Oh Life!
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Comment from God's Writer
To look at it in its entirety it is written so each word hinges on sand powers the next. What a literary structure you have created . Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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To look at it in its entirety it is written so each word hinges on sand powers the next. What a literary structure you have created . Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from justatuna
You are very hard to review. You have a very powerful style, but I'm lost as to your method. I don't want to judge as you may be creating something new. I like the passion. Well done.
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You are very hard to review. You have a very powerful style, but I'm lost as to your method. I don't want to judge as you may be creating something new. I like the passion. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from amahra
Ok you lost me on this one. some of your words make sense and then some don't. I know you don't have to understand a poem to appreciate it, but it does have to make sense.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Ok you lost me on this one. some of your words make sense and then some don't. I know you don't have to understand a poem to appreciate it, but it does have to make sense.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from mizzkris20
I like your poem. It causes one to think.....telling lies hurt no one but the individual in return. If you tell one lie you have to tell a hundred more to cover it up
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I like your poem. It causes one to think.....telling lies hurt no one but the individual in return. If you tell one lie you have to tell a hundred more to cover it up
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from robina1978
This is another good addition to your book, Like you wrote it is never good to lie. Why should you, it is better and easier to stick to the truth.
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This is another good addition to your book, Like you wrote it is never good to lie. Why should you, it is better and easier to stick to the truth.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from amada
Great short work, a mere 5-7-5-7-7 syllables that say so much about "avoiding" truths. Ironic, sassy and bold at the same time. Sad new rule.
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Great short work, a mere 5-7-5-7-7 syllables that say so much about "avoiding" truths. Ironic, sassy and bold at the same time. Sad new rule.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from Janet Foor
They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,
Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie! What a joy hide!
Interesting read. I've always told my children that you don't have to have a great memory if you "just tell the truth" all the time.
Nicely done
Janet
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They and you speak truths.
Right! God knows! I suppress truths,
Under new rule ride,
Escape, void, love for self-pride.
So I lie! What a joy hide!
Interesting read. I've always told my children that you don't have to have a great memory if you "just tell the truth" all the time.
Nicely done
Janet
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from Black_Oxygen
With very few words, this poetry speaks and undeniable
truth; we lie. We lie to others and/or ourselves.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the message. Thank You for your creation.
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With very few words, this poetry speaks and undeniable
truth; we lie. We lie to others and/or ourselves.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from Dawn Munro
No one is saying your protagonist lied, merely that he suppresses truth, and the others speak truths, so he suppresses them through his own vanity, then lies to cover it up. That it what I see as the hiding in the style. Very , very clever poem, and quite profound.
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No one is saying your protagonist lied, merely that he suppresses truth, and the others speak truths, so he suppresses them through his own vanity, then lies to cover it up. That it what I see as the hiding in the style. Very , very clever poem, and quite profound.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
Comment from Adri7enne
Well I'd be lying if I pretended to have any idea what the hell you were talking about! All I can say is that it's easiest to just tell it like it is. Lies are self-made prisons.
Best to stop all that lying, A. It's hard on the soul. LOL!
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Well I'd be lying if I pretended to have any idea what the hell you were talking about! All I can say is that it's easiest to just tell it like it is. Lies are self-made prisons.
Best to stop all that lying, A. It's hard on the soul. LOL!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
