Oh Life!
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Comment from kahpot
Excellent, the message in these words is great-we cannot hope to please everyone and should not wear ourselves out attempting to, very well written****kahpot
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Excellent, the message in these words is great-we cannot hope to please everyone and should not wear ourselves out attempting to, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
Comment from LJbutterfly
Truer words have never been written, and as writers, we all know you can't please everyone. One person can review your work and love it, while another dislikes it, or reads it and choses not to leave a review. There is always someone who feels opposite. I especially like the 4th line. "If I'm soft, silk, mild, you taunt." Kindness, softness, silk or mildness is considered by many as weakness. You can never please everyone.
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Truer words have never been written, and as writers, we all know you can't please everyone. One person can review your work and love it, while another dislikes it, or reads it and choses not to leave a review. There is always someone who feels opposite. I especially like the 4th line. "If I'm soft, silk, mild, you taunt." Kindness, softness, silk or mildness is considered by many as weakness. You can never please everyone.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from MissMerri
Well, I'm not sure to whom you might be speaking here, but it seems there is little basis for an enduring relationship. LOL It reminded me of when my husband is driving and I feel like I need to "help" him all the way there and all the way back. He likes to tell people, "Adonna drove all the way here, but she let me hold the wheel." He's a good sport about it, usually. Your words are very clear and make a lot of sense. Thanks for sharing. MM
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Well, I'm not sure to whom you might be speaking here, but it seems there is little basis for an enduring relationship. LOL It reminded me of when my husband is driving and I feel like I need to "help" him all the way there and all the way back. He likes to tell people, "Adonna drove all the way here, but she let me hold the wheel." He's a good sport about it, usually. Your words are very clear and make a lot of sense. Thanks for sharing. MM
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from AnnaLinda
Yup! A lot of wisdom in this 5-7-5-7-7 poem. I like how you started you 4 lines with "if." Yes, we must be true to our own selves as there is always a critic along life's path.
You have a lot of nice alliteration in this short truthful piece.
I just learned that your model/star in your chosen picture is most
likely a male. haha
Anna
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Yup! A lot of wisdom in this 5-7-5-7-7 poem. I like how you started you 4 lines with "if." Yes, we must be true to our own selves as there is always a critic along life's path.
You have a lot of nice alliteration in this short truthful piece.
I just learned that your model/star in your chosen picture is most
likely a male. haha
Anna
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from lancellot
I advance, you warn
- This line, I get, it makes sense. If you advance on someone, you're likely to get a warning.
if fast speed straight, you caution
- now, you're starting to drift.
maybe if write:
- If I speed through, you caution
After the second line, I was at a lose. I read and reread. I still don't understand it.
updated:
Okay, I see it.
Nothing you do is right. This person will suggest want the opposite from you.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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I advance, you warn
- This line, I get, it makes sense. If you advance on someone, you're likely to get a warning.
if fast speed straight, you caution
- now, you're starting to drift.
maybe if write:
- If I speed through, you caution
After the second line, I was at a lose. I read and reread. I still don't understand it.
updated:
Okay, I see it.
Nothing you do is right. This person will suggest want the opposite from you.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the suggestion. I have changed the poem. Please read and rate it if you like, you may also read the other poem that was also edited and I wrote.
Please read both the poems and rate per your wisdom.
Wish you every success in your chosen goal,
With the kindest personal regards,
Yes, I am nominating your name for....
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
A learner writer
08/06/2021
Comment from TammyRenee
It took me a couple of times to read to get it to sink in. As a new writer myself I guess that is something that needed for a more abstract thinker. I haven quite gotten there, maybe my writing is still to simple. Overall I enjoyed your meaning for living in this life...if I got that right.
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It took me a couple of times to read to get it to sink in. As a new writer myself I guess that is something that needed for a more abstract thinker. I haven quite gotten there, maybe my writing is still to simple. Overall I enjoyed your meaning for living in this life...if I got that right.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I read this to my husband for his thoughts on your poem. He told me it is deeply emotional, and I agree. We can never please the one we love all the time, and sometimes it's hard to make sense of them. Well done, you did a great job with this one. :)) Sandra xx
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I read this to my husband for his thoughts on your poem. He told me it is deeply emotional, and I agree. We can never please the one we love all the time, and sometimes it's hard to make sense of them. Well done, you did a great job with this one. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing these words of wisdom with us. Yes, it's impossible to please people. The only being we really need to be worried about pleasing is God and He's there to help us.
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Thank you for sharing these words of wisdom with us. Yes, it's impossible to please people. The only being we really need to be worried about pleasing is God and He's there to help us.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I'm not entirely sure what you want to say with this poem, but as I see it it could be about the illusions some people might have, hence all the contradictions of the well chosen words. I may be wrong, of course. All best, Ulla:)))
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Hi there, I'm not entirely sure what you want to say with this poem, but as I see it it could be about the illusions some people might have, hence all the contradictions of the well chosen words. I may be wrong, of course. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi there
I advance, you warn
if fast speed straight, you caution
if slow sloth, you heat
if soft loose silk mild, you taunt
if hard harsh firm bold, you roast
Well that took me completely by surprise - BOOM :)
Take care, Pete
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Hi there
I advance, you warn
if fast speed straight, you caution
if slow sloth, you heat
if soft loose silk mild, you taunt
if hard harsh firm bold, you roast
Well that took me completely by surprise - BOOM :)
Take care, Pete
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
