In My Nature
(2-2-5-7-5) What lies within.21 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Yes LisaMay danger lurks in every place, person or thing. No one knows what lies ahead in life we just plunge in and see what happens. Few words with a lot of meaning. This is a very good entry for the 5 Line Poem.
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Yes LisaMay danger lurks in every place, person or thing. No one knows what lies ahead in life we just plunge in and see what happens. Few words with a lot of meaning. This is a very good entry for the 5 Line Poem.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
Comment from Father Flaps
Buyer beware!
Hi Lisa,
As I read your poem, and the author's note, I think of a beautiful ocean as the sun goes down. Waves sloshing to shore. I can't see the Great White shark just below the surface, intently aware of every little sound. Danger! "a sinister wildness".
And as you suggest, "the same can be said of personal relationships." It can work both ways, husband or wife, for example. After the honeymoon, the one discovers what the other one is really like. She isn't a good housekeeper or cook. He is a lazy lug whose only interest is sports. I think that's why a lot of people prefer to just live together today instead of marrying... "a sinister sense awaits" ... nice alliteration there, by the way.
"What lies within" could also be like "What Lies Beneath", that 2000 thriller (movie) with Harrison Ford and Michelle Pfeiffer.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Buyer beware!
Hi Lisa,
As I read your poem, and the author's note, I think of a beautiful ocean as the sun goes down. Waves sloshing to shore. I can't see the Great White shark just below the surface, intently aware of every little sound. Danger! "a sinister wildness".
And as you suggest, "the same can be said of personal relationships." It can work both ways, husband or wife, for example. After the honeymoon, the one discovers what the other one is really like. She isn't a good housekeeper or cook. He is a lazy lug whose only interest is sports. I think that's why a lot of people prefer to just live together today instead of marrying... "a sinister sense awaits" ... nice alliteration there, by the way.
"What lies within" could also be like "What Lies Beneath", that 2000 thriller (movie) with Harrison Ford and Michelle Pfeiffer.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This five-line poem, In My Nature, has the proper formatting and suggests that nature comes with soft lips that cover sharp teeth. Roses have thorns and still waters run deep.
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This five-line poem, In My Nature, has the proper formatting and suggests that nature comes with soft lips that cover sharp teeth. Roses have thorns and still waters run deep.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
Comment from patcelaw
A very well written five line poem for the contest, I wish you the best in the contest. May God bless you today and always.
Patricia
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A very well written five line poem for the contest, I wish you the best in the contest. May God bless you today and always.
Patricia
Comment Written 11-Feb-2020
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ...
It is a piece of class ... it talks of the duality of the human soul whereby something sinister lurks perhaps more prevalent in some than others ... it is in its dark nature quite untamed and when released can become a demon of gigantic proportions.
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Excellent ...
It is a piece of class ... it talks of the duality of the human soul whereby something sinister lurks perhaps more prevalent in some than others ... it is in its dark nature quite untamed and when released can become a demon of gigantic proportions.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written five-line poem about the beauty outside is not all there is about anything. There are always underlying dark secrets that lurking under the surface.
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A very well-written five-line poem about the beauty outside is not all there is about anything. There are always underlying dark secrets that lurking under the surface.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
It's kind of like not judging a book by its cover. The outside picture might not match the story inside. LOL That wonderfully perfect man might be Jack the Ripper once he lets his guard down acts like the true mistake he really is.
Great poem!!
Luv!
Patty
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It's kind of like not judging a book by its cover. The outside picture might not match the story inside. LOL That wonderfully perfect man might be Jack the Ripper once he lets his guard down acts like the true mistake he really is.
Great poem!!
Luv!
Patty
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
Comment from Joan E.
Your dramatic artwork selection certainly captured my attention, and your 5-Line Poem gave new meaning to a healthy respect for danger both in nature and in relationships. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
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Your dramatic artwork selection certainly captured my attention, and your 5-Line Poem gave new meaning to a healthy respect for danger both in nature and in relationships. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Lisa!
I so enjoy the sentiments in your well-crafted poetic offering. I smiled at its conclusion because people always view me as utterly optimistic, and just this past week, while with friends, during a conversation regarding American politics, a friend remarked, "I never knew you had such a dark side, Diane!" Hah! I've known it for years!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
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Hello Lisa!
I so enjoy the sentiments in your well-crafted poetic offering. I smiled at its conclusion because people always view me as utterly optimistic, and just this past week, while with friends, during a conversation regarding American politics, a friend remarked, "I never knew you had such a dark side, Diane!" Hah! I've known it for years!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
Hi LisaMay
I like your take on human nature. Who knows their true nature? People can surprise you. We can surprise ourselves. Good contrast between tame and wildness.
What do you think of "persists" instead of "awaits"? Alters the meaning I know. Awaits is stronger, waiting to pounce. Persists is more insidious.
Great entry. I like it.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
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Hi LisaMay
I like your take on human nature. Who knows their true nature? People can surprise you. We can surprise ourselves. Good contrast between tame and wildness.
What do you think of "persists" instead of "awaits"? Alters the meaning I know. Awaits is stronger, waiting to pounce. Persists is more insidious.
Great entry. I like it.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
