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Comment from lancellot
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Yes, I agree the is does sound like a person who mind is open to infinite possibilities on a wide range of concepts and topics, or I could a person who is on some magic mushrooms and is refusing to share. Either way, the work was inspiring and well crafted.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your intriguing and kind comments about this poem. I appreciate the excellent review and rating.
    Have a great rest of your day.
    Jesse
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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It is true that we heal ourselves and happiness is attained through self healing and understanding ourselves, protecting us from evil and focusing on the good things in life. It is a matter of attitude. You certainly are appreciating life's gifts here, much enjoyed Jesse, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you, Dolly, for your astute perspective on my poem and what it was saying. I am grateful for life's gifts, which is most certainly true. I am glad you enjoyed my offering and wish you a wonderful day.
    Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
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Hi Jesse, so good to see you writing again. Your thoughtful poem is also very thought-provoking. I really like your conclusion after exploring a number of interesting thoughts. "Love lifts one's self esteem." So very true.
Well written.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Hello, Wendy.
    Thank you for stopping by and offering an insightful review. I am the proudest of, the ending of this poem, with its positive anthem, of love lifting, our self-esteem.
    Thank you for your kind words, and have a great day!
    Jesse

reply by Wendy G on 16-Apr-2021
    Yes, your ending is a universal truth, and in general the converse is true also. If one doesn't feel loved, the self-esteem and sense of personal value suffers.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    You are so right, Wendy!
    Have a wonderful day,
    Jesse
Comment from George 1
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A Happenstance Conclusion is like an anthem for open-mindedness and I think the randomness from which I believe all things have come. It's fun to read such an elegant exploration of such ideas.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    I love your open outlook on life, George! I believe in randomness as well. I appreciate your kind comments and high praise. I am glad you enjoyed reading this and wish you a pleasant evening.
    Jesse
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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I like the delusion that you were in a place where you have never been there. It is nice you end up; "My ears intently listen
to playful children sing. It echoes with conclusion
that love lifts my self-esteem." It is a pleasant ending.

My dreams of a new place is always scary and dangerous. I hate those dreams but they are out of my control.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your encouraging review. I am sorry that your dreams are scary and appear dangerous. Dreams are usually out of our control unless you have lucid dreaming, which I have had the privilege to experience from time to time. Thank you for choosing your favorite part of the poem. I like to have a strong ending.
    I appreciate your kind comments and have a nice evening.
    Jesse
Comment from Janetsue
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I enjoyed reading this and contemplating further upon the images you are providing readers. The rhyme is excellent, as well. I can see why it is a Poem of the Month contest entry. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your encouraging review. I am glad you enjoyed reading and pondering its message. I appreciate your kind words.
    Take care and have a great evening,
    Jesse
Comment from Sherry Asbury
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Oh, I love this!! My mind goes so many ways too. Never deny things...just think about them...one never knows. I am reading "Gone" - a spooky book that I think . I am not a ditzy dame, have a very high IQ and that tends to make me think and then think some more. This is very well-written, plausible and possible - write on, McDuff!!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Wow, Sherry, such high praise, and I love that you love this! I like to encourage readers to think about complex as well as seemingly simple concepts. The idea that you accept these things as "plausible and possible" ignites my spirit to great heights! Thank you so kindly, and have a great night!
    Jesse
Comment from Patty Palmer
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I've come to the conclusion that you're confusing me. LOL But your poem is very easy to read with the rhyme and rhythm. You've done a great job, even if I am confused now.
Patty

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    I am truly sorry if my poem confuses you, Patty. At least, as you say, it is easy to read with rhythm and rhyme. I appreciate your kind words, even if you are confused.
    Have a good evening, and do not take the confusion to heart.
    Jesse
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Jesse,

Wow! I did not receive notification for this post, but congratulations on the poem of the month entry! This is amazing! Where do I begin? I guess I will begin with your first three lines. Super alliteration...more importantly...So very intriguing...

"I slip into a semiconscious sphere,
where my psyche slides
onto a microscopic smear."

Wow again! I enjoyed your scattered rhymes and the depth of your voice.

"I fear no one wants to hear
this convoluted confession."

Thank you for offering this again for those of us that did not see it,

AnnaLinda
(Your Angel) lol


 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    First of all, I did not know that they were not notifying my fans of this post. Second of all, and more importantly, I am glad you are amazed at this poem and that you noticed the alliteration of the first three lines. I am happy you got a chance to read my poem and, that you wrote the most awesome review imaginable.
    Take care, my angel, and have a great evening!
    Jesse
reply by AnnaLinda on 15-Apr-2021
    Did you use the "revive" cert?
    It lasts 4 days instead of 3 and notifies your fans.

    Well...so glad you shared this beauty.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    No, I didn't. There are all kinds of rules, such as, it has to be at least two years old, and you have to edit it from the original. I am aiming for a Seal of Quality for a six-chapter book entitled, "Complete."
    Wish me luck!
    Jesse
reply by AnnaLinda on 15-Apr-2021
    Oh, yeah...I forgot the 2 year rule.
    Good for you! You will certainly attain your goal. Congrats ahead of time.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thanks, Angel, but I wouldn't be so sure. It could go either way. But, either way, I come out as a winner, because they will give me, an in-depth critique of my work, and how I can improve it.
    But, of course, I hope I get the Seal of Quality, for sure!
    Enjoy the night,
    Jesse
reply by AnnaLinda on 15-Apr-2021
    You will.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thanks for your shot of confidence!
reply by AnnaLinda on 15-Apr-2021
    🎖
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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A Happenstance Conclusion
by Jesse James Doty

Hello, Jesse,


It's harder to measure gender than most people think. My daughter didn't feel comfortable with female or male gender. She identifies as queer but it doesn't matter, she is my angelica. She doesn't care if people call her woman or gay...what matters is what she feels. I'm not sure if that is what you mean but that's what I thought about.

It sounds like you have a wonderful creative mind that can soar with several possibilities and imagination....expansion and transformation. Well done!


 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Hello Gypsy! That is high praise to say I have a wonderfully creative mind. Thank you so much for your kindness. I know of several people who go by the term non-binary, and I am still trying to wrap my head around the use of "they/them" pronouns. It seems hard to use in a sentence grammatically, for example, what if there are more than one of them in the room, do you refer to them as 'they' still, or what? All that said and done, I do applaud the use of the spectrum when referring to gender. I appreciate your open discussion in regards to gender and your daughter, and how she and you are dealing with the new concept.
    Have a great evening, and keep imagination and creativity alive!
    Jesse
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 16-Apr-2021
    I don't use they them with my daughter ...it is confusing but I do respect their choice.

    Thank you, Jesse :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Respect for your daughter, no matter what the choice, is the key. In regards to gender, compassion and understanding help considerably.
    Take care,
    Jesse