Oh Life!
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Comment from Eternal Muse
This was an interesting statement, with a message. Thank you for your detailed author note.
Excellent imagery, visuals and presentation.
Thank you for sharing.
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This was an interesting statement, with a message. Thank you for your detailed author note.
Excellent imagery, visuals and presentation.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
Comment from elchupakabra
This poem rings TRUES - I like the idea of a poem/puzzle book, that's definitely something you can run with. Great work on this piece, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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This poem rings TRUES - I like the idea of a poem/puzzle book, that's definitely something you can run with. Great work on this piece, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 31-May-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
This sadly sounds like a lot of politictians. It is not right ot suppress truth or change truth to your way of thinking. Then it is not truth.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
I like the artwork. He should keep his mouth covered unless he wants to tell the real truth and stop suppressing the truth.
Joan
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This sadly sounds like a lot of politictians. It is not right ot suppress truth or change truth to your way of thinking. Then it is not truth.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
I like the artwork. He should keep his mouth covered unless he wants to tell the real truth and stop suppressing the truth.
Joan
Comment Written 31-May-2021
Comment from Teri7
This is another very well written poem you have penned. We should not be liars. That is so wrong. You used very good descriptive words and interesting imagery. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
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This is another very well written poem you have penned. We should not be liars. That is so wrong. You used very good descriptive words and interesting imagery. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 31-May-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
In today's world it is fashionable to speak half-truth, distort the truth and lie outright and get away with it. If someone tells the truth, it is ridiculed and then violently opposed. But they don't know that Karma will catch up with them and they will pay for their bad deeds. Thank you for sharing a thought-proking poem.
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In today's world it is fashionable to speak half-truth, distort the truth and lie outright and get away with it. If someone tells the truth, it is ridiculed and then violently opposed. But they don't know that Karma will catch up with them and they will pay for their bad deeds. Thank you for sharing a thought-proking poem.
Comment Written 31-May-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I confess that I don't grasp the gist of this one--I am intrigued by the proferred riddle, but am stumped! It's probably obvious to others--I'm tempted to cheat!
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I confess that I don't grasp the gist of this one--I am intrigued by the proferred riddle, but am stumped! It's probably obvious to others--I'm tempted to cheat!
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, yes lying is never a good thing, even when done for a supposedly good purpose. So, this poem is a bit confusing in the way it is formed. I can see that you intended it to have a rhythm scheme and be an acrostic. The notes definitely help. Without that I think may would be lost.
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Hmm, yes lying is never a good thing, even when done for a supposedly good purpose. So, this poem is a bit confusing in the way it is formed. I can see that you intended it to have a rhythm scheme and be an acrostic. The notes definitely help. Without that I think may would be lost.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This poem is an interesting commentary on dishonesty. I would not characterize the feeling of not being caught in a lie as "joy," which is more of a pure feeling; getting away with something that's wrong is more of a thrill, or sometimes a sense of relief, often mixed with anxiety, if you're not sure whether you really got away with it.
Before I started my life as a Christian, I would lie sometimes if I felt I needed to, but it is no longer my practice now. That's why I can speak from experience.
One suggested revision:
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
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Escape, avoid, love for self-pride. ["void" as a verb, refers more to emptying something]
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I thought it was very funny that you dedicated the poem to liars. I think most people have lied at some point in their lives. I know a few people who lie either on a frequent basis, or often enough for others to be aware of it. It can be a bad habit, pathological and/or a sign of a deep character flaw. Others have trouble distinguishing between fantasy and reality, which is a different problem. I'm very glad you said in your Notes that telling lies or lying is not recommended! Very good advice.
Your hidden word: is it "TRUE"? I would say "trues" because it has five letters, and uses all the capital letters in your poem (except the "G" in "God"), but "trues" isn't a word, as far as I know.
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This poem is an interesting commentary on dishonesty. I would not characterize the feeling of not being caught in a lie as "joy," which is more of a pure feeling; getting away with something that's wrong is more of a thrill, or sometimes a sense of relief, often mixed with anxiety, if you're not sure whether you really got away with it.
Before I started my life as a Christian, I would lie sometimes if I felt I needed to, but it is no longer my practice now. That's why I can speak from experience.
One suggested revision:
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
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Escape, avoid, love for self-pride. ["void" as a verb, refers more to emptying something]
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I thought it was very funny that you dedicated the poem to liars. I think most people have lied at some point in their lives. I know a few people who lie either on a frequent basis, or often enough for others to be aware of it. It can be a bad habit, pathological and/or a sign of a deep character flaw. Others have trouble distinguishing between fantasy and reality, which is a different problem. I'm very glad you said in your Notes that telling lies or lying is not recommended! Very good advice.
Your hidden word: is it "TRUE"? I would say "trues" because it has five letters, and uses all the capital letters in your poem (except the "G" in "God"), but "trues" isn't a word, as far as I know.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Amazing way of going around the tail and catching the truth: 'They and you speak truths.
Right, God knows, I suppress truths.
Under law I ride.
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie, feel joy to hide!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Amazing way of going around the tail and catching the truth: 'They and you speak truths.
Right, God knows, I suppress truths.
Under law I ride.
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie, feel joy to hide!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Truths!
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I hate when I write a book and the background shows on my poem entries. There's no way to get rid of it. I tried. I even asked Tom.
Interesting poem.
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Truths!
by Alcreator Litt Dear
I hate when I write a book and the background shows on my poem entries. There's no way to get rid of it. I tried. I even asked Tom.
Interesting poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
