Oh Life!
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Comment from Aleksandramarie
ha, ha, ha,
my last four pieces I have had only 1 in 4 takers for reviewing..
head scratchers abound, and only the brave venture where
they do not understand.
But then, scratching isn't a forbidden fruit, so you have me laughing
at this little bit of throw up...
cause I get it completely, and for me then it is GOOD!
smiles and laughter, mspotter
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ha, ha, ha,
my last four pieces I have had only 1 in 4 takers for reviewing..
head scratchers abound, and only the brave venture where
they do not understand.
But then, scratching isn't a forbidden fruit, so you have me laughing
at this little bit of throw up...
cause I get it completely, and for me then it is GOOD!
smiles and laughter, mspotter
Comment Written 28-Mar-2006
Comment from Senyai
This is a great tanka, Alcreator Critic. It seems to tell about the poet's feeling that if his work is too complicated, then it is misunderstood, perhaps? It lends to many images indeed, leaving much to the readers imagination.
My pleasure to read and review.
All the best,
Senyai
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This is a great tanka, Alcreator Critic. It seems to tell about the poet's feeling that if his work is too complicated, then it is misunderstood, perhaps? It lends to many images indeed, leaving much to the readers imagination.
My pleasure to read and review.
All the best,
Senyai
Comment Written 28-Mar-2006
Comment from AuroraSky
And there is always someone pointing...seems you've had a little bit of poetic fun and/or relief in this tanka poem.
Good luck out there.
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And there is always someone pointing...seems you've had a little bit of poetic fun and/or relief in this tanka poem.
Good luck out there.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2006
Comment from celebrity_pets
Interesting Tanka not my kind of poetry ..usually... but you have managed to tweak my concience with your humble offerings and subtle message here ... ...Well Done
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Interesting Tanka not my kind of poetry ..usually... but you have managed to tweak my concience with your humble offerings and subtle message here ... ...Well Done
Comment Written 28-Mar-2006
Comment from Robbi
I get the first 5 and the first 7 but then I find a 6, not another 5 . For shame you fudged. Now how many let you get away with it? LOL. An interesting little piece of poetry but I'd fix that 3 line to read a 5. LOL. So much for structure. Robbi
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I get the first 5 and the first 7 but then I find a 6, not another 5 . For shame you fudged. Now how many let you get away with it? LOL. An interesting little piece of poetry but I'd fix that 3 line to read a 5. LOL. So much for structure. Robbi
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from grannyeri
Like this type of poetic form, the tanka, like a haiku with two more lines of 7 syllables added. Topic interesting - advance, turn back, no matter what you try, everything is made fun at, or ridiculed - nothing is as you want it to be. Lines flow quickly, and simply stated. Easy to read and understand. Nothing seems good enough, no matter what you do.
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Like this type of poetic form, the tanka, like a haiku with two more lines of 7 syllables added. Topic interesting - advance, turn back, no matter what you try, everything is made fun at, or ridiculed - nothing is as you want it to be. Lines flow quickly, and simply stated. Easy to read and understand. Nothing seems good enough, no matter what you do.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from LScribeHarris
This has a good purpose behind it, but there was one too many syllables in the third line. "Open heart, you look at" has six syllables instead of five. For the break in structure, I'm having to take off a star. I do like the phrasing structure you've taken, deleting the subject in each but the first phrase. It's interesting, and keeps anonymity within the poem.
~Scribe
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This has a good purpose behind it, but there was one too many syllables in the third line. "Open heart, you look at" has six syllables instead of five. For the break in structure, I'm having to take off a star. I do like the phrasing structure you've taken, deleting the subject in each but the first phrase. It's interesting, and keeps anonymity within the poem.
~Scribe
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from Jewell McChesney
I advance, you warn
If faster, you too caution
Open heart, you look at
If write simply, you jeer at
If hard or complex, point at
Sucks donit?
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I advance, you warn
If faster, you too caution
Open heart, you look at
If write simply, you jeer at
If hard or complex, point at
Sucks donit?
..........................................................
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from EmileJP
Beautiful words expressed with the heart of a poet. Your words define the heart of poetry , which is often buried, lost among the rules and regiment that some insist must be adhered to. When "impressionism" emerged from the souls of painters it was shunned by the art world, for their interpretations of art did not allow form that did not follow the traditions of the masters, yet today these artist are the masters that we study. The words and their meaning take preference over style and structure for styles can change with time while emotions are eternal.
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Beautiful words expressed with the heart of a poet. Your words define the heart of poetry , which is often buried, lost among the rules and regiment that some insist must be adhered to. When "impressionism" emerged from the souls of painters it was shunned by the art world, for their interpretations of art did not allow form that did not follow the traditions of the masters, yet today these artist are the masters that we study. The words and their meaning take preference over style and structure for styles can change with time while emotions are eternal.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
Comment from volunteer angel
I had to laugh over this little verse. It's so true to life. Whatever one does, someone will point out a mistake or laugh over it. Not everyone thinks the way we do. So with that in mind, we just keep plugging along and go with the flow- right?
Nice job. V.A.
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I had to laugh over this little verse. It's so true to life. Whatever one does, someone will point out a mistake or laugh over it. Not everyone thinks the way we do. So with that in mind, we just keep plugging along and go with the flow- right?
Nice job. V.A.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2006
