The Book of Retirement
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "His List"Short story about a fictive retirement
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Comment from estory
Except maybe for one spot, 'The wife come {came} home and happy {happily} exclaims...' I think the grammar is pretty good and you have been improving on that point. As always there's great sarcasm, and you paint these two unhappily married people ignoring each other's priorities and focused on themselves; which of course is a recipe for disaster. The excplitives at the end reinforce the humor, but also the seething underlying emotions of these two. Nice job in a small space. estory
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Except maybe for one spot, 'The wife come {came} home and happy {happily} exclaims...' I think the grammar is pretty good and you have been improving on that point. As always there's great sarcasm, and you paint these two unhappily married people ignoring each other's priorities and focused on themselves; which of course is a recipe for disaster. The excplitives at the end reinforce the humor, but also the seething underlying emotions of these two. Nice job in a small space. estory
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for your continuous support and for the grammar corrections
