Broken Reflections Within
five line poem with count6 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
When it comes to poetry, as I've said many times, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. Rhythm, meter, and structure mean little to me, but voice, melody, and imagery can excite even the simplest of minds. Thank for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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When it comes to poetry, as I've said many times, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. Rhythm, meter, and structure mean little to me, but voice, melody, and imagery can excite even the simplest of minds. Thank for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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OMG meter kills me! Haha. I joined FS to actually work on my essays about childhood "Chasing Crazy". But then I met some great writers and they taught me all types of poetry. I was very into it for a few years. It helped my prose a lot actually. THEN I found flash fiction. I love that. Abs that has helped me tighten up my writing.
Hopefully I can get back to my essays. They just take a toll on me. But I always write them with humor.
Hey man thank you again, really.
Comment from Janetsue
This is an excellent five line poem for the contest, Gregory. It gives readers a lot to think about. The coordinating image adds another layer of meaning to your words. I enjoyed reading this very much.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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This is an excellent five line poem for the contest, Gregory. It gives readers a lot to think about. The coordinating image adds another layer of meaning to your words. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much!
Comment from royowen
I tend to agree with you, faceless men with chaotic ideas that make for interesting copy with little substance, modern philosophies tend to stay where they belong, as part of man's rejection of truth. Well done, good entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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I tend to agree with you, faceless men with chaotic ideas that make for interesting copy with little substance, modern philosophies tend to stay where they belong, as part of man's rejection of truth. Well done, good entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Nice read! Thank you my friend
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Good job
Comment from rama devi
Wow--powerful imagery, awesome word choices and word economy. I had to look up the word ichor. Wow. Intense imagery, my friend. The phonics are superb, too, especially consonance of F, S, P and R. Bravo. Potent presentaiton. A six.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Wow--powerful imagery, awesome word choices and word economy. I had to look up the word ichor. Wow. Intense imagery, my friend. The phonics are superb, too, especially consonance of F, S, P and R. Bravo. Potent presentaiton. A six.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Oh you're AWESOME!! Thank you so much Rama :)
I can't wait until I actually get all my essays done so I can compile them for you to edit. I hope by then I can pay you a Ton, AND a bonus or maybe even royalties ;)
I just posted an essay called Wading With Dinosaurs. It got kind of beat up. Well it has been my least popular post for some reason. Actually I know why. ALL my essays are humorous. This one was not. BUT I think I really need to have Some filler material to show my mom's character and just another snapshot of my life, etc. So it wasn't funny I guess and came off as sad. Ugh I never want it to come across as a sob story.
Anyway, if you happen to come across it one day when you are bored. Please please don't feel the need to review. You can just tell me what you think here! Really, no need to feel obligated At All to write anything or rate. You will be reading this again one day when we're editing! ;)
You're the best. Are you in the states?
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I'm looking forward to reading your future work and this one too. I believe it's good to have a balance of humor and seriousness...both are needed in life!
I've been swamped with editing work and only review a bit here and there. I'll definitely read your Wading story tomorrow and get back to you. Brain is mush at the moment.
Yes, I am in the States...maybe for much of the year.
You're one of my favorites on FS...did you know?
Warmest Smiles,
rd
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That genuinely made me smile. Thank you. Really.
And Please don't worry about reading it. I was just insecure with the response it got. I mean it wasn't funny but it was well written I thought. Hmm. Haha there I go again.
But yes please don't stress about it!
I'm happy to hear you are editing a lot. Sounds busy, but you get to put your genius to work. Let the universe utilize your talent, if that makes sense :)
Have a Great weekend my friend,
Greg
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Thanks, my dear friend. I've got over fifty reviews I've not responded to yet...and a bulldog boarding here who snores loudly half the day, making it hard for me to concentrate. So I have not read your post yet. I'm hoping to read your whole memoir one day when you send it for editing! Anyway, I still have no focus to read it now but I did scan your reviews and that nasty one is actually report-able because it's so negative and rude and unfair too. I scanned a brief browse and it looks well written (though a few minor nits I'll mention if I get time to review or when we edit).
I'm so fatigued at the moment, I can't even focus on reading my reviews. That's mostly because the bulldog's snores kept me up ALL night. Whew. She goes home Sunday, thankfully! She really smells awful too--but she's so sweet and lovable anyway. So ugly she is cute!
Some people are that way too. Even the nasty reviewer will have some redeeming quality we'd discover if we knew them better or knew thier whole story...perhaps that person did not like the 'language' because of growing up in a home where it prevailed...so it pushed a painful button of unhealed wounds. When someone's negativity is disproportionate (as in this case), I try to assume they need healing and love...desperately. So, let's forgive and send love....help shift the world's energy one situation at a time...
Love, Light, Peace and Smiles,
rd
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I don't know if I replied yet? Hmm. Well have a great night either way :)
I wanted to know who the snorer was exactly. And where are you in the country?
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I'm in Florida! I've been dog-sitting, so the snorer was a bull dog. She went home today. Whew! I'll answer reviews sometime this week.
Comment from Pantygynt
When I joined FanStory one of the first 'new words' I learned was 'petrichor' so I was interested to find a cut-down version 'ichor' here. Instead of marking you down for using words I didn't understand, as one member used to do back then, I looked it up and carved another notch on my belt of knowledge.
This little piece cleverly captures everything I hate about urban life. Mind you, it is pretty beastly, and full of puddles around my rural, Welsh home at the moment.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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When I joined FanStory one of the first 'new words' I learned was 'petrichor' so I was interested to find a cut-down version 'ichor' here. Instead of marking you down for using words I didn't understand, as one member used to do back then, I looked it up and carved another notch on my belt of knowledge.
This little piece cleverly captures everything I hate about urban life. Mind you, it is pretty beastly, and full of puddles around my rural, Welsh home at the moment.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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I've actually never heard petrichor. Hmm. Interesting! Thank you so much. I've always liked this word weirdly. :)
Comment from visionary1234
Well I have to confess that I had to run to the dictionary for 'ichor' - what a fabulous word. Cinched the deal for me on a sixer as that one word was so apt/well chosen. Bravo Mr 5 line poet!!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Well I have to confess that I had to run to the dictionary for 'ichor' - what a fabulous word. Cinched the deal for me on a sixer as that one word was so apt/well chosen. Bravo Mr 5 line poet!!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You're the best thank you ;)
