Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

What a great ending! It really captures the nuances of the young dating relationship, where boys try their best to put on their man facades. But, to paraphrase Shakira, "the pants legs don't lie". Clever and well-written - good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Thanks for your read and encouraging review. Happy day coming up.

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

Your enjoyable little story had me chuckling. Your words take us through the fear factor with the trembling girl needing the manly reassurance of his hand to hold, yet he is the one who 'let go'.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020

Glad you liked my offering. Thanks for the review.

Comment from judester

Excellent

Good one for the contest. A little glimpse into one couple's scary night, haha. I believe whimper has an H. Good luck, see you at the finish line, cheers.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Yes, thanks for the catch on whimper. I have edited. Appreciate your input.

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

What a wonderfully written little story and I love the picture. We all get a little frightened sometimes, but letting it show is painful. I've read several of these entries today and I like this one.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Thanks for the read and the comments.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

You've written an excellent short story for the contest
With a good twist at the end.
Seems Jack was not so cool and calm as wanted to appear.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020

Thanks for the read and the comments.