Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

I like this chapter that was written well with a clear expression of the experiences and evokes a lot of genuine emotion between the main characters. Thanks for sharing. I think you meant to say "being unloaded" instead of "been."

I like that line about being able to love someone even though you understand that in some ways they are broken.
Bill

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020

Thank you, Bill, for your kind and encouraging words.

Is this the line?

text = Half-way through his sickness, he also gave up his binge drinking. Liquor had been used extensively as solace following his sick leave from the police force. But now he was actually apologizing to me for the bad effects his drinking had on his family.

Joy in improving,
Aaron

Comment from Aaqib Naeem

Excellent

I really loved reading your such a beautiful story. You've conveyed your message in a wonderful way. You're possessed with amazing skills of writing. Lots of luck. God bless you!

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020

Thank you, Aaqib, for your kind and encouraging words.

Namaste,
Aaron

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

This lady as a child had a lot going on in her life. And not all was good, yet she was able to finally understand and make it good. This was a very deep story, and I'll have to catch up with the other parts. This part was really touching. Well done. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020

I agree entirely. Her vulnerability prepared me for my vulnerability (Ch3).

Joy in writing,
Aaron

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is an intriguing story that isn't something that is easy to get into without going back to read the first part, which I intend to do. It sounds as if this is only the second meeting the teller of the story has had with some referred to as "my angel" which leaves me wondering how she came to be referred to in such romantic terms so quickly. It sounds as though she is talking to a psychiatrist or someone who is there to help her sort out her feeling. Maybe you could give more details of what has taken place for those just joining your story and for those readers who may not have time to go back to the beginning. I want to read more.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020

Dear Beth,

Thanks for diving into Ch2. You have persuaded me that an introduction is a necessity.

Any comments on my cover design?

Or on the mind-bending last line here?

text = For the last two days, I have wanted to tell you how much our [second] meeting meant to me. I also have been struggling to understand its depth of meaning for it was the most powerful and the most satisfying moment of my life thus far.

Peace and joy in writing,
Aaron

reply by BethShelby on 09-Feb-2020

I did go back and read the other two entry and now I no more of what is going on. Maybe just put enough in you author notes to make things clear to new readers.

reply by BethShelby on 09-Feb-2020

I think the cover picture is perfect. I would probably prefer a darker band above and below and maybe the title in white or lighter but that's just me. I like the last sentence. It makes the reader want more.

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020

A darker band above and below the photo is a good suggestion. I did make a cover like this for my dad. Thanks, again, Beth for your helpful ideas. ~~Aaron

reply by BethShelby on 09-Feb-2020

You are welcome. I look forward to reading more.