Oh Life!
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Comment from Begin Again
The truth shall set us free and give us the ability to seek what the Lord wishes for us.There is nothing you can't do if you just tell the truth. Whether the truth is painful or not, it is always the right way to go. Smiles, CArol
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The truth shall set us free and give us the ability to seek what the Lord wishes for us.There is nothing you can't do if you just tell the truth. Whether the truth is painful or not, it is always the right way to go. Smiles, CArol
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from GE Parson
Very good 5-7-5-7-7 poem. I must tell you I have never won any spelling conests, but I did not see any mis-spelled words. I probably am not the best one to critique one's writing either, but I did not detect any thing to criticize. Keep up the good writing.
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Very good 5-7-5-7-7 poem. I must tell you I have never won any spelling conests, but I did not see any mis-spelled words. I probably am not the best one to critique one's writing either, but I did not detect any thing to criticize. Keep up the good writing.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from palmart
Nice writing on trues and lies and position we decide to take in life. Those who choose lies decide to hide part of their lives , and your character is happy about that. Those who decide to be in the truth are at light.
Let me tell you a little story:
Once the truth and the lie found each other. The lie said -Nice day-. Truth verified, looking at the sky and agreed: -Yes, Nice day-. -But the lake is even more beautiful- continued the lie, touching the water with his feet, The truth went to the shore and it was true, so he answered: -Yes, it is true-. The lie said: -It is a beautiful day for a bath. The truth coincided and taking off their clothes they both went swimming in the lake. Suddenly, the lie came out of the water quickly and dressed in the clothes of truth. The truth, with integrity, did not dress in the clothes of lie and went hiding around the world.
Conclusion: It is for this reason, even today, that the World prefer to see the lie disguised as the truth and not the naked truth ...
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Nice writing on trues and lies and position we decide to take in life. Those who choose lies decide to hide part of their lives , and your character is happy about that. Those who decide to be in the truth are at light.
Let me tell you a little story:
Once the truth and the lie found each other. The lie said -Nice day-. Truth verified, looking at the sky and agreed: -Yes, Nice day-. -But the lake is even more beautiful- continued the lie, touching the water with his feet, The truth went to the shore and it was true, so he answered: -Yes, it is true-. The lie said: -It is a beautiful day for a bath. The truth coincided and taking off their clothes they both went swimming in the lake. Suddenly, the lie came out of the water quickly and dressed in the clothes of truth. The truth, with integrity, did not dress in the clothes of lie and went hiding around the world.
Conclusion: It is for this reason, even today, that the World prefer to see the lie disguised as the truth and not the naked truth ...
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from Terry wrote
It's an interesting acrostic.
Although I confess
My confusion
Lines three and four suggest
You are playing with more than words.
If that is the truth, then
Nod your head to
Give an okay for the stars...
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It's an interesting acrostic.
Although I confess
My confusion
Lines three and four suggest
You are playing with more than words.
If that is the truth, then
Nod your head to
Give an okay for the stars...
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
Comment from krys123
Cheers, AlCreator Litt Dear;
> evidently some of your writings in the past but this one has me confused and I think myself challenged, and yet, I have intentionally read and stayed and looked at your profile to understand this poem that the authors notes reveal that it's about Not particularly liking liars, who do it for pleasure.
>Why am confused as you begin the reader, I think, with the understanding of but something about your book, and in writing this generalization was hard for me to focus on the specific poem itself.
>In reading your author's notes, you talk more of your book and then go back to the poem, leaving me to think, what was being stressed in this post; your book, or the poems conceptual theme.
>I would suggest more emphasis on the posts poem itself, rather than an advertisement For a book. I think this confuses readers, or maybe just confuses me.
>Take care and have a good one, my friend, Especially because you may deserve it.
Alx
PS: the game at the end became more confusingin trying to find something that exists within something that is also obscure.
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Cheers, AlCreator Litt Dear;
> evidently some of your writings in the past but this one has me confused and I think myself challenged, and yet, I have intentionally read and stayed and looked at your profile to understand this poem that the authors notes reveal that it's about Not particularly liking liars, who do it for pleasure.
>Why am confused as you begin the reader, I think, with the understanding of but something about your book, and in writing this generalization was hard for me to focus on the specific poem itself.
>In reading your author's notes, you talk more of your book and then go back to the poem, leaving me to think, what was being stressed in this post; your book, or the poems conceptual theme.
>I would suggest more emphasis on the posts poem itself, rather than an advertisement For a book. I think this confuses readers, or maybe just confuses me.
>Take care and have a good one, my friend, Especially because you may deserve it.
Alx
PS: the game at the end became more confusingin trying to find something that exists within something that is also obscure.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
Comment from William Ross
Good job on the acrostic using trues, Sometimes I don't think any of us knows the real truth even about ourselves. Nicely done and great addition to your book. have a great day
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Good job on the acrostic using trues, Sometimes I don't think any of us knows the real truth even about ourselves. Nicely done and great addition to your book. have a great day
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
Comment from jusylee72
what an interesting poem. Extremely truthful, but harsh in the reality that we are often more afraid of the truth than of being vulnerable. I found it intriguing and sad with just a touch of humor. Well done.
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what an interesting poem. Extremely truthful, but harsh in the reality that we are often more afraid of the truth than of being vulnerable. I found it intriguing and sad with just a touch of humor. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
Comment from bard owl
I am afraid I just don't understand this poem. This work obviously has a point that I am missing. You speak of truth truly spoken and suppressed truth (the kind of truth you say you engage in). And you challenge reviewers to catch the hide. You lost me.
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I am afraid I just don't understand this poem. This work obviously has a point that I am missing. You speak of truth truly spoken and suppressed truth (the kind of truth you say you engage in). And you challenge reviewers to catch the hide. You lost me.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
Comment from nancyrabbrose
This is a very interesting poem, one that I don't quite understand. I will leave it up to the super sleuths to figure out the clue detail. I do like your phrase "joy hide". Sometimes we just need to hide something and it can be a joy, it is our right, I think.
Well done. The poem is very creative and unique.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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This is a very interesting poem, one that I don't quite understand. I will leave it up to the super sleuths to figure out the clue detail. I do like your phrase "joy hide". Sometimes we just need to hide something and it can be a joy, it is our right, I think.
Well done. The poem is very creative and unique.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this true review I appreciate.
Comment from Adam Ihnken
The flow is a tad wonky,
"They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,"
I would drop the 'right!' to make the meter.
"Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride."
Again to match meter I would suggest 'love of pride.' It isn't as clear, but I think it gets the point across.
"So I lie! What a joy hide!"
Aside from that, I see no issue and I do not understand what you had hidden, so my suggestions could ruin that as well.
Either way, well done.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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The flow is a tad wonky,
"They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,"
I would drop the 'right!' to make the meter.
"Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride."
Again to match meter I would suggest 'love of pride.' It isn't as clear, but I think it gets the point across.
"So I lie! What a joy hide!"
Aside from that, I see no issue and I do not understand what you had hidden, so my suggestions could ruin that as well.
Either way, well done.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this review with suggestions.
Hidden word is TRUES.
