Football Surprise
A contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I have heard that nurses and phlebotomists practice on oranges but never heard of injecting vodka. That streaking must have helped one or the other. Thanks for the fun story!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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I have heard that nurses and phlebotomists practice on oranges but never heard of injecting vodka. That streaking must have helped one or the other. Thanks for the fun story!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2020
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LOL Helen you are so welcome, I guess it was a bigger thing back home in Canada.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Alie. I can understand and appreciate this flash fiction because I knew about both injecting vodka into oranges and streaking. I wonder if people knew what streaking was when they read the piece?? I did. Did you get any inquiries about that term. If so, you may want to put a footnote to explain it. I worked in a restaurant with big picture windows overlooking a duck pond. It was a very ta-ta place. Invariably around dusk the streakers ran past the window to the shock of diners. Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hi Alie. I can understand and appreciate this flash fiction because I knew about both injecting vodka into oranges and streaking. I wonder if people knew what streaking was when they read the piece?? I did. Did you get any inquiries about that term. If so, you may want to put a footnote to explain it. I worked in a restaurant with big picture windows overlooking a duck pond. It was a very ta-ta place. Invariably around dusk the streakers ran past the window to the shock of diners. Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Marilyn, only one reviewer didn't understand about streakers, those were the good times.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This short story tells of eating spiked oranges at a game.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt.
This short story tells of eating spiked oranges at a game.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Thank you Sharon for reading, reviewing and your great comments and the good luck wishes.
Comment from Susan Larson
Cute story for the 100 word flash fiction contest. We did that once with oranges in the dorm back in the 60's. Not because we were into drinking. It was just for the sake of getting away with something!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Cute story for the 100 word flash fiction contest. We did that once with oranges in the dorm back in the 60's. Not because we were into drinking. It was just for the sake of getting away with something!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Susan for reading, reviewing and your kind comments. Yea for the 60's and 70's. I agree that it wasn't because we were into drinking but more so getting away with it. (smile)
Comment from Shirley McLain
How ingenious to think of filling the oranges with vodka. I would have not thought of that as a way to get alcohol into a game. Excellent job and good luck with the contest. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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How ingenious to think of filling the oranges with vodka. I would have not thought of that as a way to get alcohol into a game. Excellent job and good luck with the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Shirley for reading, reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Janet Foor
Vodka and orange juice - my kind of football game. I guess I would prefer Peach Schnapps but that might be too girly for a football player. :))))
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Vodka and orange juice - my kind of football game. I guess I would prefer Peach Schnapps but that might be too girly for a football player. :))))
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for reading, reviewing Janet, you kind comments were wonderful.
Comment from royowen
What a good idea to slow down one's opponent, and as a former drunk, I can tell you that it was a great way to slow me down, one loses all sense of proportion. As does a football player be slowed down. This is hilarious, Well done great entry, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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What a good idea to slow down one's opponent, and as a former drunk, I can tell you that it was a great way to slow me down, one loses all sense of proportion. As does a football player be slowed down. This is hilarious, Well done great entry, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Roy for reading and reviewing and your great comments.
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Well done
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Crazy college kids do crazy things ... vodka may or may not be involved! ;) :) LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing such 'flashback' and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Crazy college kids do crazy things ... vodka may or may not be involved! ;) :) LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing such 'flashback' and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Yvette for reading and reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
It sounds like someone or more than one had indulged to much. What will they think when they sober up with pictures floating around the internet? You could never live that down. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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It sounds like someone or more than one had indulged to much. What will they think when they sober up with pictures floating around the internet? You could never live that down. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Jeffrey for reading and reviewing and your great comments.
Comment from rspoet
Your story made sense up to the last line
with the students enjoying the vodka laced oranges.
Didn't quite get:
"Oh no, someone had been enjoying, so streaking was game."
Otherwise a good story.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Your story made sense up to the last line
with the students enjoying the vodka laced oranges.
Didn't quite get:
"Oh no, someone had been enjoying, so streaking was game."
Otherwise a good story.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much Robert for reading and reviewing and your great comments. Someone(s) had oranges earlier and decided to streak across the game field.
