Safe To Remember
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "My Dad Takes Care Of Me"Writing for healing
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Rebecca, yes, I can see that it must have been quite a shock what happened during that night, and I'm glad that you have such a lovely memory of your dad looking out for you. I think you were lucky that nothing else happened with those rowdy boys. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Hi Rebecca, yes, I can see that it must have been quite a shock what happened during that night, and I'm glad that you have such a lovely memory of your dad looking out for you. I think you were lucky that nothing else happened with those rowdy boys. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from scongrove
I love your little furbaby photo! So sweet! :)
Although your story was scary, you had me glued to the computer screen, girl. Wow! I felt like I was right there standing beside you while those guys were trying to get into your house. Oh my gosh! You must have been terrified, especially at that age. Things could have gone very badly that night. You definitely had an angel looking after you.
I was worried before I got to the end that maybe your parents would blame you, but joyfully, your dad stood by your side and took care of you. Whew! I was so glad to hear that.
You write your stories so compelling and full of emotion. You do have a way of bringing the reader in and keeping the tension tight. That is great talent, my friend!
Always your fan,
Shana :)
p.s. tell me more!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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I love your little furbaby photo! So sweet! :)
Although your story was scary, you had me glued to the computer screen, girl. Wow! I felt like I was right there standing beside you while those guys were trying to get into your house. Oh my gosh! You must have been terrified, especially at that age. Things could have gone very badly that night. You definitely had an angel looking after you.
I was worried before I got to the end that maybe your parents would blame you, but joyfully, your dad stood by your side and took care of you. Whew! I was so glad to hear that.
You write your stories so compelling and full of emotion. You do have a way of bringing the reader in and keeping the tension tight. That is great talent, my friend!
Always your fan,
Shana :)
p.s. tell me more!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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LOL, ok you asked for it... but you may regret that you wanted me to tell you more, HA HA! :D
You are so kind to give me one of your precious six stars. THANK YOU! I am happy with 5's too. I know that I'm not as good a writer as you and I grateful accept this precious Six.
Yes, it was one of the few times I was backed up. RARE, but so appreciated!
Thank you for complimenting me on my writing. You are so kind. Thanks for reading my friend.
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You deserved the six. Your story was very captivating! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How terrifying! I don't know how you managed but I'm glad you never backed up that creep to tell the Sheriff it was all nothing. What they had planned to do to you was not just a bit of fun! I hope he never made it into the forces, and I hope that preacher's son soon was sorted out, too. I'm glad your aunt and uncle came for you and you daddy was supportive. You need that in bad times. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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How terrifying! I don't know how you managed but I'm glad you never backed up that creep to tell the Sheriff it was all nothing. What they had planned to do to you was not just a bit of fun! I hope he never made it into the forces, and I hope that preacher's son soon was sorted out, too. I'm glad your aunt and uncle came for you and you daddy was supportive. You need that in bad times. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. Yeah, he never got in to the service. Like typical butt heads, he blamed me and kept the lie going that I had invited them over. We all know the truth though. Thankfully, I don't live anywhere near there anymore and I don't have to see these horrible human beings.
I appreciate you take the time to read and the five stars.
Comment from robyn corum
Bec,
Oh, wow. Bless your precious heart. This was terrifying to read, so I can't imagine what it was like to live out. I'm so sorry that some guys are total idiots. And then to try to guilt YOU into helping them get out of TROUBLE??? Good for you to stand strong.
You did good to share this. I think you should do more of this. I think it would be very cathartic for you. Get some of that poison out of you. I think it would probably do us all good - but some of us are not brave enough to purge. *smile* Not yet, anyway.
There were a lot of nits this time, but I made notes for you, of course -- TADA! Super EDITOR is here!!! hahaha
Here you go:
1.) It's 1982 and my family had to go out of town for something.
--> how old were you?
2.) There were (others) standing nearby
--> plural not possessive
3.) I was an extremely sound sleeper, and I don't know how long
they'd been yelling(.)
--> this is just a statement not a q
--> no comma after 'sleeper'
4.) "Who do you think I am, (S)leeping (B)eauty?"
--> a proper name - like Rebecca - needs caps
5.) Hahaha, I don't know why I said that(.)
--> statement, not a q
6.) "We want to come in and party(," o)ne guy said.
7.) and ran to my sisters' room and flipped on the light.
8.) I could hear her waking up my Uncle Richard (while she assured me,) "I'll call the Sheriff (and) we'll ...
9.) Her voice was panic(-)stricken.
10.) does the Sheriff think I 'm in on this?
--> remove the space in the 'I'm'
11.) one of the boys was a popular preacher(')s son who was a year
12.) "You know what those boys wanted(,) don't you?"
Very interesting post - though horrifying. I'm so glad you had someone you trusted you could call. And I'm so glad your dad came to your rescue. That is awesome. Thanks, sweetie.
Let me know when you edit. Hugs--
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Bec,
Oh, wow. Bless your precious heart. This was terrifying to read, so I can't imagine what it was like to live out. I'm so sorry that some guys are total idiots. And then to try to guilt YOU into helping them get out of TROUBLE??? Good for you to stand strong.
You did good to share this. I think you should do more of this. I think it would be very cathartic for you. Get some of that poison out of you. I think it would probably do us all good - but some of us are not brave enough to purge. *smile* Not yet, anyway.
There were a lot of nits this time, but I made notes for you, of course -- TADA! Super EDITOR is here!!! hahaha
Here you go:
1.) It's 1982 and my family had to go out of town for something.
--> how old were you?
2.) There were (others) standing nearby
--> plural not possessive
3.) I was an extremely sound sleeper, and I don't know how long
they'd been yelling(.)
--> this is just a statement not a q
--> no comma after 'sleeper'
4.) "Who do you think I am, (S)leeping (B)eauty?"
--> a proper name - like Rebecca - needs caps
5.) Hahaha, I don't know why I said that(.)
--> statement, not a q
6.) "We want to come in and party(," o)ne guy said.
7.) and ran to my sisters' room and flipped on the light.
8.) I could hear her waking up my Uncle Richard (while she assured me,) "I'll call the Sheriff (and) we'll ...
9.) Her voice was panic(-)stricken.
10.) does the Sheriff think I 'm in on this?
--> remove the space in the 'I'm'
11.) one of the boys was a popular preacher(')s son who was a year
12.) "You know what those boys wanted(,) don't you?"
Very interesting post - though horrifying. I'm so glad you had someone you trusted you could call. And I'm so glad your dad came to your rescue. That is awesome. Thanks, sweetie.
Let me know when you edit. Hugs--
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much. It's so funny how I miss soooo much. I THINK I have it cleaned up and NOPE!
I will go edit it now. THANK YOU, Editor! you are a big help!! Thanks for taking time to read and review. Hugs.
Comment from Teri7
This is another very well written and interesting chapter you have penned. I would have been petrified too if those guys were trying to get in my house at that age. I love the picture of your pet. So beautiful. I am glad they came to rescue you and your dad was going to take up for you. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This is another very well written and interesting chapter you have penned. I would have been petrified too if those guys were trying to get in my house at that age. I love the picture of your pet. So beautiful. I am glad they came to rescue you and your dad was going to take up for you. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you. Yes, it's a memory of my Dad I will always cherish. Thank you for taking time to read and review. I appreciate you. :)
Comment from gingermo
A well written piece. I felt the fear of this girl home alone and threatened by a mob of boys. The dialogue moved the story along and kept it interesting.The 'voice' of the girl comes through. I'm sure our departed ones look out for us. It's sad you lost your Dad and little dog. Hopefully writing about it has been therapeutic and even though memories can be painful they can also be comforting.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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A well written piece. I felt the fear of this girl home alone and threatened by a mob of boys. The dialogue moved the story along and kept it interesting.The 'voice' of the girl comes through. I'm sure our departed ones look out for us. It's sad you lost your Dad and little dog. Hopefully writing about it has been therapeutic and even though memories can be painful they can also be comforting.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you. My Dad is still with us, for how long, only God knows. He told me recently he doesn't want to do chemo or radiation. I just wanted to clarify :).
I truly appreciate your comments. It's good to know my voice is coming through and that it moves along so well. Thank you for telling me. :)) Thanks also for the five stars.
