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Comment from Doc Holiday
Avoiding responsibility is lying to oneself.
If you cannot be true to others, you need to be true to yourself. The Acrostic words of trues is the opposite of what lies ahead.
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Avoiding responsibility is lying to oneself.
If you cannot be true to others, you need to be true to yourself. The Acrostic words of trues is the opposite of what lies ahead.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from Chikara
This is quite a different piece than the work I've read from you. It's boastful, facetious, and attests to the wisdom of the fool lacking appreciation for the power of both words and the truth.
From an inner view, you mock these people well, for the Eternal knows the deceived and deceiver both.
The picture of the prisoner could not be better chosen.
Well done.
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This is quite a different piece than the work I've read from you. It's boastful, facetious, and attests to the wisdom of the fool lacking appreciation for the power of both words and the truth.
From an inner view, you mock these people well, for the Eternal knows the deceived and deceiver both.
The picture of the prisoner could not be better chosen.
Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from artemis53
Your notes were an interesting read that are integrated with your lines. Sorry but I don't take up challenges unless they are personakl. Things stay calmer that way ;)
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Your notes were an interesting read that are integrated with your lines. Sorry but I don't take up challenges unless they are personakl. Things stay calmer that way ;)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Alcreator,
If you continue to offer such rewards for reviewing, you are certain to receive a lot of comment and I have read a number of them. Many are, as is often found on this site, merely sycophantic seekers after the money and will happily award 5 stars because it is the easiest thing to do. Such reviews may lift your position in the FS rankings, but will do nothing to improve your work. My advice is to pay attention to the reviewers that actually offer criticism , rather than bask in the false sun of praise. I believe you have strong poetic talent and a deep thinking mind, but too often your work is not comprehensible in its grammatic presentation. PLease, please try to realise that poetry is about communication.
Best regards
Reg
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Dear Alcreator,
If you continue to offer such rewards for reviewing, you are certain to receive a lot of comment and I have read a number of them. Many are, as is often found on this site, merely sycophantic seekers after the money and will happily award 5 stars because it is the easiest thing to do. Such reviews may lift your position in the FS rankings, but will do nothing to improve your work. My advice is to pay attention to the reviewers that actually offer criticism , rather than bask in the false sun of praise. I believe you have strong poetic talent and a deep thinking mind, but too often your work is not comprehensible in its grammatic presentation. PLease, please try to realise that poetry is about communication.
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from mshugh
I think you are commenting on liars and theur ability to hide, if permitted. But the message doesn't quite come across clearly. I'm not sure if you are deliberately burying it to tease your readers - or are you just making it inaccessible?
Michael
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I think you are commenting on liars and theur ability to hide, if permitted. But the message doesn't quite come across clearly. I'm not sure if you are deliberately burying it to tease your readers - or are you just making it inaccessible?
Michael
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from FLutterodt
They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,
Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie! What a joy hide!
They and you - I like the unconventional way you put things. Again it is so refreshing and a uniques style. Wishing you all the best with the book
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They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,
Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie! What a joy hide!
They and you - I like the unconventional way you put things. Again it is so refreshing and a uniques style. Wishing you all the best with the book
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
Comment from simplyteresa
I've enjoyed several of your poems and the different styles you have used. The picture was an interesting choice to pair with your work and thought provoking as well. Good luck with your book, your work is very interesting.
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I've enjoyed several of your poems and the different styles you have used. The picture was an interesting choice to pair with your work and thought provoking as well. Good luck with your book, your work is very interesting.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
Comment from beccabootie123
wow I cannot get over your writing, it must be the sign of a great writer. it draw me in to see its message and comes across with impact. well done. love the picture
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wow I cannot get over your writing, it must be the sign of a great writer. it draw me in to see its message and comes across with impact. well done. love the picture
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Alcreator
Once again, I read your work and it is ragged. I went through and looked at the reviews, at best the five stars gives are for the $1.25 paid. You do spell out TRUES, but the liar part is muddy. Your first two lines both end in the same word, that is not a rhyme. I will not give stars where under the Fanstory guidelines they are not warranted. Stars are awarded for poetic clarity. In this I do not see clarity but for the word trues the dictionary says it is NOT a word, but derived from the word true i.e.:
adjective
1.
being in accordance with the actual state or conditions; conforming to reality or fact; not false: a true story.
2.
real; genuine; authentic: true gold; true feelings.
3.
sincere; not deceitful: a true interest in someone's welfare.
4.
firm in allegiance; loyal; faithful; steadfast: a true friend.
5.
being or reflecting
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hey there Alcreator
Once again, I read your work and it is ragged. I went through and looked at the reviews, at best the five stars gives are for the $1.25 paid. You do spell out TRUES, but the liar part is muddy. Your first two lines both end in the same word, that is not a rhyme. I will not give stars where under the Fanstory guidelines they are not warranted. Stars are awarded for poetic clarity. In this I do not see clarity but for the word trues the dictionary says it is NOT a word, but derived from the word true i.e.:
adjective
1.
being in accordance with the actual state or conditions; conforming to reality or fact; not false: a true story.
2.
real; genuine; authentic: true gold; true feelings.
3.
sincere; not deceitful: a true interest in someone's welfare.
4.
firm in allegiance; loyal; faithful; steadfast: a true friend.
5.
being or reflecting
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from GracieAnn
Liars can't successfully hide for long. Truth has a way of unmasking the hiders. Suppressing truth is such a devilish deception. "What a joy hide" oh yes!
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Liars can't successfully hide for long. Truth has a way of unmasking the hiders. Suppressing truth is such a devilish deception. "What a joy hide" oh yes!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
