Oh Life!
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Escape, void, love for self-pride. << Liars are verrry self-centered people, also insecure, afraid the truth will make them seem less important. Sickos is what they are! You got your message across with this one, loud and clear.
So I lie! What a joy hide! << Don't you mean "joy ride"?
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Escape, void, love for self-pride. << Liars are verrry self-centered people, also insecure, afraid the truth will make them seem less important. Sickos is what they are! You got your message across with this one, loud and clear.
So I lie! What a joy hide! << Don't you mean "joy ride"?
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from Titanx9
Liars see the world and things around them through different lenses. They are thrilled when they do wrong and don't get caught. Most liars see things externally, because if they dared to go inwardly, they'd probably not like what they see.
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Liars see the world and things around them through different lenses. They are thrilled when they do wrong and don't get caught. Most liars see things externally, because if they dared to go inwardly, they'd probably not like what they see.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from MM lives on :)
lying is a fact of life and the devil made them do it, hell is of this earth and man is born of satan and not of god..lies are spies withing our vertical vertex. well done
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lying is a fact of life and the devil made them do it, hell is of this earth and man is born of satan and not of god..lies are spies withing our vertical vertex. well done
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
The old saying "Oh, what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive" comes to mind. To realize that telling untruths is much more difficult than telling the truth first requires self-examination. The hardest part of all.
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The old saying "Oh, what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to deceive" comes to mind. To realize that telling untruths is much more difficult than telling the truth first requires self-examination. The hardest part of all.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from arsinBW
I liked this one a lot. Very relateable for me in the sense that it reflects some of myself at one time. Always love it when poems do that
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I liked this one a lot. Very relateable for me in the sense that it reflects some of myself at one time. Always love it when poems do that
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin
This speaks nothing but truth.. HA. Great vocabulary and meaning behind it. This is a new style of poem to me because I am new at writing.. But.. you constructed it perfectly.
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This speaks nothing but truth.. HA. Great vocabulary and meaning behind it. This is a new style of poem to me because I am new at writing.. But.. you constructed it perfectly.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Lying is never an advisable route, as you will always be caught out, eventually. 'Love of self-pride' has me a tad flummoxed, do you mean love of self pride as in selfish or ate self and pride to be read as separate entities. Just curious.
Best wishes,
Laurie
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Lying is never an advisable route, as you will always be caught out, eventually. 'Love of self-pride' has me a tad flummoxed, do you mean love of self pride as in selfish or ate self and pride to be read as separate entities. Just curious.
Best wishes,
Laurie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from mshirachot
hmmm...not sure what the "hide" is that I am supposed to be seeing. Unless this is a riddle about satan who is the authority figure on pride.
The very last sentence challenged me - "What a joy hide" I guess because I do not find much joy in lying or being lied to. Still, you have done a fine job with the writing style you have chosen. The 5-7-5-7-7 is perfect on the count.
Blessings!
Marsha
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hmmm...not sure what the "hide" is that I am supposed to be seeing. Unless this is a riddle about satan who is the authority figure on pride.
The very last sentence challenged me - "What a joy hide" I guess because I do not find much joy in lying or being lied to. Still, you have done a fine job with the writing style you have chosen. The 5-7-5-7-7 is perfect on the count.
Blessings!
Marsha
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
Comment from mumsyone
What a joy hide? Under new rule ride? Sorry, your poem doesn't make much sense, except for the line "God knows," for He certainly does! Even then, the exclamation marks are too much for such a short poem.
By the way, your profile should read "An unplublishable writer" not "a unpublishable writer
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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What a joy hide? Under new rule ride? Sorry, your poem doesn't make much sense, except for the line "God knows," for He certainly does! Even then, the exclamation marks are too much for such a short poem.
By the way, your profile should read "An unplublishable writer" not "a unpublishable writer
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from adewpearl
They and you speak the truth. I, on the other hand, suppress truth. I'm not sure who they and you are, or who I is.
I also don't understand what under new rule ride means.
I get the overall gist that lying is bad, but most of the phrasing obscures the meaning rather than conveying the meaning. Your syllable count is on the money, and I like the alliteration of rule ride.
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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They and you speak the truth. I, on the other hand, suppress truth. I'm not sure who they and you are, or who I is.
I also don't understand what under new rule ride means.
I get the overall gist that lying is bad, but most of the phrasing obscures the meaning rather than conveying the meaning. Your syllable count is on the money, and I like the alliteration of rule ride.
Brooke
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
