Carolina Pastorals
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Awakening"A celebration of North Carolina
24 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
I had missed this earlier, unfortunately. I'm not sure how except that I have just recently published my first book. It just came in the mail yesterday and I finally had that feeling of completion and satisfaction. Publishing a book is so distracting, yet so satisfying. It's especially difficult being blind and not being able to see very well as I rely on so many to help me. My husband has taken the job as publisher and have also designed the book cover which came out wonderful. I'm very pleased with it. That being said, I am behind with you and so many others. I apologize and hope you except this for you today with my kindest compliments. Your work is so outstanding in every way, I wish I had a six for this! I hope to see you more in the weeks ahead. Sending my best today as always, Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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I had missed this earlier, unfortunately. I'm not sure how except that I have just recently published my first book. It just came in the mail yesterday and I finally had that feeling of completion and satisfaction. Publishing a book is so distracting, yet so satisfying. It's especially difficult being blind and not being able to see very well as I rely on so many to help me. My husband has taken the job as publisher and have also designed the book cover which came out wonderful. I'm very pleased with it. That being said, I am behind with you and so many others. I apologize and hope you except this for you today with my kindest compliments. Your work is so outstanding in every way, I wish I had a six for this! I hope to see you more in the weeks ahead. Sending my best today as always, Sally xoxo
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your continued support of my work. Good luck with the book. What's it about? estory
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You are welcome. My book is "What The Blind Girl Saw." It has been featured here in FanStory for the last year. I just posted the finale in January and the epilogue in February and moved to print after that. My new novella, "Double Blind", is on here and a continuation of the blind girl series. I just started it and into chapter two. :) XO
Comment from TallySally
estory - There is nothing more still than undisturbed snow - you painted an image with it's own soundtrack in those first three lines. I was instantly there and listening.
I don't much about snow, but I did see a show (National Geographic I think with time lapse on crocus breaking through the snow. Fascinating. The beckoning is a perfect 'bring you in' choice.
What a great choice! A good book or a garden - now their is a dilemma!
No doubt the bulbs would win for me as well.
I like this very much!
Relda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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estory - There is nothing more still than undisturbed snow - you painted an image with it's own soundtrack in those first three lines. I was instantly there and listening.
I don't much about snow, but I did see a show (National Geographic I think with time lapse on crocus breaking through the snow. Fascinating. The beckoning is a perfect 'bring you in' choice.
What a great choice! A good book or a garden - now their is a dilemma!
No doubt the bulbs would win for me as well.
I like this very much!
Relda
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2020
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Thanks again for the sixer and I appreciate all the encouraging words and support. It's always satisfying to find that the crafting of the language seems to have worked and you apparently found yourself there at the window torn between that book and the garden. I have found myself there many times I guess...estory
Comment from Dancemom
This is a well written free verse poem perfect for the upcoming spring. Nature's beautiful wonders will be here before we know it. I enjoyed your poem very much. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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This is a well written free verse poem perfect for the upcoming spring. Nature's beautiful wonders will be here before we know it. I enjoyed your poem very much. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your comments supporting the poem. Glad it got you thinking of spring estory
Comment from Bicpen
mmm ... its free-verse alright but it needs more emphasis and use of the imagery to pluck those bulbs out the garden and bring them all indoors. It is good in its understanding but needs further development with the lines to deliberate and conjure the imagination as its narrative tells the story it is rather flat and two dimensional it needs to ripen but not go off ... it has a good basis and a secure idea but the concept of its freeness must be furthered.
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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mmm ... its free-verse alright but it needs more emphasis and use of the imagery to pluck those bulbs out the garden and bring them all indoors. It is good in its understanding but needs further development with the lines to deliberate and conjure the imagination as its narrative tells the story it is rather flat and two dimensional it needs to ripen but not go off ... it has a good basis and a secure idea but the concept of its freeness must be furthered.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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thanks for the good review and your comments and suggestions. estory
Comment from Patty Palmer
A free verse poem about the awakening of each season. Starting out with the unblemished silence or winter. Then the crocuses down the street croak in the spring and summer come alive with their chirping. Dreaming of gardens and more. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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A free verse poem about the awakening of each season. Starting out with the unblemished silence or winter. Then the crocuses down the street croak in the spring and summer come alive with their chirping. Dreaming of gardens and more. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the poem. Glad all those images conjured up the spring and its colors for you estory
Comment from Therese Caron
Lovely, interesting poem! The entire poem is beautiful but I truly love the first stanza. Unblemished snow. And spring is on the way, a lovely thought. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Lovely, interesting poem! The entire poem is beautiful but I truly love the first stanza. Unblemished snow. And spring is on the way, a lovely thought. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2020
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the poem. Glad you liked the images and that one in particular that you mentioned. There is definitely a movement here from stillness to action, from contemplation to involvement that I wanted to get across. estory
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Good job!
Comment from Minglement
As a lover of gardening (and also reading and tea), I identified with this lovely poem. Tough choice :) I no longer have a garden but lovely lavender crocuses just bloomed on my window sill. Beautiful presentation. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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As a lover of gardening (and also reading and tea), I identified with this lovely poem. Tough choice :) I no longer have a garden but lovely lavender crocuses just bloomed on my window sill. Beautiful presentation. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I'm glad the images resonated so well for you and that's a great validation of the craft of the poem estory
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You are very welcome. I do not lie :)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello estory,
If I didn't know better, I would say this well-crafted and beautifully rendered poem describes my life perfectly. From the field of crocus beckoning me, to sipping tea, to dreaming about my gardens, you have depicted my life... I was a bit startled when I read it! And how I long for Spring!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Hello estory,
If I didn't know better, I would say this well-crafted and beautifully rendered poem describes my life perfectly. From the field of crocus beckoning me, to sipping tea, to dreaming about my gardens, you have depicted my life... I was a bit startled when I read it! And how I long for Spring!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thanks again for the exceptional review and all your encouraging comments supporting this poem. It was fun to write; I like spring and have ever since those terrible winters of the mid 90's in NY. estory
Comment from susand3022
Oh, Crocus!!! I can't wait, Estory! That reminds me to keep an eye out, and that THIS is the year that I'm going to go to town on the gardens in my back yard!... (I know... I say it every year and it never happens... it's a nice thought though) ;)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Oh, Crocus!!! I can't wait, Estory! That reminds me to keep an eye out, and that THIS is the year that I'm going to go to town on the gardens in my back yard!... (I know... I say it every year and it never happens... it's a nice thought though) ;)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. Glad you found it so inspiring; that's a great validation of the craft of the poem estory
Comment from Susan Larson
"You sit sipping tea, Caught between a good book And dreaming of gardens." And then, the dream comes true as "Bulbs, like buried treasures" win you over. Lovely.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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"You sit sipping tea, Caught between a good book And dreaming of gardens." And then, the dream comes true as "Bulbs, like buried treasures" win you over. Lovely.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. estory
