Nightly Terrors
5-7-5 (slivers of moonlight)8 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
When I was young my nonna used to tell me that I had nothing to fear at night if I had been una brava bambina ( biggrin)
Sometimes when I have watched a horror movie my mind starts wondering once I'm under the bed sheets.
slivers of moonlight ...is creative wording
those Criss-cross on the ceiling make me think of blades ..knife blades
which of course would direct my thoughts towards a scary , sinister presence like the murderer in your artwork ..
The first two line for me alone are worth a six star vote..
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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When I was young my nonna used to tell me that I had nothing to fear at night if I had been una brava bambina ( biggrin)
Sometimes when I have watched a horror movie my mind starts wondering once I'm under the bed sheets.
slivers of moonlight ...is creative wording
those Criss-cross on the ceiling make me think of blades ..knife blades
which of course would direct my thoughts towards a scary , sinister presence like the murderer in your artwork ..
The first two line for me alone are worth a six star vote..
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Your imaginative comments are worthy of an extra star if I had to rate the same. I have used mkflood for other artworks to accompany my poems. He has a most distinctive style and sone are whimsical.
So very pleased that this post scared you and reminded you of a childhood experience.
Mark
Comment from prodigal
Not sure abbreviating is best on a syllable count poem. May be a preference thing. When I used to go to church and the idiotic hymnal read o'er, I always sang it as over.
"Terror floats above"is the same syllable count and doesn't abbreviate.
Happy writing to you. Sorry to get caught up on a little detail.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
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Not sure abbreviating is best on a syllable count poem. May be a preference thing. When I used to go to church and the idiotic hymnal read o'er, I always sang it as over.
"Terror floats above"is the same syllable count and doesn't abbreviate.
Happy writing to you. Sorry to get caught up on a little detail.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
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Hi Prodigal!
THANKS for your vote of confidence for this post. If I was not such a slave to my 5-7-5 syllable style, I would have used over. Some may argue the pronunciation of o'er is two syllables LOL
Mark
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Right there with you. It?s a quirky thing. The cool thing was nothing was lost.
I?ve been off this site for over a decade and coming back to some tough reading. Mostly skips. I thought it was good.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
That's pretty cool. This is a wonderful little poem that should do very well in the contest. The picture accompanying this poem is absolutely perfect and funny. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
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That's pretty cool. This is a wonderful little poem that should do very well in the contest. The picture accompanying this poem is absolutely perfect and funny. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
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THANKS for your endorsement. I have used mkflood for other artworks. He has a website too.
Mark
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup, your poem could pass as a horror especially when you have the night terrors crossing yuour bedroom. "slivers of moonlight
criss-cross my bedroom ceiling ~
scary thoughts float 'bove " Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Yup, your poem could pass as a horror especially when you have the night terrors crossing yuour bedroom. "slivers of moonlight
criss-cross my bedroom ceiling ~
scary thoughts float 'bove " Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thanks Iza for your review of my scary verse. I never believed in ghosts and don't recall as a kid about being afraid of monsters in my bedroom (-;
Mark
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Since we moved out to the country, it gets REALLY dark at night.... I actually put a small night light in our master bath and others throughout the house!! ;) :) But this is a great offering for the contest BLOTN!! ;) Know a lot of people that the slightest little thing 'sets them off' and they can't sleep! ;) Good luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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LOL!! Since we moved out to the country, it gets REALLY dark at night.... I actually put a small night light in our master bath and others throughout the house!! ;) :) But this is a great offering for the contest BLOTN!! ;) Know a lot of people that the slightest little thing 'sets them off' and they can't sleep! ;) Good luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thanks Yvette!
Boo-hoo - scared ya'!
Methinks the artwork is scarier than my verse. But regardless, I appreciate your comments on this post.
Mark
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Lol! You might be right! ;)
Comment from MamaBebop
Mark,
This is a scary one. It is good. You amaze me with your ability to come up with these 5-7-5. My husband says I can't speak less than 100 syllables, so this my be problem!!! LOL
Your ghost has a knife though? Who ya gonna call?
Or time to move?
Blessings,
Beth
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Mark,
This is a scary one. It is good. You amaze me with your ability to come up with these 5-7-5. My husband says I can't speak less than 100 syllables, so this my be problem!!! LOL
Your ghost has a knife though? Who ya gonna call?
Or time to move?
Blessings,
Beth
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Bet,
Thanks for your review. Yes, my poems are short, but my wife also complains about my 100 syllable chats.
Mark
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Hahaha ;)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mark,
I guess we've all scared ourselves at night, haven't we? We tend to think the worst things in the dark.
I like you first line. They partner well with the silhouette of a man with a knife.
"slivers of moonlight"
And you bring them alive in your second line,
"criss-cross my bedroom ceiling"
But then you change themes from a killer to a ghost. Can I make a suggestion?
(murdering thoughts plot")
Oftentimes, our thoughts get the best of us. They lead to nightmares.
Just my take on your poem. Terrific subject!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Hi Mark,
I guess we've all scared ourselves at night, haven't we? We tend to think the worst things in the dark.
I like you first line. They partner well with the silhouette of a man with a knife.
"slivers of moonlight"
And you bring them alive in your second line,
"criss-cross my bedroom ceiling"
But then you change themes from a killer to a ghost. Can I make a suggestion?
(murdering thoughts plot")
Oftentimes, our thoughts get the best of us. They lead to nightmares.
Just my take on your poem. Terrific subject!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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KimBob,
You edit is a very good one. However I composed the poem before I found the artwork. So I will just leave it with the scary and not murdering thoughts as the artwork had suggested.
Mark
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Good for you, Mark.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest.
This short verse tells of loss of nightly terrors.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest.
This short verse tells of loss of nightly terrors.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Sharon,
Thanks for your supportive review for my scary poem and good wishes.
Mark
