Comment from damommy

Excellent

As you know, I've had doubts about Helen from the first. I'm glad Abdul had to suffer. In fact, he needed to suffer some more. It sounds like Bisto and Charles may be headed for home. I hope so!

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks for following this saga, Yvonne. I think Charles and Bisto will also be relieved to be heading home!

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Keep it coming, Tony. Rich with description and dialog..and all that guff!
Vividly clever ...it isn't far...Abdul would not have agreed. ......medieval torture...add wooden wheels banded with iron...The munching donkey bit puts it over the top! Cheers. LIZ

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks, Liz. Nearly done now. Just a few loose ends to tie up.

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

"how the King of the Jungle was faring." Jungle???

Bisto is surprisingly nonchalant. Perhaps it's displaced resentment at Charles charging off on his own. I have friends with passive aggressive tendencies!

These two specific points came to mind, Tony. But in general this chapter is somewhat puzzling. Quite the anticlimax.

Perhaps you have some excitement up your sleeve.

Blessings Julia

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks for your observation here, Julia. There are several things about this chapter which, on reflection, I intend to change. You have articulated a couple of them. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony

reply by juliaSjames on 15-Feb-2020

You're welcome. I applaud your determination. By now you must dream of your characters.

Blessings Julia

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Good reading as always and the story is full of tension. Not knowing what will happen next kept me reading. You did a great job and I'm looking forward to more of the story. Shirley

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks, Shirley. The story is almost done. Just a few loose ends to tie up. Thanks for your interest. All the best, Tony

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Yet another good chapter, tying up the loose bits. Abdul's journey would have been a torturous one, Believe me I know what it is to have a broken rib. I sustained two when I fell into a storm water trench some years ago.
Best wishes
Sylvia

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks, Sylvia. You're right about the broken ribs! I've cracked mine once or twice, and that is bad enough!

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Hello Tony,
A solid chapter for the book. I would have expected The Lion
to be more "manely." He's seems overly meek, or is it a case
of the bully being mostly bluff?
Many books I've read in this genre have long extended finales.
Don't think you need caps on police checkpoint.
Bisto appears to have forgotten all about Helen and Kayla in his greeting. Seems a bit out of character to me.
The next chapter is key to a satisfactory ending. It's the human element that
is essential.
Overall, a solid chapter.
Robert

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020

Thanks for your observation here, Robert. There are several things about this chapter which, on reflection, I intend to change. You have articulated one or two of them. Appreciated. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from estory

Excellent

I was expecting a little more action in this chapter, so it was a definite drop in tempo, although you had some good descriptions of the journey over the bumpy road and the pain Abdul was in. Coughing up blood was an eyebrow raiser. But you kind of set this up for something more and I expected a bit more of a James Bond finish to this. Maybe at least kissing the girls at the end. estory

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks, estory. There's still a bit more to come. I'm hoping to get most of the loose ends tied up in the last couple of chapters. All the best, Tony.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think this is one of the best stories I've read for awhile my friend. It's more than exciting, there are some pretty good literary fodder here, but yours is one of the best. Abdul's in bad shape, but probably as antagonists go deservedly so. Well dine, Tony, blessings, Roy

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Roy. Appreciated, as always. Tony

reply by royowen on 16-Feb-2020

Well done

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I'm so glad everyone is alright, well alive at least. Every time you described Abdule's pain I though I'm glad he's hurting, he deserves it. The chapter is a very well-written, interesting start to finish. Great job as always.

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Dawn. I'm hoping to get most of the loose ends tied up in the last couple of chapters. All the best, Tony.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Tony,

I agree with the friend. I find it hard to believe things are over with Helen. They've been through far too much together. I'm glad the bad guy made it to police custody where he belongs. Sewing up all loose threads... Nice job!

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020

Thanks, Robyn. I appreciate your comments. I'm hoping to get most of the loose ends tied up in the last couple of chapters. All the best, Tony.