in there somewhere, and we love when they are having a good day and we see glimpses of their true personalities. 'He's there, with wild and meaningless sincerity.' Outstanding. I feel for you truly, as I see residents and their family members every day. You are in my thoughts. By the way, magnificent poem!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I work in a nursing home and your words ring true. The residents are still in there somewhere, and we love when they are having a good day and we see glimpses of their true personalities. 'He's there, with wild and meaningless sincerity.' Outstanding. I feel for you truly, as I see residents and their family members every day. You are in my thoughts. By the way, magnificent poem!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Therese, I love your comment, because I see you understand.
Thank you very much.
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I Added to it because I hit save by mistake after the word outstanding.
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Therese, thanks again, that was kind of you.
Comment from JP Writer
It's hard to imagine what it must feel like to slowly lose your life partner to this disease, watching helplessly as his mind recedes... like "Far stars transport dim lights
to ghostly trees, dissolving
into endless distance---
wide, vast, living stretches of sky."
This poem is hauntingly and tragically beautiful and touching. Good luck on your journey ahead.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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It's hard to imagine what it must feel like to slowly lose your life partner to this disease, watching helplessly as his mind recedes... like "Far stars transport dim lights
to ghostly trees, dissolving
into endless distance---
wide, vast, living stretches of sky."
This poem is hauntingly and tragically beautiful and touching. Good luck on your journey ahead.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Jayne, once again you found my poem and gave me your beautiful five stars! Thank you again. So appreciated!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Blue Hued", is an extremely well-written an deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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"Blue Hued", is an extremely well-written an deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Good morning, Duchess, and thank you very much indeed for this glowing review of Blue-hued. It made me very happy. I posted already a second poem in this series. I hope you will read it.
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Marjorie van Bruggen,
You're very welcome.
God bless and best wishes,
the Duchess :)))
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Please call me Marjon. And THANK YOU again.
Marjon's a beautiful name.
You're very welcome.
God bless and best wishes,
the Duchess
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:) :)
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent much appreciated this one it has good movement poise direction solemnity phrasing and imagery with good line use and control which develops its theme and delivery.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Excellent much appreciated this one it has good movement poise direction solemnity phrasing and imagery with good line use and control which develops its theme and delivery.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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B, I like this comment a lot. I see you read the poem with care and attention, which means so much to me, especially with this poem. Thank you!
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Anytime ...
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Every time I read this through, I get a different sensation washing over me. From chills to sweats to drowsiness to wide-eyed awake, your descriptive words speak to me deeply. This is poetic yet, sounds like a whispered admission, to someone, who can't be heard by your late husband. Your metaphors are strong and impressive. Your occasional rhymes help keep it cohesive and readable. The power of the last two stanzas speaks to me the most. My favorite lines are: "He's there with wild and meaningless sincerity." And, "Awake, I waver still between belief and doubt." This addresses how he comes across, and then, how you try to deal with it. The last line's depth, speaks of things you wish weren't true, yet they are inevitable.
Well written, and such poignancy, that it drips off the page and into my conscience. Keep posting and submitting, and I'm sure you will find offers from publishers. Just don't give up trying.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Every time I read this through, I get a different sensation washing over me. From chills to sweats to drowsiness to wide-eyed awake, your descriptive words speak to me deeply. This is poetic yet, sounds like a whispered admission, to someone, who can't be heard by your late husband. Your metaphors are strong and impressive. Your occasional rhymes help keep it cohesive and readable. The power of the last two stanzas speaks to me the most. My favorite lines are: "He's there with wild and meaningless sincerity." And, "Awake, I waver still between belief and doubt." This addresses how he comes across, and then, how you try to deal with it. The last line's depth, speaks of things you wish weren't true, yet they are inevitable.
Well written, and such poignancy, that it drips off the page and into my conscience. Keep posting and submitting, and I'm sure you will find offers from publishers. Just don't give up trying.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Jesse, this is a very dear review for me of blue hued. It makes me glad I posted this very personal poem -I must confess I hesitated a long time, afraid it would not be understood- with the idea of waiting for what kind of reactions I would get. Depending on that, if I should post more of this series or better not. Well, I think I love you all for the wonderful, uplifting and encouraging reactions! You, especially, for reading this poem so carefully, finding the underlying subtleties and poetry in this therapeutical work. If I still had one possible reviewer-reward, I would have used it for you, but...alas, they have all gone. I have already posted another poem in this series, I hope you will find it.
You take care too, Jesse.
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You're very welcome. I enjoyed reading, and deciphering, what your words meant. I will find the time to read the next one in your series.
Take care, Jesse
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Ta, Jesse!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully worded poem in trying to understand the plight of the one suffering from Alzheimers disease and being a caretaker for that one. I am glad you have been able to write therapeutic poems. Writing poetry has always be a blessing for me since I have bi-polar disorder.
Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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This is a beautifully worded poem in trying to understand the plight of the one suffering from Alzheimers disease and being a caretaker for that one. I am glad you have been able to write therapeutic poems. Writing poetry has always be a blessing for me since I have bi-polar disorder.
Patricia
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Patricia. So kind of you to say.
Comment from Gail Denham
So many people are going through this - or having a mate go through them. It's rough and scary and horrible. Your last line is so good - "the narrowness grows wide and deep" - My mom either had dementia or Altz. - she had hallucinations at times. So hard to lose your mother to another place. and you losing your husband to that place.
I hope you will write more on this subject - it could help folks a lot.
Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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So many people are going through this - or having a mate go through them. It's rough and scary and horrible. Your last line is so good - "the narrowness grows wide and deep" - My mom either had dementia or Altz. - she had hallucinations at times. So hard to lose your mother to another place. and you losing your husband to that place.
I hope you will write more on this subject - it could help folks a lot.
Good job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Gail. Very much. Today I will post another one of this series.
