Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Raindrops Crescendo"Musings of an old man -2020
28 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
Your command of words is outstanding. Obviously, my favorite part is raindrops crescendo. What a great image. As we age, we so need that brighter, stronger sunlight. I used to wonder about Florida's appeal to the elderly. I don't wonder anymore. We need to get away from lingering winters and rains to warm our bones and lift our spirits.
I enjoyed your poem very much.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Your command of words is outstanding. Obviously, my favorite part is raindrops crescendo. What a great image. As we age, we so need that brighter, stronger sunlight. I used to wonder about Florida's appeal to the elderly. I don't wonder anymore. We need to get away from lingering winters and rains to warm our bones and lift our spirits.
I enjoyed your poem very much.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Debbie, I couldn't agree more. I think the suns rays are liquid elixir for tired joints.
Comment from Bicpen
Excellent ...
It has a good rhyme use with n attractive and friendly appeal which entices the imagination not stiffed or contorted or even cruel with a good use of the refrain repetition and a good all round rich imagery good word choices.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Excellent ...
It has a good rhyme use with n attractive and friendly appeal which entices the imagination not stiffed or contorted or even cruel with a good use of the refrain repetition and a good all round rich imagery good word choices.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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My thanks for your validation on this work.
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anytime ...
Comment from Therese Caron
This is a lovely read. It is a very good description of a dreary rainy day and the feeling people get when they sit looking outside. Poor little wet bird! Your rhyming is great and your words flow smoothly. The image is perfect. Wonderful poem!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is a lovely read. It is a very good description of a dreary rainy day and the feeling people get when they sit looking outside. Poor little wet bird! Your rhyming is great and your words flow smoothly. The image is perfect. Wonderful poem!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Therese, thank you for the review and validation.
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw that poor little bird looks like he's having a rough day.
I think you've done a good job in linking your own feelings with those of the wet wren and drawing in the love of rain, birds and life in general.
A fine Kyrielle and a most enjoyable read. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Aw that poor little bird looks like he's having a rough day.
I think you've done a good job in linking your own feelings with those of the wet wren and drawing in the love of rain, birds and life in general.
A fine Kyrielle and a most enjoyable read. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Gloria, oh yes the bird does get quite wet, but alas, he dines well at the feeder. :)
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, another amazing write by this gifted wordsmith - the rhyming rhythm flawless and nature and human references articulated clearly and smoothly unforced - striking in presentation...
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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In my opinion, another amazing write by this gifted wordsmith - the rhyming rhythm flawless and nature and human references articulated clearly and smoothly unforced - striking in presentation...
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Eve, I am most grateful for you validation on my work. Thank you, always and hugs back to you!
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You are very welcome - a splendid write and stirring read...Eve
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Jim. This is a very nice Kyrielle poem. I enjoyed reading it. Rhyming and theme are well done and repeating fourth line fits well into each stanza. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hi Jim. This is a very nice Kyrielle poem. I enjoyed reading it. Rhyming and theme are well done and repeating fourth line fits well into each stanza. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Marilyn, thank you! I hope your Sunday is filled with great Peace and Joy...
Comment from Ogden
I can't tell if the Potlatch challenge required using the Kyrielle form, but it was a pleasure to read yours. Your rhyming is excellent, and not forced.
Don
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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I can't tell if the Potlatch challenge required using the Kyrielle form, but it was a pleasure to read yours. Your rhyming is excellent, and not forced.
Don
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Don, Wow, yes it was a the club challenge this week. I particularly enjoy the Kyrielle poetic style. thanks for the validation!
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You're very welcome. You earned it!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It was warm enough this morning to go for a nice long walk with no coat, just a sweatshirt. It was gorgeous. I went back out a couple hours later and the wind had picked up and I wished I had my coat. It was my reminder that even though it's slowly getting warmer we're not quite there yet. I'll say some prayers we both get a little more sunshine.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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It was warm enough this morning to go for a nice long walk with no coat, just a sweatshirt. It was gorgeous. I went back out a couple hours later and the wind had picked up and I wished I had my coat. It was my reminder that even though it's slowly getting warmer we're not quite there yet. I'll say some prayers we both get a little more sunshine.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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We are enjoying a few snow flurries today, but our winter has been anything but normal is was 68 degrees last Sunday. Crazy!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle in perfect format and an interesting choice of subject the little wren who tries its best to be brave early morning to continue his task despite the raindrops around him.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A very well-written Kyrielle in perfect format and an interesting choice of subject the little wren who tries its best to be brave early morning to continue his task despite the raindrops around him.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Sandra, thank you! Enjoy your weekend to the fullest.
Comment from damommy
What a delightful Kyrielle. We've had rain like that for several days now, and I understand how you feel. I like the part of the little wren. You repeating line fit in nicely.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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What a delightful Kyrielle. We've had rain like that for several days now, and I understand how you feel. I like the part of the little wren. You repeating line fit in nicely.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your review and comments on my Kyrielle, this is my second one and I find I like the poetic style.
