Torn Asunder
Monologue Trilogy: A family implosion18 total reviews
Comment from Yardier
A tale of pathos told too often these days. Wisdom, heart ache, and simmering revenge all rolled up into a Tootsie Roll turd.
Winners? Nope, just whiners, criers and accusers shuffling down a street called hope looking for a better view.
All the best, Yard
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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A tale of pathos told too often these days. Wisdom, heart ache, and simmering revenge all rolled up into a Tootsie Roll turd.
Winners? Nope, just whiners, criers and accusers shuffling down a street called hope looking for a better view.
All the best, Yard
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thankssssss for stopping by! Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very well-written sad story of how a family situation can spin out of control from lack of communication. You did an excellent telling of the situation from the point of view of each of the subjects. If Diana had laid down the ground rules to Cindy and the girls it would have been better. She then comes off as a villain. Denny is caught between a rock and a hard place.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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A very well-written sad story of how a family situation can spin out of control from lack of communication. You did an excellent telling of the situation from the point of view of each of the subjects. If Diana had laid down the ground rules to Cindy and the girls it would have been better. She then comes off as a villain. Denny is caught between a rock and a hard place.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for re-posting this. I missed it the first time around and it's my loss. I am glad I read it this time. I hope you're doing well. I really miss your posting and your friendship.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for re-posting this. I missed it the first time around and it's my loss. I am glad I read it this time. I hope you're doing well. I really miss your posting and your friendship.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Superb writing, Liz. You've told a sad and frustrating story about how family dynamics can abruptly change through incomplete dialogue. Doing it as a monologue script worked very well. I wish I had more stars for you.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Superb writing, Liz. You've told a sad and frustrating story about how family dynamics can abruptly change through incomplete dialogue. Doing it as a monologue script worked very well. I wish I had more stars for you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
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You are most welcome, Liz. Glad to hear the rest of the family is still doing fine.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, a lot of hard work went into this piece and many hours of someone's family squabbles and disappointment. An oh too familiar sounding situation. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Well, a lot of hard work went into this piece and many hours of someone's family squabbles and disappointment. An oh too familiar sounding situation. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from LisaMay
What a mess - the situation, not your story, which is well crafted. Three points of view each justifying their behaviour and the resulting impact... psychologically stressful on all, so everyone gets to be the victim. Without clear communication of cause and effect we are destined to have confused and wounding outcomes.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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What a mess - the situation, not your story, which is well crafted. Three points of view each justifying their behaviour and the resulting impact... psychologically stressful on all, so everyone gets to be the victim. Without clear communication of cause and effect we are destined to have confused and wounding outcomes.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know how I missed this one. i think I missed much of what you wrote. Tthe names weren't that familiar so I realized this wasn't you family. From you point of view, I guess you talked with all of them because you did an excellent job of getting into the story from everyone perspective. It is too bad the ideal family had to be torn about by what everyone involved believed it to be someone else's fault. IF you are that objective about everyone, you should be a councilor. That trait works well for a writer too.
Sorry, I'm out of sixes.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I don't know how I missed this one. i think I missed much of what you wrote. Tthe names weren't that familiar so I realized this wasn't you family. From you point of view, I guess you talked with all of them because you did an excellent job of getting into the story from everyone perspective. It is too bad the ideal family had to be torn about by what everyone involved believed it to be someone else's fault. IF you are that objective about everyone, you should be a councilor. That trait works well for a writer too.
Sorry, I'm out of sixes.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Family dynamics can be ruthless. It is a sad thing when a family falls apart. My family fell apart, and it took me many years to accept what was happening. One can only fight and beg so much. You did a great job, and I hope you have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Family dynamics can be ruthless. It is a sad thing when a family falls apart. My family fell apart, and it took me many years to accept what was happening. One can only fight and beg so much. You did a great job, and I hope you have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
Comment from karenina
Really good story! How sad that these three dwell and suffer in their own perspective lives, when a bit of honest discussion could have brought each to a common goal...
Sadly, though you tell it with wit, (love the attorney names!)--I've seen this play out in families of close friends...
There's the moral for us! Speak up! Brooding in silence just festers the wound!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Really good story! How sad that these three dwell and suffer in their own perspective lives, when a bit of honest discussion could have brought each to a common goal...
Sadly, though you tell it with wit, (love the attorney names!)--I've seen this play out in families of close friends...
There's the moral for us! Speak up! Brooding in silence just festers the wound!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
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Hello there! NO worries about late responses, it is always nice to hear from you! How sad that the stalemate remains. When death comes, the clock's run out on "do-overs."
Comment from lyenochka
I remember the scenario. It was Chuck's family, right? I remember the jealous mother who blocked her girls from seeing their favorite aunt. That's so crazy and perhaps terribly insecure of "Diana."
What I like most about this script is that it brings the audience into the minds of the players and no one thinks of themselves as the villain but everyone is the victim.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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I remember the scenario. It was Chuck's family, right? I remember the jealous mother who blocked her girls from seeing their favorite aunt. That's so crazy and perhaps terribly insecure of "Diana."
What I like most about this script is that it brings the audience into the minds of the players and no one thinks of themselves as the villain but everyone is the victim.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thanks for stopping by. Sorry for the tardy response. Fortunately, this is not my family--though given this is the family of my best friend (his son, daughter, daughter-in-law), I've been touched by the unfortunate fallout. The stalemate remains. Diana point-blank told a relative who tried to mediate that the situation was no way fixable. The "good" news is that unlike in my fictional flight of fancy here, the husband and wife continue to have a happy marriage and the girls are thriving, having long since forgotten about their aunt--they were only 5 and 6 at the time of the rift, and their parents--for shame!--told them she'd moved away.
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Yes, I remember when someone let it slip that the aunt was in town. Someday, when the kids are grown, they will reconnect...
