V-Day Ditty
Double entendre divided by half-wit93 total reviews
Comment from Charles Southerland
This is a clever take on the heart muscle. It is funny and cute and hand fan waving. I think it would be memorable if you rewrote the final couplet to reflect the rhyme pairs you maintained throughout. I'd lose the last ellipsis. It's not necessary. Nice poem.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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This is a clever take on the heart muscle. It is funny and cute and hand fan waving. I think it would be memorable if you rewrote the final couplet to reflect the rhyme pairs you maintained throughout. I'd lose the last ellipsis. It's not necessary. Nice poem.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2020
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Thank you Charles! Glad you enjoyed the hard-to-heart. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Funny and a delight to read! Thank you for sharing this delightful Valentine tribute. Don't we all want a man with a big heart? The artwork is a beautiful accompaniment.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Funny and a delight to read! Thank you for sharing this delightful Valentine tribute. Don't we all want a man with a big heart? The artwork is a beautiful accompaniment.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Ah, yes--A man with a big hard indeed. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from playinaround
hahahahahaha... I have to give six stars to anyone who can make me chuckle in the morning. Loved it. This is a very sensitive subject and you handled it well. nice writing! Jude
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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hahahahahaha... I have to give six stars to anyone who can make me chuckle in the morning. Loved it. This is a very sensitive subject and you handled it well. nice writing! Jude
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Jude! I did a lot of "pumping" to keep it UP (on the Welcome Page, that is) so that everyone can get a chuckle. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Diana L Crawford
haha! this is really creatively writing and misleading at first! Love it! Every woman wants a man with a very big one! Heart that is! LOL!! xoxoxo
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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haha! this is really creatively writing and misleading at first! Love it! Every woman wants a man with a very big one! Heart that is! LOL!! xoxoxo
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you Diana! Every woman wants a big heart/hard. Cheers. LIZ
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lol!!!! xoxoxo
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Elizabeth, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. I enjoyed your poem, it was suggestively humorous with a pg ending. Good job and have a good day.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Hello Elizabeth, a wonderful Wednesday to you. I hope this finds you well, in good health and spirit. I enjoyed your poem, it was suggestively humorous with a pg ending. Good job and have a good day.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you! I used up 20 pumps so as to get this out front and center for the enjoyment of many. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Such a delightful, fun read with an amusing surprise ending LOL. This is a great poem leading one on and a great entry for the Valentine's Day contest! Thanks for the uplift and giggles.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Such a delightful, fun read with an amusing surprise ending LOL. This is a great poem leading one on and a great entry for the Valentine's Day contest! Thanks for the uplift and giggles.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you Marilyn! I used up 20 pumps so as to get this out front and center for the enjoyment of many. Cheers. LIZ (I did not enter the contest--forgot there was one.)
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:) :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, V-Day Ditty, is an hilarious and short verse that brings a man's valuable organ to the forefront for some good pumping.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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This poem, V-Day Ditty, is an hilarious and short verse that brings a man's valuable organ to the forefront for some good pumping.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Bill! Speaking of pumping--I put 20 pumps on this so as to get this out front and center for the enjoyment of many. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Valentine's Day poem. The only thing that really matters to n Valentine's Day is how big and strong the heart is. Cupid only shoot arrows to the heart.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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A very well-written Valentine's Day poem. The only thing that really matters to n Valentine's Day is how big and strong the heart is. Cupid only shoot arrows to the heart.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2020
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Thank you Sandra! Every woman wants a big heart/hard. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
LOL. They say size matters. From personal experience, I totally agree. Easy to guess that missing word. Watch the male ballet dancers who must be proud to flaunt their package in a socially acceptable way.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
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LOL. They say size matters. From personal experience, I totally agree. Easy to guess that missing word. Watch the male ballet dancers who must be proud to flaunt their package in a socially acceptable way.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2020
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Thanks, Shari. This ditty seemed to just pop out of my perverted mind. As just did this profundity: When it's hard it comes easy. That said, I'll try to keep it up. Cheers. LIZ (Hope you're feeling better.)
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ...
Its a piece of class which is witty intuitive simple and also very effective ... The heart unlike the suggested is more to sacrifice and hope regenerating it rather than the phallic symbol which is more attuned to pride and self gratification but which ever one we take a ride on make sure you dont brake it.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Excellent ...
Its a piece of class which is witty intuitive simple and also very effective ... The heart unlike the suggested is more to sacrifice and hope regenerating it rather than the phallic symbol which is more attuned to pride and self gratification but which ever one we take a ride on make sure you dont brake it.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Bic. I'm always pleased to amuse. You returned the favor with that clever closing advice that we be careful not to brake/break whichever heart/hard we choose to ride. You sure are a sly one. Cheers. LIZ
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anytime ... I try to see the value in what people write and as for my reply its normally whatever sticks in my head depending what ive just read so dont be to alarmed and spag aint my strong point as you'll discover ... anytime ...
