Apple Pie
tanka contest8 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Val Crisson
May I have a slice of the apple pie that you described so well in your five star Japanese tanka, with, with 22 syllables.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Hello Val Crisson
May I have a slice of the apple pie that you described so well in your five star Japanese tanka, with, with 22 syllables.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you Gert
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You are welcome Val Crisson
Gert
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the thought of blossoms turning into juicy apples to eat and ultimately we are served this wonderful dessert! The pie looks yummy and I enjoyed your sweet fruity words here Val, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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I love the thought of blossoms turning into juicy apples to eat and ultimately we are served this wonderful dessert! The pie looks yummy and I enjoyed your sweet fruity words here Val, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Apple Pie"
Is a Tanka Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
And good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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"Apple Pie"
Is a Tanka Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
And good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Your Tanka was well built with thoughts that tell a story about the fruit of the apple. Well done! I wish you Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Your Tanka was well built with thoughts that tell a story about the fruit of the apple. Well done! I wish you Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Mia Twysted
Apple Pie is simple and straight forward. It states that apples will come and they will be made into a pie and then you just assume from that point on they will be eaten. Very cute.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Apple Pie is simple and straight forward. It states that apples will come and they will be made into a pie and then you just assume from that point on they will be eaten. Very cute.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you - "very cute" is what I am after. I wanted to get away from the stogy tanka.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Yeah, the blossoms are the beginning. They give us hope for a fruitful harvest. Apple pie is just about my favorite. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Yeah, the blossoms are the beginning. They give us hope for a fruitful harvest. Apple pie is just about my favorite. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Your tanka fits the abbreviated format and calls to mind the apple season and the anticipation of all those apple treats warm from the oven! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Your tanka fits the abbreviated format and calls to mind the apple season and the anticipation of all those apple treats warm from the oven! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You are lighting up
my mailbox, Val, and
tempting me with apple pie
that looks delicious.
-A well written tanka
with effective imagery
and alliteration in the
opening lines.
-A good pivot line and
very good concluding lines.
-I like how you combine the
idea of spring blossoms being
ready for a baked apple pie.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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-You are lighting up
my mailbox, Val, and
tempting me with apple pie
that looks delicious.
-A well written tanka
with effective imagery
and alliteration in the
opening lines.
-A good pivot line and
very good concluding lines.
-I like how you combine the
idea of spring blossoms being
ready for a baked apple pie.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
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I am thrilled someone out knows what a tanka should be set up like. LOL This is a great review, and thank for catching my slip up earlier. I wanted to do something different from the usual "stogy" tanka, and glad us liked it.
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You are very welcome, Val, and I really appreciate your reply. It means a lot. Have a great day!
