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Comment from National Scholar
Hahaha! It made me laugh so originally. The truth is visible, visually correctly portrayed. Excellent is the concept, full of truth everyone feels, so it is no wonder as the poet puts note of expression. There is always a dilemma and dissatisfaction, whatever one does there is someone to point at. Such a gifted poet is truly recognized with the FS stamp of Recognition – All Time Best. Indeed, it deserves for. ALAS! NO SIX STARS HERE!
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Hahaha! It made me laugh so originally. The truth is visible, visually correctly portrayed. Excellent is the concept, full of truth everyone feels, so it is no wonder as the poet puts note of expression. There is always a dilemma and dissatisfaction, whatever one does there is someone to point at. Such a gifted poet is truly recognized with the FS stamp of Recognition – All Time Best. Indeed, it deserves for. ALAS! NO SIX STARS HERE!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2006
Comment from judybonin
this is a complex poem for me. i had to read it severaly times before i truly understood. i think this is writing at its best. Judy
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this is a complex poem for me. i had to read it severaly times before i truly understood. i think this is writing at its best. Judy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2006
Comment from Poet_Only
I read it over and over again and simply could not get past the fact that the last three lines end in "at". I really hate to see this in poems (It's sort of my pet peeve).
You did stick to the Tanka scheme which is good, but for me there was just something missing.
Jason
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I read it over and over again and simply could not get past the fact that the last three lines end in "at". I really hate to see this in poems (It's sort of my pet peeve).
You did stick to the Tanka scheme which is good, but for me there was just something missing.
Jason
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from MaddyB
Alcreator
With libraries of dictionaries,
And eons of time,
Some souls could yet not realize
Their eternal drive to criticize.
Maddy :>}
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Alcreator
With libraries of dictionaries,
And eons of time,
Some souls could yet not realize
Their eternal drive to criticize.
Maddy :>}
Comment Written 01-Apr-2006
Comment from NettieC
Hi Alcreator Writer,
Some people will always find something to judge. It bears out the adage you can't please everyone...therefore, just please yourself.
Nettie
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
Some people will always find something to judge. It bears out the adage you can't please everyone...therefore, just please yourself.
Nettie
Comment Written 31-Mar-2006
Comment from edb
Well, I love the short ones. This one was a little tough for me. There is some great imagery here, that is, if I got it right. I can' t believe that I would ever say this because, for me, the shorter the better... Maybe you could expand this a little. Good work though...
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Well, I love the short ones. This one was a little tough for me. There is some great imagery here, that is, if I got it right. I can' t believe that I would ever say this because, for me, the shorter the better... Maybe you could expand this a little. Good work though...
Comment Written 30-Mar-2006
Comment from sellgirls
Look at what you're writing with an open mind and heart, otherwise we might miss the meaning by looking too closely at the form. If it is too complex, someone will say it should be more simple. If it's too simple, others will say it should have more complexity. In the end, you can satisfy only yourself. And that is who matters the most, anyway! Hey, did you say all that in 5 lines?
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Look at what you're writing with an open mind and heart, otherwise we might miss the meaning by looking too closely at the form. If it is too complex, someone will say it should be more simple. If it's too simple, others will say it should have more complexity. In the end, you can satisfy only yourself. And that is who matters the most, anyway! Hey, did you say all that in 5 lines?
Comment Written 30-Mar-2006
Comment from mswritealot
A little chuckle from over here. Excellent form. Profound content. No, you just cant please everyone. So stick to yourself. Very good point
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A little chuckle from over here. Excellent form. Profound content. No, you just cant please everyone. So stick to yourself. Very good point
Comment Written 30-Mar-2006
Comment from enza13us
Excellent message in just a few lines. You can't please everyone, just have to be yourself and keep your own style. Well written poem.
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Excellent message in just a few lines. You can't please everyone, just have to be yourself and keep your own style. Well written poem.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2006
Comment from marion
Hi Alcreater
So very true and so very few lines to get the message across. I think it is clever, easily understood and just plain great! (and different)
marion
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Hi Alcreater
So very true and so very few lines to get the message across. I think it is clever, easily understood and just plain great! (and different)
marion
Comment Written 30-Mar-2006
