Hazy Mists
Free Verse31 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What an interesting, relatable poem. Your great description sets the scene nicely and your word choice lets the reader feel the love, the loneliness your character has now he's away. How the memory lingers on. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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What an interesting, relatable poem. Your great description sets the scene nicely and your word choice lets the reader feel the love, the loneliness your character has now he's away. How the memory lingers on. Nicely done.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Misty. Thank you for your very astute review... much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed this pensive-romantic free verse, Melissa. I like that the memories of that loved one is translated to a song that makes the narrator dance even when alone.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Enjoyed this pensive-romantic free verse, Melissa. I like that the memories of that loved one is translated to a song that makes the narrator dance even when alone.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Helen. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your concise, powerful free verse poem conveys a touching message about how everyday scenes--a walk, pebbles . . . --can conjure up memories of someone we miss.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Your concise, powerful free verse poem conveys a touching message about how everyday scenes--a walk, pebbles . . . --can conjure up memories of someone we miss.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Janice. Thanks for your comments on this one. :)
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa
I want to share this song with you. It's by Shari Ulrich, a wonderful singer/songwriter who lives in British Columbia. Canadian talent! I discovered her a couple of years ago, and purchased two of her CDs. I love her talent, and especially this song called "Everlasting Great Regret". I hope you enjoy it. It reminded me of a lost love from the days of my youth.
https://youtu.be/gNfD-ppnI0E
Her words compliment your poem better than any review I could offer. It came to mind as soon as I read "Hazy Mists".
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Melissa
I want to share this song with you. It's by Shari Ulrich, a wonderful singer/songwriter who lives in British Columbia. Canadian talent! I discovered her a couple of years ago, and purchased two of her CDs. I love her talent, and especially this song called "Everlasting Great Regret". I hope you enjoy it. It reminded me of a lost love from the days of my youth.
https://youtu.be/gNfD-ppnI0E
Her words compliment your poem better than any review I could offer. It came to mind as soon as I read "Hazy Mists".
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello KB... thank you so very much. I will definitely listen to Shari Ulrich... I appreciate your thoughts on this verse.
Melissa
Comment from damommy
This is lovely. I especially like dancing with the pebbles, not knowing the tune the loved one knows. I like the theme of this very much. Wonderful picture.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This is lovely. I especially like dancing with the pebbles, not knowing the tune the loved one knows. I like the theme of this very much. Wonderful picture.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Yvonne. I am so glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
It's a cold, lonely scene. Dancing among the pebbles won't bring much comfort. The woman has been disappointed in romance, but she consoles herself with the thought that there's still a little bit of him left in her memory that she dances with. Dear Abby says there's no future in dancing with a memory, so forget him and move on. (I can't help giving advice occasionally. This gal needs it.) This is beautifully and gracefully worded. judi
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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It's a cold, lonely scene. Dancing among the pebbles won't bring much comfort. The woman has been disappointed in romance, but she consoles herself with the thought that there's still a little bit of him left in her memory that she dances with. Dear Abby says there's no future in dancing with a memory, so forget him and move on. (I can't help giving advice occasionally. This gal needs it.) This is beautifully and gracefully worded. judi
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Judi. I appreciate your comments and review on this verse. :)
Melissa
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You're very welcome. Happy Valentine's Day. judi
Comment from Therese Caron
This is so touching. I don't know if this is truth or fiction, but it is beautifully written. I love the line about dancing with the pebbles that crowd up to the edge. It is superbly written. The image is lovely. Thanks for sharing this with us!
Terry
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This is so touching. I don't know if this is truth or fiction, but it is beautifully written. I love the line about dancing with the pebbles that crowd up to the edge. It is superbly written. The image is lovely. Thanks for sharing this with us!
Terry
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Terry. Thanks for your thoughts on this fictitious write... much appreciated my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
Your loss you describe in your free verse seems so real. I was touched by your dancing with the memories of a lost love. The artwork you selected helped to establish the mood for this poem. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Your loss you describe in your free verse seems so real. I was touched by your dancing with the memories of a lost love. The artwork you selected helped to establish the mood for this poem. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Joan... I really appreciate your thoughts on this fictitious verse... thank you.
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a wonderful free verse and you have presented it well. May your evening be blessed as well as all of your tomorrows.
Patricia
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This is a wonderful free verse and you have presented it well. May your evening be blessed as well as all of your tomorrows.
Patricia
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi Patricia... thanks so much for your thoughts on this verse.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
Yes, those memories of a loved can still comfort us when we are alone, and I relate to those pebbles as a trigger for those memories although we all have different triggers, an excellent and beautiful read****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Yes, those memories of a loved can still comfort us when we are alone, and I relate to those pebbles as a trigger for those memories although we all have different triggers, an excellent and beautiful read****kahpot
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hi there, Kah... thanks so much for your lovely review.
Melissa
