Second Base
Young lovers take it to the next step.9 total reviews
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Martie, this is indeed the next step for many young lovers. The pulse quickens, and the whole body becomes highly sensitive. A romance poem, without mistake and love is in the air without a doubt. In five lines well done!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Martie, this is indeed the next step for many young lovers. The pulse quickens, and the whole body becomes highly sensitive. A romance poem, without mistake and love is in the air without a doubt. In five lines well done!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Wils
Second base; the place that any young buck wants to get to. This piece effectively shows the physical steps he goes through to get there. Thanks for sharing.
Geoff
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Second base; the place that any young buck wants to get to. This piece effectively shows the physical steps he goes through to get there. Thanks for sharing.
Geoff
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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You're welcome! Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Second Base"
Is a 5 Line Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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"Second Base"
Is a 5 Line Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the kind words and good wishes.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Hmmmm this is a steamy, romantic five-liner and a very good entry for the contest as well! Young love is indeed extraordinary every emotion is heightened and every touch is special! Best wishes and good luck to you!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Hmmmm this is a steamy, romantic five-liner and a very good entry for the contest as well! Young love is indeed extraordinary every emotion is heightened and every touch is special! Best wishes and good luck to you!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you most kindly!
Comment from phill doran
Ah yes Martie;
I always begins with Chemistry and ends in Biology (and, invited or not, baby makes three).
Very well constructed in the rather tight and specific format of the contest, in which I wish you well.
As you have elected not to punctuate the piece, perhaps consider presenting it all in lower-case and make it more minimalist - just a thought.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Ah yes Martie;
I always begins with Chemistry and ends in Biology (and, invited or not, baby makes three).
Very well constructed in the rather tight and specific format of the contest, in which I wish you well.
As you have elected not to punctuate the piece, perhaps consider presenting it all in lower-case and make it more minimalist - just a thought.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Thank you for the suggestion; thank you for the lovely review; and thank you for the good wishes! This is all new to me and I am enjoying the "trial". I am a rhyming poet by nature (as all my books would indicate) but I am enjoying this possibly fruitful challenge.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Martie, I hope your day is going well. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the five line poem well. Just one question, what exactly is second base? I was never quite sure what the bases meant, just what the homerun was, and who doesn't want to hit a homerun? lol Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Hello Martie, I hope your day is going well. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the five line poem well. Just one question, what exactly is second base? I was never quite sure what the bases meant, just what the homerun was, and who doesn't want to hit a homerun? lol Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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LOL ~ aah, second base; the next step beyond the first kiss. Thank you again for the review and the good wishes.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your write is full of anticipation and loving sentiments, the magic of the wait and the rising of the passion filling the heart with desire, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Your write is full of anticipation and loving sentiments, the magic of the wait and the rising of the passion filling the heart with desire, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Barbaraj1
With all those symptoms, it seems like love is in the air. This is a very nice poem and is a good entry for the 5 line poem contest. This is a romantic poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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With all those symptoms, it seems like love is in the air. This is a very nice poem and is a good entry for the 5 line poem contest. This is a romantic poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Mistydawn
What an interesting, descriptive poem. You painted a vivid picture using few words. It's so well-written that it takes the reader back to their younger days. Makes them remember what they felt like when they were with their first crush. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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What an interesting, descriptive poem. You painted a vivid picture using few words. It's so well-written that it takes the reader back to their younger days. Makes them remember what they felt like when they were with their first crush. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2020
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Thank you! Happy I could evoke good memories.
