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Comment from Sharon Davis
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An interesting poem, well composed and presented. The poece-srhythm flows well, making it an easy and enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you, Sharon, for your kind comments. They are appreciated very much.
    Have a pleasant evening and be well,
    Jesse
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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This wonderfully worded poem offers one a flight of imagination. We're born alone, we live alone, we die alone. In between life and death, we live in a fantasy world, a world of illusion. A complex philosophy explained by you in simple terms. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    I love your perspective on what is going on in my poem. 'A complex philosophy explained by me in simple terms.' I like the sound of that.
    Best wishes and thanks for sending me good luck to win the contest!
    Take care and stay safe,
    Jesse
Comment from Boogienights
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Sounds like an amazing place to be. This poem flows nicely and is so descriptive, I could see all the colors of love exploding. This is a great contest entry for poem of the month. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your kind words and encouragement for possibly winning the poem of the month award. What a treat that would be!
    Best wishes and have a nice night,
    Jesse
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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I love this stanza, it brings us back in the sphere of meditation and asking again what's there behinf the cuetain of the other dimenssion: "I face a happenstance delusion,
as if by magic touch;
I conjure an illusion
of a place I've never seen
where every color's fusion
becomes yellow, blue, or green.
My ears intently listen
to playful children sing.
It echoes with conclusion
that love lifts my self-esteem.
" Thank you for sharing anf good luck with your writings and the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you so much, Iza, for your detailed analysis of this poem, as well as for choosing the parts you love best.
    Best wishes to you as well, and thank you for offering me luck on the contest.
    Have a great evening,
    Jesse
Comment from papa55mike
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It is amazing how we search for many things that we already have, like love. What a wonderfully written poem. Congrats on being recognized!

Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thanks, Mike, for your unique perspective on what I was writing about. Your kind comments are greatly appreciated, and thanks for the congratulations for being recognized.
    Enjoy the evening,
    Jesse
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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The message comes through. Imagination can take us anywhere we want to go. We just need to realize how powerful it is and how to deal with the scenarios. Nicely rendered. Could be a winner!

Ralf

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you, Ralf, for your insights and kind words. As far as being a winner, I hope you are right!
    Have a lovely evening,
    Jesse
reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 15-Apr-2021
    We just have to make sure we vote.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    So true!
Comment from Dilettante junior
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Here is something extraordinarily written! It deviates from the norm in a perfect way. I enjoy the description of complex ideas into simple verse. The ability to conjure the senses up in writing. Bravo!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I appreciate the fact that you really get what I was going for in this poem. Your kindness encourages me to write even greater things in my future. Thanks for the excellent review and rating.
    Have a great upcoming weekend,
    Jesse
Comment from MissMerri
Exceptional
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A beautiful and meaningful poem Jesse. I loved every word and saw nothing to change at all.
Especially lovely were these lines:

"I conjure an illusion
of a place I've never seen
where every color's fusion
becomes yellow, blue, or green.
My ears intently listen
to playful children sing.
It echoes with conclusion
that love lifts my self-esteem."

Congratulations on the nomination for Poem of the Month. I wish you lots of votes. Hugs, MM

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2020
    Thank you, Miss Merri, for this wonderful review. Your kind words mean a lot to me. I appreciate you choosing the lines you liked best. It helps to learn what speaks the most to people. Thanks for the congrats! And the six star review as well! I hope you have a lovely rest of your week.
    Take care, Jesse
Comment from DeborahWrite
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Once Again, Jesse, I returned to Fanstory to read another outstanding poem of yours. I, too, who have studied Gender, view it as not an exact measure but on a continuum. I view may human and animal attributes this way as well. Your well-thought-out choice of words shows strength in your writing and thoughts. Congratulations on creating such an outstanding work!
My best,
Deborah

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Hello Deborah. This is a wonderful way to start the weekend. I see your intriguing review, with an exceptional rating waiting for me. You are only the second one, to mention the part about my seeing gender on a continuum. I welcome your shared view, and I agree that many attributes in both animals and people are on a continuum, as well. I am honored and humbled by your very kind comments about my thoughts and writing. You have truly made my day special. Have a great weekend.
    Take care, Jesse
reply by DeborahWrite on 15-Feb-2020
    Thank you, Jesse, you made my weekend special, too!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
    Smiles for both of us having wonderful weekends!
    Jesse
Comment from Gloria ....
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To me this reads like getting into the Zone, that place where the creative mind can soar with many possibilities coming from following a trail of light, or an image to its conclusion or expansion into something else.

Great job with a fine poem, Jesse. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
    This is a wonderful surprise to find this insightful review, to start my morning well. You've got the gist of this poem with your definition of being in the Zone. This is a positive review, and I appreciate your understanding of the poem, and your kind words very much.
    Take care, Jesse