An Angel Named Cecile
Cecile's Golden Wings45 total reviews
Comment from Brian Hill
Love the simple and thoughtfully written tribute to someone you care for. Seeing her spirit receive her wings and depart on her journey with a smile and a wave. The art goes well with the words.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Love the simple and thoughtfully written tribute to someone you care for. Seeing her spirit receive her wings and depart on her journey with a smile and a wave. The art goes well with the words.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Brian!
It's an honor meeting you. Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. All of which is an honor. Cathy and I have a book "Love Long Distance" posted that you might enjoy. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
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Thank you For the nice comments...
Comment from kahpot
A beautiful short poem and tribute to a friend, your chosen artwork and presentation of this work is wonderful, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A beautiful short poem and tribute to a friend, your chosen artwork and presentation of this work is wonderful, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A "Salute," Kahpot!
Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to review our work. All of which is an honor. Best wishes for an awesome weekend ahead and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
Comment from gingermo
Amazing how a title and two lines of poetry can convey a comprehensive picture. A fitting tribute to someone near and dear and who has died. There is a gentle, hopeful mood to the poem. The fact that she waved and smiled made me think she was happy, yet there is a wistful pathos in that last line for those left behind.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Amazing how a title and two lines of poetry can convey a comprehensive picture. A fitting tribute to someone near and dear and who has died. There is a gentle, hopeful mood to the poem. The fact that she waved and smiled made me think she was happy, yet there is a wistful pathos in that last line for those left behind.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Gingermo!
It is an honor meeting you. Thanks for the review kind words and taking the time to read our work. Cathy and I have a book "Love Long Distance" posted that you might enjoy. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello, loved all of this. The author notes, the publishing choices, and the way you kept the actual dedication, short but beautiful. It is a powerful work with identifiable and tried and true imagery and I am very sorry for your loss, and of course, Cecile's family's' loss.
I also think the art choice suits the poem. Perhaps one two many exclamation marks, but that's neither here nor there really. And all writing is subjective.
But the reason for the six is that for me the brevity gave the poem an unspoken depth. Simple is elegant.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Eve.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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Hello, loved all of this. The author notes, the publishing choices, and the way you kept the actual dedication, short but beautiful. It is a powerful work with identifiable and tried and true imagery and I am very sorry for your loss, and of course, Cecile's family's' loss.
I also think the art choice suits the poem. Perhaps one two many exclamation marks, but that's neither here nor there really. And all writing is subjective.
But the reason for the six is that for me the brevity gave the poem an unspoken depth. Simple is elegant.
Thanks for sharing your writing, Eve.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
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WOW . . . a "SALUTE," Eve!
Thanks for the "Exceptional" review, kind words and taking the time to read our work. All of which is an honor. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Cathy and Bill
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful Valentine love poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good heartfelt words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. May God bless you my friend. Teri
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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This is a very beautiful Valentine love poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good heartfelt words and very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. May God bless you my friend. Teri
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Teri!
Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read my work. Best wishes and God Bless.
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Commando
Smiles to you for letting us know that you are Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~--your two lines has lots to say inf view
words that Cecile with her golden wings is now with all the angels. Gert
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hello Commando
Smiles to you for letting us know that you are Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~--your two lines has lots to say inf view
words that Cecile with her golden wings is now with all the angels. Gert
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Gert!
Thanks for the review and kind words.
Respectfully,
Bill
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Commando You are welcome.
Gert
Comment from judester
It is comforting to believe that our loved ones are moving to a better place when they die. A little solace to the ones left behind. A beautiful tribute and peaceful farewell to Cecile, cheers, judester
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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It is comforting to believe that our loved ones are moving to a better place when they die. A little solace to the ones left behind. A beautiful tribute and peaceful farewell to Cecile, cheers, judester
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Judester!
Thanks for the review and kind words.
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment from Harley Dayman Rayne Quinn
Something's are the best when it's brief and the picture helps a lot.
I loved reading it and could feel this person was an angel on earth
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Something's are the best when it's brief and the picture helps a lot.
I loved reading it and could feel this person was an angel on earth
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Harley!
Thanks for the review and kind words.
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
Funny -- there's also a contest going on right now for words of kind sympathy that would/might comfort a grieving individual. This precious and heartfelt poem would also meet that criteria, I think. *smile*
How kind you are to write a poem like this for Tootie/Cathy as Valentine's rolls around without her mom. My own mom just turned 75 and I am trying to prepare myself for THAT DAY to come, but I just can't bear to think of it. A world without my mom in it? Nope. Won't process.
Though I like your poem quite a lot, there are several changes I would make. *smile* (Remember -- they say there's nothing a writer likes better than editing another writer's work!) haha
All of the following notes/suggestions are tiny little things and you'd be forgiven for ignoring every one of them if you choose to. OR use what you like and toss the rest. You get it.
My 'job' here is to show you things you may have missed. YOUR job is to take the broader, expanded view and figure out how it fits into your original purpose for the piece - then make adjustments as needed, IF needed. *smile* That's my big philosophy here - if anyone cares. hahaha
Points to Ponder:
1.) ~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine Waldron*
--> It's always been my opinion (and we know what THOSE are worth!) that the more author's notes required to 'explain' your post or piece of writing the more of a POTENTIAL indication the writer hasn't done his/her job within the body of the post. Make sense?
~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine (Tootie) Waldron*
--or--
~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine "Tootie" Waldron*
2.) She smiled, and waved goodbye, then flew away.
--> no comma after 'smiled'
--> She smiled and waved goodbye, then flew away. (edited version)
3.) Too many exclamation marks:
--> Cecile's Golden Wings! (in post description)
--> An Angel Named Cecile! (title)
--> Dedicated to Cecile Waldron (in sub-heading)
--> An Angel Named Cecile! (in body of post)
--> I was taught that you should use exclamation marks EXTREMELY sparingly. For example, in a novel, you'd only CONSIDER using this form of punctuation, at MOST, once for every two page spread. But some editors will not even allow you to use more than one in a whole chapter!
You see what I'm saying.
Hope something here will be helpful -- good luck in the edits (if necessary) and in the voting! Thanks!
*Certainly wouldn't consider lowering the rating since these are all OPINIONS. haha*
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Bill,
Funny -- there's also a contest going on right now for words of kind sympathy that would/might comfort a grieving individual. This precious and heartfelt poem would also meet that criteria, I think. *smile*
How kind you are to write a poem like this for Tootie/Cathy as Valentine's rolls around without her mom. My own mom just turned 75 and I am trying to prepare myself for THAT DAY to come, but I just can't bear to think of it. A world without my mom in it? Nope. Won't process.
Though I like your poem quite a lot, there are several changes I would make. *smile* (Remember -- they say there's nothing a writer likes better than editing another writer's work!) haha
All of the following notes/suggestions are tiny little things and you'd be forgiven for ignoring every one of them if you choose to. OR use what you like and toss the rest. You get it.
My 'job' here is to show you things you may have missed. YOUR job is to take the broader, expanded view and figure out how it fits into your original purpose for the piece - then make adjustments as needed, IF needed. *smile* That's my big philosophy here - if anyone cares. hahaha
Points to Ponder:
1.) ~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine Waldron*
--> It's always been my opinion (and we know what THOSE are worth!) that the more author's notes required to 'explain' your post or piece of writing the more of a POTENTIAL indication the writer hasn't done his/her job within the body of the post. Make sense?
~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine (Tootie) Waldron*
--or--
~Dedicated to Cecile Waldron~
*Mother of Catherine "Tootie" Waldron*
2.) She smiled, and waved goodbye, then flew away.
--> no comma after 'smiled'
--> She smiled and waved goodbye, then flew away. (edited version)
3.) Too many exclamation marks:
--> Cecile's Golden Wings! (in post description)
--> An Angel Named Cecile! (title)
--> Dedicated to Cecile Waldron (in sub-heading)
--> An Angel Named Cecile! (in body of post)
--> I was taught that you should use exclamation marks EXTREMELY sparingly. For example, in a novel, you'd only CONSIDER using this form of punctuation, at MOST, once for every two page spread. But some editors will not even allow you to use more than one in a whole chapter!
You see what I'm saying.
Hope something here will be helpful -- good luck in the edits (if necessary) and in the voting! Thanks!
*Certainly wouldn't consider lowering the rating since these are all OPINIONS. haha*
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Robyn!
Cathy and I thank you for the review, kind words, and "HELP." All of your suggestions have been edited in. You are an "AWESOME WRITER," our dear friend--toot, toot. :) Best wishes for a great week and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Cathy and Bill.
Comment from Zoe K.
It's beautifully executed. It was a concise and precise way to spread a profound pain and love at the same time. Making peace with herself knowing that she would be better.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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It's beautifully executed. It was a concise and precise way to spread a profound pain and love at the same time. Making peace with herself knowing that she would be better.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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A "SALUTE," Zoe!
Thanks for the review and kind words.
Respectfully,
Bill
