Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Thunderstorm brings hailstones, quite a rhyme and motion in these two words. I think you nailed this haiku is perfect. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is heavy weather. It feels like a strong wind coming in this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like this poem. Good luck in the contest! Nice job.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

reply by Raul1 on 16-Feb-2020

You're welcome. :)

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This excellent. You capture the sometimes destructive power of hailstorms. I haven't seen a hailstorm since I moved to Ohio. When I was young they were common.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your rating, review and comments, they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from estory

Excellent

There's an oriental feel to this haiku, a sense of balance and a great natural image that is so much a part of the tradition of haiku, and you almost get to that epiphany moment in the last line but just not quite, I think. Groundbreaking. It's a great summation; but groundbreaking in what sense? From where to what? In order to get to the next level you need to make the jump and create that epiphany moment, that insight into human experience that makes truly outstanding haiku. It's close. estory

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments, they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

The words and artwork match perfectly. May the hail is groundbreaking for a seed to drop in and grow. I like the blue background for water.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.

dp

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

reply by dragonpoet on 16-Feb-2020

You're welcome on all accounts.
Do

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your wordplay with "groundbreaking" and the parallel picture to intensify your description in this 5-7-3 Haiku even further. Best wishes in the competition- Joan

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Joan,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from L. R. Jensen

Excellent

We used to live in a place with fierce thunderstorms and hailstones were just part of the soundtrack!

Great imagery here. And I love the use of the words "pulverizing" and "groundbreaking".

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments,they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Portia!!! I love this Haiku!!! You hit all the markers! I wish you had waited a little longer to put it up, I haven't got any 6's to give you right now. It's 6-worthy... so, here's a virtual 6 for you... :) Nice job! :)

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Susan,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and the virtual six star rating, they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from Barbaraj1

Excellent

Pharp, you have written a wonderful Haiku about a thunderstorm. You bring up wonderful images....pulverizing hailstones and groundbreaking.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Barbara,


Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments, and best wishes they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia

Comment from Gypsymooncat

Excellent

I thought this was a very descriptive haiku, that really puts the image of a savage storm in the reader's mind and eye. Not to mention those pulverising hail stones that are "groundbreaking". Good luck in the voting!

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes, they are greatly appreciated.

Blessings...Portia